by Many Feathers
This story "The Key" was our beginning..the reason why we are where we are now.
I don't remember ever reading a more creative story than this one. Far more entertaining than othe ones overloaded with sex. Congratulations, WELL DONE !!
Ok . . . OK . . . so the critics are out . . . so am I
I loved your story line. Loved the intrigue amongst women . . . really what can you expect!
So we may hear about it in modern movie form soon!
Great story line.
This was a great read, keep up the great work.
Good story, sloppy writing, but no worse than usual.
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You keep using the phrase "for Hell's sakes" which is both awkward and meaning less.
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You keep using the word "elude" where you should use "allude".
Allude is a verb meaning "to refer indirectly":
<BR>-- He alluded to a secret lover.
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Elude is a verb meaning "to escape or avoid":
<BR>-- He eluded detection by her husband.
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You keep using the word "naval" where you should use "navel".
<BR>"Naval" refers ships, shipping and the seagoing military.
<BR>"Navel" refers to that point on your body where you were connected to your mother before birth.
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You keep using the word "where" when you should use "were".
These are just a few examples of your sloppy writing, there are many many more in this and other of your stories I have read.
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<I>-- srgeek --</I>
Why is it when a women cheats it's romantic ,but when a man cheats it's disgusting .A cheater is a cheater no matter the circumstances.Lets keep it real people.
TOO fucking bad author. Your good girl is a cheating whore slut. She deserves NOTHING except the fucking curb naked with NOT a penny to her name. Bill deserves soo much better...
But regardless of how interesting it may be, the woman knowingly and willfully cheated on her husband. This story does not belong in "Romance", it belongs in the
"Loving Wives" section. Isn't that where all the stories about cheating wives are?
complicated story where ends do not always meet and that I did not like too much, but it would nevertheless be nice if the hypocrites would shut up.