All Comments on 'The Guardian Angel'

More snuff bullshit.

Please a part 2...where the friend meets him again.

A little on the savage side of the BTB, but definitely better than any story from iwasneverfun. Some folks it just don't pay to cuck. But what was in the box?

Why do so many authors believe that companies care about workers having affairs? Executives have too much other stuff about which to worry, and most of the execs have cheated a time or three themselves. They tend to smile when one of their subordinates scores some strange pussy as long as it doesn’t hurt the company. Punishing employees over their private lives puts companies in legal liability.

to have friends in low places

Nothing original, just a rehashing of every cliché in the book.

Yet again a writer spoils what could have been a decent story. Agreed cheaters should be punished but torture and murder is really too extreme.

Keep trying... this is a good start.

Not that's a story . Shame your other story was declined . Would loved to have read it . I guess if you write a good to great anti-cum eater story here . The powers that be will get all pissy ....and shut you down . Great read . Keep the BTB coming .

First, don't tell us what he's GOING to do, show him doing it. Better, have him tell us about what he did.

You're bio doesn't say where you're from, but you set the story in the US, but said the time was 17.30. Military would be 1730 without the period/decimal point. Civilian time would be 5:30 PM.

"One evening when your two friends were coming out of a bar, my friend and I beat them to death. One lost his two testicles and the other one would use a wheelchair till he dies." - Which is it death or maiming and crippling?

Pathetic garbage. 1*

Don't give up your day job, Plsplsme

So... what actually happened?

With so few details it’s barely better than a summary.

We know more about what happened prior to these events than what happened in that warehouse.

Fleshing out is a waste of time and words but I would have liked to hear her under torture reasons for cheating. Too bad the morality police of literotica redact the more beleivable confrontations of a wronged spouse but encourage the wimpy behavior of innumerable cuckolds.

Best story in a long time in LW. And yes, for the wimp commenting murder isn't necessary, WRONG! We need these scum out of the gene pool. Glad she's gone before she could procreate and create another slut.

You are on the wrong site.

Speaking in a normal, matter of fact voice is so much more menacing and threatening than yelling. Try that next time.

Simply put: brutal.

Dude cried some tears, then went ahead and torture his unfaithful wife? Geezus.

I mean, I'm not in the same group then DirtySingleMom, I know exactly why it did happen - less we forget: Nancy not only cheated on James for months, but fucked her lover IN HIS BED while she wore HER WEDDING DRESS while planing to have him raise THEIR BASTARD KIDS...

Where I come from, people get murder all the time for way less disrespectful actions.

It's just that the turnaround from happily married fellow, to heartbroken husband to unforgiving madman torturer is soooooo abrupt... I wonder how many people would have acted the same, given the situation, if they also had a perfect get-out-of-jail card from a guy named Al. Knowing human nature like I do... a bet a lot would.

At this point, though, being James, I would spend less of my time trying to find a second wife and WAY MORE trying to figure out what it is about me that make women think they can/should cheat on me. He's obviously lacking something that allow Tom to seduce Nancy so quickly and thoroughly. Maybe Al can recommend him a councilor/life coach that can help him from ending up with another cheating slut.

Overall, don't expect me to shit on this story - it is certainly over-the-top, and not the author's best work, but it still a great palate cleanser to the (too) numerous cuckold nonsense we get around here, on a daily basis. So yeah - a very extreme response to the usual LW dread... but maybe needed? Debatable.

..would have been enough. to dramatic at the end. The good husband is not that good.

Poor next wife..... ***

People keep wondering,

Where do all these mass shootings come from.

I wonder how many shooters enjoy stories like this?

Go back to playing with your playstation.

Alienation of affection does not exist in New York or most other states do you are an asshole for bringing it up. The rest of your story speaks for itself. Finally , fairy godmothers belong in fairy tales.

R.

family is at least as serious as treason against the "government". The feminists, snowflakes, and cucks can go fuck themselves. Sometimes death is appropriate for those who betray their families.

Which makes him a SUPER wimp. Real men (and women) take other action. And murder means the lovers regret their actions only briefly, rather than for years and years. Kinda' makes him a worse character than the cheaters.

