All Comments on 'The House of Frightful Delights'

This story was really hot, but I couldn't tell right away when the scenes switched from Ellen to Ava.

delightly written, and devilishly erotic. However, I cannot believe that two sane girls would put themselves into that situation, unless they were not getting satisfied by their "significant others" [unless, or course, they did not have any such persons]

A wonderful seasonal post. Thanks!

Fuck me. That was intense.

5 star rating, well done!

Good job in including the after care, that’s really important. I noticed a few very minor grammar errors at the end. My only advice would be to put a double line space between the character swaps to make easier to tell when perspectives changes or aomething of such kind.

I agree with the double space comments when switching characters, it can be a little confused. It's rather hardcore for my tastes but was well written, and a great original concept so deserves to do well in the competition.

The writing is good, EXCEPT for the constant back and forth. This was close to a great story. Sorry.

The perfect blend of hot and scary. The ending was kind of lame, but it was all paced beautifully. Thanks for the great read!

The switching scenes took a little getting used to, but it was pretty damn hot stuff.