All Comments on 'The Fortress'

I really enjoyed your writing style, the exotic flavor of the story, and the way in which the whole thing unfolded. It seemed as though you were writing from experience. The ending seemed a bit odd, sort of rushed... but overall, a very good story! I enjoyed it immensely.

That was a long story, a little slow in the beginning, I thought they would have sex a little sooner. You gave many details, and I thought the story was excellent I loved it! Good job, keep writing more chapters! I wanna know what happened with him and his mom. Thanks for a great read. *Cherry Lube*

Started a little slow, but picked up quickly enough. I enjoyed it immensely.

I have read alot of stories and this one has to be one of the best

I little long but I loved pages 4-6, that's why I rated it a 100' I don't know if a shorter verison would have worked. I enjoyed the love he showed her, thank you.

It was the gentle progression that made it a real possibility instead of another typical incest story......just loved it!

I don't agree with the others about the slow start... you were building the characters and I think you did a fantastic job!

Most of us are 'Westerners' and don't understand your culture, so your descriptive manner was mind blowing to say the least.

The innocence portrayed in your words was phenomenal.

I think you have a way with words that hopefully leads you into a successful career in writing.

Well done!

doormouse xoxox

I cant remember when I read a story this good. The background, caracters, the build up.. its amazing.. Keep up the good work and I will wait for the next story from you with anticipation...

Great story, just far too long getting into it. First half should be cut to 1 to 1.5 pages. Most readers won't last through 3 full pages to get to action. And it's dry with so much description and little dialog. The last 3 pages are great. Could add another full page with Mom.

The story was awesome. It made my night! Let's see you top this ;-)

It is a wonderful story. The writer seems to have an insight into the culture and values of the community she is depicting.

The step by step advance is very erotic and enjoyable.

Xyster has, once again come up with a piece of literary masterpiece.

It is not so much about incest, as it is about love and affection convincingly expressed, delicately handled, hesitatingly but gladly accepted, gently dispensed, and finally mutually and violently exchanged, and all that by holding her hand and smoothly and imperceptibly crossing the boundries through the psychological, social, physical, emotional and finally sexual milestones.

If one considers the magnitude of change involved in the transformation of a young girl brought up nicely and lovingly, but in a protected, secluded and confined atmosphere without any exposure to the outside world into a blooming and beaming young lady endowed with self-realisation and self-awareness of her potentials, the criticisms of a slow start and long drawn out prelude seem unfair and unkind.

Well done Xyster. I hope the next one is coming soon.

I'm very very curious to read more of your stories! Thank you...it made me cum, more then once! :-)

Xyster is such a fine story tellar that I keep reading her stories from time to time and surprisingly each time I get a different flavour from the same story.

A doctor friend once told me what she had been taught by a neurologist about flavours. "Flavour", said the expert, "is a combined effect of taste and smell. Whereas there are only four primary tastes namely sweet, bitter, saltish and acrid or metallic, there are innumerable smells exemplified by the large number of masculine and feminjne perfumes on the market and an even larger number of differnt fruits (not to mention many varieties of the same fruit e.g. mango) with their own specific smell and therefore the flavour."

Xyster, as a writer, must be hoarding a pretty large number of fragrances in her intellect for her readers to enjoy.

I have already given my comments about her story "The Fortress", the reason why I have put my pen to paper again

is that I have noticed a change its final part. All I can say is that, "the rose still smells as sweet."

It is a very nicely composed story. All the credits to xyster. Well done.

In the last few days I have read all your work on this site. I have either enjoyed or been challenged by it. In this story, the observation that a woman will, despite every restriction try to realise herself no matter what, was enlightening. Incest was an unlikely vehicle for the conscious /unconscious aspirations of his sister but it worked well.

I e -mailed you long time ago after your first story - secret room. It was so good. Fortress is just fantastic. Will read all your stories now. You are a great writer. Not since reading Marie Corelli's Vendetta and Thelma nearly 50 years ago have I found a writer who writes fluently as you do. Space not permitting, I have to end this as "KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK". Clem.

i thoroughly enjoyed reading it, one of the best stories i have come across in terms of emotions being expressed.

I loved it,readd it through twice and will read it again.keep up the good work.look foreward to more!!

Never have I read such an erotic story. It took me back 35 yrs, when I was obsessed with my sister who was four years elder to me. Though we could nt do it, but she used to show me her pussy, boobs & her lovely bums. It was always accidental, ???? but she knew my infatuation & she used to enjoy making me hard always.Many times she accidentally brushed her hands on my bulge, & it was just the Indian culture that kept us away from grabbing each other.

Look forward to reading more of your stories.

please write out something like that again..its best piece of text across literotica thought

Holy SHIT, that was awesome!!!

typical writer for this site you never finished the story what happens when he leaves does she go with him and the end was very unrealistic after the mom questioned him he would have left not hung around and it is very unlikely that the mom would send his sister back to him keep it believable and get an english editor i hate getting headaches trying to figure out what you are trying to say

...that your story is unfinished. I thought it was a terrific, gradual entry to love between a very repressed man and his even more represed sister. Your descriptions of the unfolding of the plot, as well as of the cultural aspects, made this a very rewarding tale. Very well done!

it was an awesome story, the siblings got into "sex" a bit fast, i was expecting it to be a bit slower. would have also loved if you had included something between the mother and son.

why do all you writers have people forgive and forget so fast after mom grilled him no way would he hang around and no way would she send the sister to him this is so laughable it belongs in the sci-fi/fantacy area the end that took a few days should have been spread out over months or years and to top it all off you leave it unfinished total waste of time

Reading your stories is like foreplay...........slow, sensual and tantalizing. I am reading all of your work. Thanks for the feelings it gave me.

No need for a full page history lesson and rambling

I real do hope you continue writing story

please thank you

An excellent story, well written, and very realistic and believable

have never turned me on sexually at all. they don't even turn me off. at least an overly fat ugly girl gets a 1. a 10 face and a -10 body = 0 I had painful sex once with a skinny girl. i'm willing to mark it up to my inexperience, but never again...

Very nice. Please continue this .... You know with whom.. very gently

Superb story man really catches the flavors...

Completely threw the reader for a loop !! Thank you

Wow! Simply!

Mind-blowingly erotic.

I completely identify with Eastern lifestyle that you have described so well. Though the social mores are strict and strong, it was the East that wrote the Kamasutra.

I completely enjoyed this story.. I character development is suprerb. VERY educational insight as to culture variation. My sympathies to women living under a 2 class system. Also very insightful story structure. Very refreshing cultural information. I'm starting to recognize the writing concepts, you have shared with me. This story spoke to me. Very readable. All of this amazing insight coming from my vast experience (lol) of having posted one case of "Premature Publication."