by JayLikestoRead
Good story line, not brilliant but a steady 3.5 / 5 but better than mediocre and not bad.
I liked his sentiment of wearing a condom till she was on the pill, made it more sympathetic and gave it a bit more realism to the story.
Maybe next time extend to two pages with more descriptions of people ect.
Other than that, your well on your way to becoming a good / very good author.
Thankyou, i enjoyed it.
As for the brave fool that hides behind a wall to distimulate oneself is very brave when insulting anothers efforts.
Would like to them produce their own story for publication letting others criticize and disect it as harshly as he has done so to this fine story.
And so Jaylikestoread, please ignore the cave dweller who insulted your work, dont let it sway you away from further writings. 👍🏼
Everyone has a right to their opinion. Even "total crap". First amendment. Remember that? Don't get so upset when others don't share your opinion. If we all agreed then Hillary might be president. Now that's scary.