All Comments on 'The Ice Cream Man Ch. 01'

This story is in four chapters. The story is finished and all chapters have been submitted and hopefully a chapter will be posted each day. Hope you stay with me on this one.

Best Regards

DG Hear

All of your stories are enjoyable and thought-provoking. Personally I would get as far away from Jenny as possible, but then I was always an employee and never an owner. This probably gives Jeff more self-confidence. I do hope that he will request a pre-nup if they marry....

And...,you've found a good editor.

very good intreging cant wait to read more

how to make a cone turn into a romance, TK U MLJ LV NV

I look forward to reading the rest of the story.

A really good start, with clearly defined people, looking forward to the rest. As always I enjoy your writing, an easy style and nothing hidden unless it has to be.

I am curious DGH can write a "wrong" story?

... but you got 4 stars on reputation alone. Jeff does seem to be a better protaganist than some of your recent ones.

Yet after this start , all the core elements of the story are in place. We know the characters & the purposefully loose plot thread is the narrator's new girlfriend " used to have a substance abuse problem. D.G. makes this look easy. Well it isn't . Believe me, I've tried.

thanks for the offering.

Very good start to a story. But we learn she is or 'was' a 'wild child'. It is usually not a good idea to get serious about a 'wild child'. It usually comes back to bite you. Can't wait to be proven wrong. You are one of my favorite romance writers. Thank You.

After reading this chapter I understand the author's doubts about which section should publish the story. True, it begins as typical erotic couples, but quickly Jeff begins to look at her differently, albeit with his doubts about Jen's sexual experience. I like John's frankness, he does not bite his tongue and he knows his daughter very well.

We will see what happens in the following chapters.

5 * for you.

I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.

How can her father say she seems a happier person when she as only been away less than a day.?

Jeff and Jen just met... barely a few hours ago. How can she be already so happy that even her father notes it? After less than one day? Maybe her father has extrasensory perception? He seems to be able to measure up people quickly and accurately. Let's giver the runner a chance with this interesting beginning of a story

John is quick to feed Jeff some much needed background info about Jen, the wild girl and maybe a drug user. Is she still a user? Is she finally meeting a man that will tame her or is she just testing new water where someone can see beyond her beauty and reach for the inner her? A new challenge for her? Jeff is quick to wonder who she really is and if she will be truthful about her wild past or if she will be a liar like she did to her parents? After his talk with John, he will look at her differently, harboring some doubts about her sexual experience. John's frankness is refreshing and he loves his daughter especially after losing his son to drugs.

Let's see where this goes.

5 *

BJ

Why didn't she get the morning after pill.?Wait she couldn't,it would spoil the story.