by xelliebabex
Yes the second chapter which was submitted the same time as this one is in the mind control category :)
And Venturer and Cities of Power. Will you be finishing those stories also, because I don't want to start reading this one if you aren't going to finish it to. I don't mean to be rude but I like your stories and would enjoy reading the rest of them.
I like your other ongoing stories so much better. When the women get little to no enjoyment it's kind of hard to read about this kind of oppression.
I am curious about where exactly your going to go with this one. Jake is interested in her because of their shared passion and with him searching for an actual love, I don't see her becoming mindless.
It is well written, and has certainly grabbed my attention so I did give it a five. I'm just not certain where you are going with it.
I enjoyed reading your other stories and this one is no different. Looking forward to further instalments :-)
authors shouldn't publish stories, even on a site like this, until they are finished. it is hard to keep track of stories that are released only partially. i lose interest, just as in television when there is too much time between one season and the next. that's the reason for the one star.
The 2nd part was submitted to the site at the same time as this part but there was confusion with its ending and the site manager pm'd me to check it, it should be up very soon as it is ready to go. Apologies.
I have a bad habit of writing in series and leaving loose ends so i can go back and revisit series but i have full intentions of making this three parts. Third is on its way, thank you to those people who like it apologies to those who are disappointed that the 2nd part was not here along with this one.
You are without a doubt one of my top authors :-) Love this and can't wait for more
This story was creepy as hell. This was like some twisted episode of The Twilight Zone. Dolls creep me out as well as unwanted advances.
This is so intriguing. I was so excited I have not read anything this good in a long time .... thank you
So creeptastic and amazing. I can't wait to read chapter 2. Please keep going!!!
Easily one of the best stories I've ever read here...I sincerely hope that the following chapters in what will become a lengthy series can hold up against such a good start! That being said, I noticed you said on the 11th the second chapter would be up soon...please end this torture and post it!! And I hope ch3 will be ready soon as well (: Please dont stop!
It frequently does that after finishing a potentially great story. Wow!
. Audios Jillian, hullo little dolly. She is so screwed. Wow.
I think this would go good in the horror section. I think I'd rather swallow my own tongue and die than be subjected to that freakshow. The one thing I don't get is why the collector didn't want the other girls he had the doctor experiment on to end up in a vegetative state. Dolls are inanimate objects after all. I would think they would be the most doll like after that.
Ridiculous. Why would you waste your time writing this story? This is Rape and Abduction combined into one insane story of a person with more money than he knows what to do with, indulging himself with what he cannot "earn" on his own merits.
she was not going to let this happen, she found if she rubbed hard enough against her ties she could start her wrists to bleed so when Joe came to wake her in the morning, Jillian was gone and all that was left was a very pale doll like creature dressed for display. Jillian had released herself from the torture, her spirit free to soar. TK
I'm having a hard time with this part of the story. I don't know if I'm frightened for her or if I'm frightened for me!! Keep writing!!
Unfortunately perverts like the Jaque Millieu are around and such horrific abductions have been happen …. So its hard to keep this out of mind …. Poor girl, finding yourself in a situation like her, no idea how to express myself ….. and hopefully the police may hunting them successfully