All Comments on 'The Broussard Sisters Ch. 11'

I followed the series 2 years ago. Although there were too many embedded stories I enjoyed following the main characters. Paul and his girlfriends were an odd but likable and well characterized group and your writing is decent. However, I find this latest installment even more scattered and bitter. Almost all the characters have issues and certainly the town is an uglier place. The sex scenes too, tend to edge on the ugly side. In anal sex scenes, for example, you tend to focus on the clean-up afterwards.

OK - I am aware you really don't care what your readers think about your stories from previous comments you have made. But, I have read almost every one of them and for the most part have enjoyed the stories, even though there seem to be an awful lot of Lesbians, or Bi-sexual females in those towns. Must be the water down there, or somethin like that, but then again, maybe my age and where I grew up has something to do with my viewpoint on the subject.

That said, I think you are a good writer and spin an interesting story(s), with rich characters, but there is one serious problem and it is not entirely due to my memory. The problem is there are so many characters to keep track of that I wish I had charted all the names and relationships when I started reading the first one. You would be doing your readers a great favor if you would supply an outline, or schematic from the foundational story on who is who's child, related to, once married to, etc. When I started on this story, having read the last chapter some months back, I had little clue who all the characters were, or were related to, other than Candy, Cindy, Paul and Pam. This basically makes understanding why the characters are doing what they are much more difficult and your stories would be much richer and enjoyable to the reader with a reference chart handy. Maybe you should even include a reference as to which story they first appeared in.

Not posting as an Anon and never have, so give it some thought. I guess I could take this on, but that is one heck of a lot of re-reading and to be truthful, I had started the project, but thought you were through with the Broussard Sisters and threw it away.

Thanks for writing.

I am someone who has read the previous stories when they were released and always looked forward to the next one. This chapter seems very disjointed and like its trying to fill in blanks from all the people instead of telling a story, the Sex their was tended to be short and lacking in details, the care and love most the characters used to show seemed missing, or pushed aside so you could show something bad happening. You also put in a lot of details about the school and children that seemed page filler, rather than part of moving the plot along.

I Hope chapt 12 can bring things back towards your previous style.

I enjoy reading your stories. This one along with Oddball are my two favorites of your stories. However this chapter seemed to take a darker turn and there were many places where I had to put the story down and come back to it later. I really hope your next chapter is happier. I like reading your stories but I really hope there's a happy ending.

This story has more ups and downs,twists and turns,and when you think,I don,t really want to read any more something comes along to change you mind. If this is truly how it is in America thank god I live in Australia.It gives the impression that not much good happens there,Having looked very closely at both systems there is a lot Aussies can teach America,but not much in the opposite direction,sad really

Ugh.... To be honest I'm actually on page four, haven't gotten very far in this chapter... And I've skimmed a LOT in this chapter. There are just so damned many new characters that I just can't fucking keep up... And you know what? Honestly since Candy (and celine to some degree) was killed off, I've just gotten pissed off and become disinterested. ...I mean, one of the four main characters that we've grown to love and expected to see to the end, just fucking randomly killed off? I'm fucking pissed... Almost as pissed as when that fucking retard Paul didn't MARRY ALL THREE of the girls!! I mean, fucking really?! He's been dating and fucking them all for years, in love with them all, and he only wants to marry one? It's totally out of fucking character for him!! ...yeah two of them would just be ceremonies, but who cares.??!

...it's going to be hard to push through the story, if I even can :(

Don't remember what page Im on here, but what the fuck is Paul's problem again? Why is he boozing like a retarded monkey, totally out of character for him? ...and why are Candy's parents, now that she's dead, so worried about pregnant Cindy? (I got that right, didn't I?). ...i mean really, did any of the parents doubt for one freaking second that he wasn't fucking ALL THREE GIRLS THE WHOLE TIME? I mean,you don't date all three, take them all on the honeymoon and then live with them all cause the conversation is good, yeesh!

I really liked the story in the beginning but there are so many people in it now that its really confusing, that and the fact that there isn't any enjoyment in reading really since everyones lives are so fucking depressing :(. When the main nexus of characters lives and story goes to shit, well it kind of wrecks the whole train for me :(

Continue to love this series. Thank you!

I have really enjoyed this series to this point, but this particular one seems like it's lost the thread a little bit, with the focus on a bunch of new characters and plot lines. I trust the author to tie it up well, considering his overall writing ability, but this one was much tougher to get through than the previous installments.

You had a good story going and then you turned into a gang member and destroyed any decency the story had . I don't understand and im done ! You blew it !!!