All Comments on 'The Family Carrom Game Pt. 01'

by gen_man69

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SomethingInTheWaySheMovesSomethingInTheWaySheMovesover 6 years ago
Run on sentences. Look it up.

And stop with the physical descriptions: "I am 21 and I am a college student, 5 feet 10 and 150lb." And, "She is quite tall at 5ft 7 with 32-26-34 figure with lovely C cups that she never flaunted whilst out of the house to the disappointment of most of my buddies." That shit was old when losers would make up shit to send in to fucking Penthouse Magazine, twenty or thirty years ago.

Eric_ShiftEric_Shiftover 6 years ago
Are you kidding?

Of course you have to go on.

Rwa4768Rwa4768over 6 years ago
Yes

You definitely have to keep writing more about this family.

gen_man69gen_man69over 6 years agoAuthor
Thanks

Thanks for the comments guys! Await part two soon!

JagnagJagnagover 6 years ago
Saucy ...

Most readers likevthe descriptions in a story as it adds that little extra by planting the seed in your head so you too can try visulize the voluptuous sister and hot milf, how other will you have any idea what he sees ?

Loved the story, all seems very naive to start with but confidence grows with each encounter.

Next chapter should proove interesting with either mom finding him with sister or visa versa ... lets wait n see eh πŸ‘πŸΌπŸ‘πŸΌ

Meanwhile ignore savages trying to tell you how to write 😱😳😬😳😬😎😎😎

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
need more

waiting for part 2

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
OMG!! WOW!!

wow that was just awesome! that was just part 1

dudefromusdudefromusabout 2 years ago

One of the best stories between bro-sis and son-mom. Very well written. I literally had to jerk off in the middel of the story!!

AnonymousAnonymous23 days ago

Sexy! Looking forward to the next part!

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