All Comments on 'The Job Offer'

Brilliant.

Absolutely amazing love it hope you continue it

Great story. Only improvement I could see is getting an editor or proof-reader to take a look at it before submitting it. Other then that well done.

The sex was great but the story line is fantastic. Love to see more of their escapades sexual and rogue vampire hunting. PLEASE MORE !!!

Keep telling their story PLEASE, I would love to read about their hunting/sex escapades, master bringing in another guy/girl to their bed/life, just keep writing it absolutely fantastic.

Fun read

I liked your story but gave up due to to many wrong words; the last one was "bear" for "bare" when they were in the shower.

Great job. Yes, the spelling was off putting. But given this was so long and very erotic, I could overlook it.

I look forward to more.

The storyline is fantastic, but it is buried by some very fixable (but totally jarring) errors. Pick a point of view, third person or first person, don't keep switching. Use quotation marks every time there is dialogue, not just when you feel like it. Keep the story in past tense, don't keep switching between past and present. Spellcheck is your friend (it's mastUrbate, not mastErbate). Just these little things would take you from a 3* to a 5* story.

Awesome Story, look forward to reading the following chapters. yeah are some miss spelling and odd wording. But it is not too bad Lol.

Thank You 5 Stars

I wasn’t sure about this story. Put off reading it for a long time. It was a slow start and l doubted.

But lm a big fan of the Blade Franchise and this story l am sure is inspired by Blade. That first chapter was a doozy, so long. But lm happy you took the time to develop the storyline and characters, by page 11 l was truly invested in the story and wanting more as the interest grew.

Looking forward to the rest of the story and the coming action, thank you.

Scores 5/5

Great premise for the story. Please get a proof reader. "a pair of cloves"??? Too much this/that. That's hard to read and keep the story going. A great effort, but so many things could be done better. It's almost like you didn't read it yourself. You can do better and I will keep reading, hoping you'll take some constructive criticism to heart. Cheers

Simply outstanding job here...

5 stars