by melissafuentes
I thought this was a well-written little story from somebody who hasn't contributed before. I liked the way it progressed slowly, from step to step, feeling to feeling..
Some of the language seemed a bit like the author was searching for new terms to describe various parts of the anatomy, which I found a bit distracting, but it was survivable.
I look forward to further contributions.
Lue
Hey Lue, I want to thank you for your constructive criticism. You absolutely hit the nail on the head, I was searching for new terms for anatomy. I'm sorry it distracted you but I'm glad you mentioned it because it's something I will watch for going forward.
I thank you for your positive comments!
there were many arab girls where i went to school. they are so hot!
american soldiers who go to arab lands say the same thing!