All Comments on 'The Game of Golf'

Despite not believing her husband's story still he was late and they missed their date at the restaurant(?). Well he cheated first, stupid man.

Its all over the place and tad confusing at times. But your love for your stepdad sure comes out. For that its a 5 from me.

Good story, but it's a take on an old golf joke. I knew the punch line from the start.

Having lost my father four years ago, your anecdotes of your time with dad ( step ) bring a smile and memories of my own fathers sense of wicked humour and practical jokes. Today is a better day because you wrote this.

Thank You.

MM tells a good story but should not be an editor ever again.

As soon as I saw you credit TMM I knew this would be shit. I was right.

Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha.....Next time, use a first grader. They know more about proper English than he does.

Gotta love a guy confessing to cheating who goes off on a tangent about tank armor.

And an author who slips in and out of first person.

Both of you should keep your eye on the ball.

Very disappointed when I saw who helped edit, I knew it was going to be bad. I stopped reading at this point:

I had worked for the big boys until 3 years ago when I struck out on his own.

This is the opening of the story.............get a real editor!

Your ramblings were driving me crazy. I totally agree you need a editor.

I couldn’t get past the beginning. There were too many confusing mechanical errors. I tried, I just couldn’t follow.

How about that 8 comment and no one said I switched from 1st to third person I might have but if didn't it is a start. And most stories I read with jokes in them have been used before.

From a lifelong Alabamian & graduate of the University of Alabama.....ROLL TIDE!!

Poorly edited. Constantly switches from first to third person. Unnecessary and distracting political comments. You didn't even do a good job telling the joke. You need to find somebody better the TMM to help you.

Despite the mistakes I really liked this one and unlike others I didn't see the joke ending coming. I did laugh out loud.

Well done.

"her arm around my waste," is just wrong on many levels. Dude, would you ask Trump how to calm a hostile crowd? No sane person would allow Smoker Guy to "edit" their work. He is a writer like a woodpecker is a carpenter.

WTF!! Is there supposed to be a story in here somewhere?? Switching from 1st to 3rd person is the least of your problems.

Stopped reading right then and there. If you don't care enough about your own story to use a chapter number so people know this BEFORE opening the story, there is no reason to read the story. There is no reason to do anything but rate it a 1.

Marlboromoron is as bad an editor as he is a writer. Your writing deserves better.

Get a proper editor and your stories will improve massively.

Story idea is interesting, but it bounces around a bit. Nice tribute to your step father, he must have been a fine man.

Way too long and wordy for a what would have been a funny joke at the end but after 3 pages It got no more than a quick "ha".

Sorry, this was a one page joke. Three pages was just shooting for a shaggy dog.

If you don't know what a shaggy dog story is, you are in the wrong pursuit.

Knew the punch line before the end of page one. Too much BS distraction.

Too much golf and stories of dad. And who will play that much golf if he runs a company and has a wife? What wife will go 3 months before speaking up and then when she does its saying she will do three guys at once? And she follows it up with a friday GNO. And the guy golfs.

I loved the stories, in spite of all the nay-sayers. I'll give it a 4

I hope this made you laugh, it just bored me and wasnt what I was looking for in LW. Take it to the humor section

The narrator’s ‘Dad’ was grievously wounded in WW2, then was sent to Vietnam?

2*

If you really "loved" your father, you would stop posting immediately.

Anyone who sounds like Marlboroscum and writes like the Marlborostain really shouldn't try posting under a new facade. Hell, even the piss poor English spelling, mis-spelling and misuse of words is as bad as if you posted as the original. Why fake your death when nobody liked the original?

5-stars

"How about that 8 comment and no one said I switched from 1st to third person I might have but if didn't it is a start. And most stories I read with jokes in them have been used before." - Even your own comment makes no sense!

The setup of the joke was waaaayyyyy too long and the joke was not that funny. Intro was good lead in to story about step-father. That was too long an effort to explain MC love of golf. I have no respect for anyone that takes that amount of time away from family for golf unless the go pro.

Was it a joke...... perhaps not

That was really horribleness

Unsure of the point or punch line???

Is there a point to this jumble of words.?

Maybe you had to be there to appreciate the nuances of these little vignettes. Unfortunately, they do not adapt well to a short story format.

Well that turned into a random word salad.