He doesn't have the guts to turn in his Dad's friend as a criminal, then, letting the criminal and his buddy do all the work, he does the chickenshit follow-up. No real vengeance here . . . just a sick little mind giving itself permission (due to some self-righteous indignation) to do what he probably always wanted. No wonder she cheated on him . . . what a pathetic loser.

Now, if they'd been dropped on an island somewhere that had adequate food and water . . . they'd get sick of each other . . . then 'miraculously' rescued after 5 - 7 years, with her coming back to him happily remarried . . . that might have made for an interesting story.

This is a sick story , a cheating wife , a fathers old army buddy doing revenge killings, .what planet or drugs did you take.

Must have been really bad if it was worse than this one.

I sincerely doubt that any mentally ill mass shooter, or any one else, got inspiration from an LW story. Project much?

What plot there was, was rushed. An arguably good person wants them killed? Not likely.

Wimped out in regard to how the were killed. Big hole in the story at that point.

I just love happy endings .

Boy , ever since the HDK/Kimmi placed the fear into authors on this site about Pickaxe handles and " Murder Porn " , there's hardly any of it in LW! LMFAO!

You guys just do not realize how much sway your decree's from Mt Olympus hold on this site .

I almost got thru that with a straight face!

*****

A misogynic mess not worthy of comment. In future, to improve your writing and the reader's entertainment, develop the main characters, the husband and wife's current relationship, like have a conversation about when to try for a baby, giving the reader a better view of their stance on exact timing. As this is third person, show the relationship between the lovers, so the reader can build a better emotional involvement in their plans, so that we could care about what happens to them. She could argue that the mysterious gift of money was from her side of the family so they could afford a baby. Only then move onto the discovery, revenge and the guardian angel, because this is a more original element, so handled better this could've been a better story. The result here was only worth 1* in my view. Great or original ideas are only one part of of a story, most enjoyment comes with the storytelling.

. . . Islamic “honor killings,” I wonder how they can actually do that. Then I read some of the comments in LW, and I can see how: there are guys who were brought up in the good old US of A who have exactly the same attitude.

A couple of Palestinian brothers murdered their sister while she was in the hospital, and, in the occupied territories, the hospital staff just ignored it. Maybe there’s some Palestinians commenting here?

Short and to the point! A bit convenient to have such a savior though!

Did you also cry when Hans Gruber fell off Nakatom Tower?

I read "The Perfect Wife" on storiesonline.net. I believe it's the best work from this author. It contains love, cheating, betrayal, intrigue and even action. I'm asking myself why did Literotica reject the story.

The evil here is palpable. Malevolence leads to chaos and all against all. Is that the kind of world you admire? One day it turns against you.

no gory details. aw well. you'd think with all the suicidal cuck fetish porn on the website, you'd see more other-cide fetish porn. i guess it's okay when stories glorify financially bankrupting a man, or making a guy want to kill himself over drugging him, raping him, tying him up, marking him, cutting his DNA outta the genetic pool by trickery. But heaven forbid people that do those things in a fictional story get put out of commission.

boomers are sad and weird. they went from, 'video games and music don't cause violence' into little babies that cry about, 'words cause violence, games cause violence, comedy causes violence, and anything i harumph about prolly causes violence'

"A life well lived" is not exactly revenge against someone who gives absolutely no shit about the main character, to the point where she makes a point of wearing her wedding dress while betraying her marriage. That level of mockery and contempt is not going to allow her to feel remorse over a standard divorce. She clearly hates the man to a truly sick level. That's nearly as deranged as murdering someone. I can see why he'd be tempted to get as brutal as he did. In real life, he obviously shouldn't, but it's only a story. It might be a better fit in Erotic Horror.

"Boy , ever since the HDK/Kimmi placed the fear into authors on this site about Pickaxe handles and " Murder Porn " , there's hardly any of it in LW! LMFAO!

You guys just do not realize how much sway your decree's from Mt Olympus hold on this site .

I almost got thru that with a straight face!

*****"

If you gave this story 5 stars, it's not your face you should be concerned with. If you're that interested in poorly written snuff stories, you may want to speak to a professional.

You are now the second person to be banned from reading HDK stories. You will be informed when/if your ban is lifted.

You gutless Liberals think every offense should get a free pass. For people with a personal sense of honor, there IS a Bitter Price To Pay For Betrayal.

