by Eroscott
Story became entirely predictable and less interesting with each chapter, with the exception of the needlessly large amount of time spent on Rachel's ATM issues, which was not sexy at all.
Better luck next time
Dear anonymous, I'm sorry I didn't write up to your standards. I'm sure you write much better than me. Perhaps you would share a link where I could read an example of your writing.
I don't have a link, but I have a paper offer from a publishing company mentioned on black-&-white TV.
Didn't finish Page 1 due to inability to comprehend due to the innumerable mistakes.