All Comments on 'The First Time I Coached Softball'

You mentioned in the beginning that you would like someone to proofread your story. I would like to ask if you want my help.

What a wonderful story! I simply loved it.

Loved the story! Hope you write a lot more! Thank you for sharing it!

When a story is so enjoyable as this has been I like to say hello and crow about it.

Well done.

5 Star

Being former military, I could relate to the entire process. The thread that wove the story together was the commonality of the two wives. Easy reading, great descriptions, and a positive conclusion. Well Done !!!

the author and did very well, I didn't read anything that looked like a first time submission. you are a talented writer., and I gave your five stars.

I believe it is Fiction!!! Otherwise good story...

I loved this story! You developed the characters, but only as much as was needed. Instead of taking one or two pages to describe each of the husbands, you were efficient in the use of words, spending no longer than necessary to convey their essence and character. You didn't blot the main story with unnecessary details. Rather, you spent almost the entire space developing the main characters and their budding relationship. This efficiency of words kept the story short, light, and believable. Well Done.

What a wonderful, well written story. I really enjoyed it. Also I previously lived in New Hampshire and loved Rye beach. A really touching story. Good job!

Betty cheating is okay? But husband is a bad guy for doing the same?

sexual path you choose, ,,,, um alot has been written about the choosing dunno if its a choice but great read interesting story unusual to see it written from the cheaters perspective fun read thax

Loved the story. I know there are some totally straight but women’s softball is kinda famous for gay relationships. I mean really, Betty never even kissed a girl after a lifetime in women’s softball lol? But I enjoyed the story.

Another husband are A-Holes and the women can do no wrong. Sigh. Let the man hate rain. Misandrist.