All Comments on 'The Extended Family Ch. 01'

Nice story line for your older male readers !! Love, fantasy, tenderness, fulfilling a need, and rediscovery all wrapped up into a well written mini-novel. Waiting patiently for more. Thank you.

The story line is wonderful - but I'd like to offer a few very minor comments.

Sort of along the lines of "continuity" in film.

It seems that Marilyn's hair grows with each hour. It's first described as mid length, then less than 24 hours later it's long - apparently down her back.

Also, you talk about tasting their combined juices after a lengthy shower washing each others nooks and crannies. Possible - but if she moistens that much that quickly, there likely wasn't too much of the combined "Us" to taste.

As I said, minor comments - nitpicking even. But, I hope these comments are taken as constructive criticism.

HELLO FROM THE FROZEN NORTH:

I'm just beginning the series. It is actually literature, not mere pornography. I plan to look up Mel a little later. The open-endedness is a good idea.

CT

I can see that there are going to be many joy-filled hours of reading ahead.

Thank you.

Thank you writer - I am looking forward to a great read.

The story was wonderful. It brought together two people who were each down on their luck. One through the loss of his wife and the other through the anger taken out of her by her husband.

Brought together through circumstance, they end up finding out about each other and making love over and over and over.

you're a very talented writer. well done. 5 stars, of course!

Robust characters, good story, and steamy eroticism - you achieve what I attempt in my stories. I will read more of your work.