In no part of our justice system has it been more blatantly abused than in our Divorce Courts and in Child Child Custody Hearings. Justice plays no part in either instance and there's no recourse for the unfeeling and unfairly treated victims of "THE SYSTEM".

Assuming you meant it as an over the top hilarious farce, well done.

I'm flattered, I guess. The pussy even refers to my God-like status, which is always appreciated. I see this Kool Kat joined Lit in November and understands the situation going on twixt PACIFICA and CLIT. The good wishes and frequent thoughts of said pussy are always welcome. Living inside a pussy's head which he/she appears to have shoved up his/her ass would seem anatomically impossible, but stranger things have happened. They wouldn't make, sell or even legalize pickaxe handles down under if they didn't want them used. That's how I see it.

I agree with anon 09/02

"I am not Jack Bauer, I am Steve Bolton. Remember my name!"

Best line ever.

Our problem in the Antipodes, HDK, is not the surplus of pickaxe handles. It's the deficit of pickaxe heads to go with them. One could wreak so much more havoc if only we had the complete unit.

Lue

Yeah, plsplsme I award you 4*s for this story.

BUT

Are you in a rut🤔? Killing is taking over the entertainment aspect of your stories.

So you kill a wife off with an STD. Friends make her lover 'disappear'. A tampered suspension kills off a cheating wife and her lover (technically the husband whispered death into her ear, then pulled the plug). And now a guardian friend of his father delivered death to the cheating wife and her lover...... So I get it. Best revenge on a cheat is death, as far as plsplsme is concerned.

The real tragedy is your stories are becoming the afterthought to the revenge.

Your character development is getting shorter and simple. There is much less emotion, sympathy for the characters in this story than before. So the tail is wagging the dog🐕.

Enough by me. Thank you for the work.

HDK, point me to the forest.........

AMerryman

It would seem as those from upon "Olympus" have razor tongues but paper skin!

They can call out any author who doesn't tow the line that they set , but when a little pussy cat says that The Emperor Has No Clothes , then the denizens of " Olympus " go into full snowflake meltdown!

In the immortal words of Matt Moreau , It's a Helluva thing .

but you forced my hand, Molly.

The ban was originally going to be 90 days, but you are now forbidden to read HDK stories for 180 days.

I can sense some Tarantino.

Good story.

Are you sure that it would be best to tow the line? What is on the other end of the line that you will be towing along? Are you sure that you will be towing it in the right direction?

Or perhaps it would be preferable to toe the line and stand alongside all the rest of us who recognise the wonder of the words of wisdom scattered hither and yon from Mount Olympus?

The choice, clearly, is yours.

Lue

She is something else.

Always dropping the verbal sledgehammer on other's mistakes.

I don't mind that, it's actually funny 😁.

She does use an avalanche of words when a single sentence is enough.

AMerryman

Words are inexpensive, sir, and do less harm than arrows.

Lue

She is a pistol! Oh wait, they don't have those in Australia do they. She definitely can bury you with her wordy wit though.

What I find interesting is L's standards hypocrisy.... Here is captive, tortured to death two CHEATERS. And I know OB had his story censured (after published) twice for doing the same to CHEATERS in that story....

Hooyah, Salute... 5*

sence

a stupied story like my spelling

I have no problem with them getting rid of Smith as he always would be a womaniser,but I think they should have made her suffer pain but let her live if she moved away and changed jobs.

What the hell was in the box? Should have released them in the desert. Murder is not good even for cheating. Some of these commenters get a little worked up.

Violence. Hurt people. "Beat them to death" yet they're not dead. Assume that the violators are SO smart and SO strong that they get away with anything. None of the victims see them, they leave no evidence and make no mistakes. Don't make me laugh. Even for a fictional story this was both ridiculous and unbelievable.

1 star

I wanted to like this, but the forced gang rape of a previous love interest and the torture and dismemberment of the two idiots was absolutely ridiculous.

Oh sure, you'll satisfy the crazy BTB crowd, but that's simple to do. You just need murder, torture and lots of blood to satiate those mouth-breathing cretins.

This was lazy writing.

A little much anger.

Man you are my kind of writer BTB x 100

Don't cheat on a man who has friends with bad intentions.

