All Comments on 'The Flavor of My Neighbor'

What's with the, "Little lady" talk? Nobody talks like that these days unless their 80+. They are distracting and serve no useful purpose, so I respectfully suggest you edit them out.

The person who said nobody says little lady anymore has not been in Texas or Wyoming!

Not to sure where you might be living, but in many parts of this country the term "little lady" is often used. Sorry if you do not like the term, but to bad. It is a part of my speech pattern and will remain.

Very arousing and opens up many possibilities in future chapters. I think Shelly and Paul have quite a future ahead of them. Thanks !

The term little lady was overused. Very distracting from the story.

Also, no matter what the outcome, I never like rape stories. And that is what he did.

Use "little lady" much less. Check your use of tense; some combinations of past and present tense...distractions to a story with a great concept and good potential!

the last thing you do BEFORE you hit submit... is SPELL CHECK!

aside from that the whole rape thing is a turn off.

To all who left feedback, thank you. I know I have a long way to go at this writing game and feedback only helps to improve things. I wrote this as a favor (an idea) from another lit member, it is way off my normal style of erotica. I understand that it is bases on a touchy subject, but it is important for new writers to venture out of comfort levels at times.

Feedback is always taken into consideration and noted for personal style improvement.

"My Fair Lady" was not about a 'Human of the female gender'. It was about a female who, with Henry Higgins help, discovered she was not just a 'Flower Girl - or a street woman' but a true individual. In the 1960's - yes I was there - females were brainwashed to believe that 'lady' was demeaning and they were WOMEN! Well, I am from New Orleans - for 6 generations - and I know the difference. Why do speeches begin with 'Ladies and Gentlemen' and not 'Males, Females and Other'.

Yankee females take note: Southern gentlemen are very considerate.

Can't we find better things to argue about than local turns of phrase.

Gotta say I was a tad turned off by the un-invited nocturnal explorations.