All Comments on 'The Jewel of Desire Ch. 03'

Great story, I’m really liking the premise. Just watch out for some of the grammar and/or spelling. It’s easy to ignore most of it, but sometimes I had to go back and re-read the sentence a couple of times to figure out what you meant.

Looking forward to more parts in this series!

I've really enjoyed the story so far, however there are a few typos, punctuation mistakes, and confusing paragraphs in there. They are in no way deal breakers but if you would like somebody else to go over the piece and clean it up I'm happy to volunteer. Hit me up with an email if you're interested.

I'm glad you didn't give up!!

Glad you are back. Waiting for the next Installment of this great story. Keep up the great work.

That you’ll add another chapter or two? I enjoyed the storyline very much...

Thanks for the encouragement. It means a lot.

I'm dusting off my outline as I type this. I did leave you all hanging, in a good way.

So, yes. I think I will write another chapter and see where it goes. Lucky Carl, I wonder what he's really thinking.

The grammar is dreadful.

Good story, but with lots of mistakes and misspellings, such as -- reply when you meant replay. and scrapping when you meant scraping, again it was close, and closest when you meant closet, ... a number of tense and suffix errors too, ... but again, this was not as bad as you had been before, still bad, but noticeably improved, ... so, keep trying, ... and I am enjoying your work, thank you for sharing, ... '-) TTFN

Great job, thanks for sharing your work.