I loved every word. Thanks for your story. This story shows all about "me". If my GF or wife cheated, it would be worse than this. They would be alive, but suffer. Because death is more comfortable for them. But at the end they would choose to suicide. Because I want them to choose their destiny just like they want. "Death"

You have a black heart for cheating cunts and loved and 5 star all your stories. The only complaint I have is, there's not enough and you need keep writing more

👍👍👍👍👍

I think it would be more effective if he talked in a normal voice rather than yelling. He seems more in control of the situation when speaking and not yelling.

Violence unleashed on the contemptable pair.

They deserved a slow painful death.

I didn't need them deada, but I would like to know more about the violence. How he tortured the lover and then the wife.

The only correct response to adultery!

Beautiful.

The violence, whether real or implied, takes away from the story.

Now that’s a BTB for both the cheaters.

Loved it. I hope in the end amongest all the pain and blood the cheaters realised what their cheating was actually worth?

Their most precious thing….

Their lives.

A great BTB story, but your latest is even better. Wish you still allowed comments.

Kind of silly. The wife was portrayed as a worthless soulless monster. Who dates and analyzes and lives with someone so inhuman and thinks that she's a wonderful loyal loving wife? Just too extreme.

Thanks for the effort.

One from me. Cliched story with the super spy. And straight up murder in the first. Not at all my cup of tea.

I love all of plsplsme's stories. Hardcore and brutal!!!

1 star - stupid story plot - cuck/wimp crap

Well, it was a start to a good BTB story but went dark with the killing of the wife and lover (without the gruesome details). After the two men laughed after the torture and killing the story lost all feeling. I know that there are BDSM libraries that would have gone into long gory details. I would hate to be any woman that would marry this guy. Did the two every meet up again and did he bring the bottle of rum?

To 26thNC

You are right, the author's best work is "When cheating has a cost", but I am perplexed how this story could get such a low rating!!!

@ nixrox A cuckold/wimp story ... ...?

If this isn’t one of the best extreme " BTB " I’d hate to think where your BTB goes.

You can’t call him a cuckold he learned of the infidelity on the day.

You can’t call him a wimp as he was instrumental in ending the affair permanently.

Fast, Simple, and BLOODY!!! Just the right way to treat CHEATERS!!!

Now this is how it supposed to be.

Murder is never an answer - not even in fiction.

Murder is the right answer on special occasions, murder and war are part of human history.

I would of been against the killing if not for the cheaters scheming, those awful cunts needed to die.

If your a man who would of not done the same in the same situation your a weak beta cuck.

Too much.

But what was in the box ......?

Would hav3 liked, to read about the torture. Too bad...

I think you did right not explaining the torture, I am not sure why you left what was in the box, a mystery. We are guessing sharp tools to dispose of the bodies. Good story line. Keep writing.

XYZ

Did not like the story at all. -A

You could have written some more about their final thoughts, their regrets, their pain and their demise.

Also it's hypocritical of the admins that blocked your first submission as they blocked it for physical torture but emotional and psychological torture is just fine.

I believe the box "scene" is an homage to Tarantino's Pulp Fiction.

Good story.

[02.11.22]

Top Shelf BTB!

11/10!!!!!

Great Story!! Loved it!!

dumb

Great BTB. Yes, it's over the top, Tarantino style. It's meant to be. Wish I could give this 10 stars.

If LE doesn't let you publish some story, try the other stories site (SOL).

And yes, admins only hate torture when the true victim visits it on the criminals. They are perfectly fine with torture on innocent people.

It may be "Tarantino style"as a commenter posited, but it only came across as really, really twisted to me. Not cleaver at all. Sorry.

Love it!

Some revenge!

4

When! Cutting them up? Like butchering a cow...that's about 10 liters of blood and doing while alive??? Sorry thst is way over the top sick.

I could she smashing both their hands crippling them for life then shipping them say to Laos. Cruel yes but His choice? Sick.

Over the top but good. I hate those who go over the top torturing the main character over pages and pages and then have an underwhelming ending. This author kept it to one page with an appropriate conclusion.

Boy, you write some "hard-core" stories, sometimes the suspense is fun... I enjoy your stories. Thanks for writing them....

John

Gruesome

A great flash story. Hard hitting, complete, and a perfect amount of background info. The fickle, hypocritical Lit admins probably did you a favor. No offense but my imagination is arguably better than what you had to cut.