All Comments on 'The Laptop Surprise of My Mom Ch. 01'

Loved it. It would be nice if the son starts feeling jealous. Maybe she could fuck some of his bullies or friends. She aught to get tattoos and piercings too. Lat the son be a voyeur with seeting anger for a few chapters more. He should start keeping an eye on what the mom is doing.

Add incest. But depending on how many chapter you have, I would request it be added in about when the story is 75% complete.

Do involve the son in the meanwhile in various ways. Have him watch his mother's adventures. Have him coordinate his mothers adventures. Have him make money off of it on the side (without his mother's knowledge at first). Have him sell her for his own benefits.

Also have the son go though many emotions - Anger, Jealousy, Hate, Love, Lust, Ownership, Horny, etc.

Make it a son and mother loving incest story. It is apparent that she has not had that in her marriage. Making her a whore or slut for others take away from the story.

in the next chapter let her son take her and make her his slut

It reminded me a bit of 'la plume de ma tante'. Apart from that, it was most enjoyable. I look forward to reading more. Five stars and thanks for posting.

I love the story very much, watching his mom being fucked on video. Love it very much.

Please give us part two. This a amazing story with a lot of potential! Make the mom your slut and have her do anything you want!!!

Well written, smooth, fast, oriented pure sex, few emotional complications

We will see the following

You are creating a great story well hidden in a seemingly simple title. You have great talent and we are anxious to hear more.....

No, it is not mature. None of the characters are mature. They might be "older" than 18, but their behaviour, is far from mature.

And I am sorry, but no woman who could be a successful realtor, could be this naïve.

It's very interesting that you question the 'maturity' of the characters.

The dad is clearly not mature. You have that right.

The mom, on the other hand, has shown some glimpses of being mature and being naive. This represents regular people. People make mistakes all the time, sometimes over the dumbest things. You have to understand that she is supposedly emotionally vulnerable and I tried to capture that beforehand.

Ultimately, a story is just a story. Almost all stories on Literotica are not "realistic". Not sure why you pick this one to pick apart the 'realism' factors. But again, I thank you for reading my chapters. I hope to address your points and make it into something that you might want to read again.

I really like the mom character and the son seems sweet. The hubby is a bit two dimensional but we are seeing him only through the son's eyes.

Keep writing!

asianToy

I like the theme and know that you have created a great start for a series. You are leaving us anxious to learn more. There is some background that could be added.

Thanks for the compliments! :)

I'm even more motivated to write more :)

That's good work if you can get it. I be curious to know the cost, or are they working for free. Sounds like moms hard drive can be working better in no time. Lesson two here I come.

you have a strange idea that your criticism makes any sense at all. see if you can do better . oh wait , you have no submissions.

Your criticism of my opinion, and that is was of no value is because I have no published stories on Literotica?

hmmmmm

guess what it says on your profile

"This user does not have any submissions yet."

Kettle? Black?

your kidding me right, this part is so one sided, it makes the wife look like she does not know anything

Wimp father and son

mmmm

but the story is always the same as all woman seen to be turned into sluts

Different but still a hot story. I got hard reading it. I can't wait to read the next chapters.

You're so talented! You're taking these cocks like a pro. mom 46 experiences first hot fucking

Sort of liked the story. Liked the depth and breath of character development of the mother. Felt sorry for the mother because she lacked the courage to leave the husband and naive enough to believe Jimmy and Cyrus was really interested in improving her sexual abilities.

Well written AND conceived. Your spin on this so far is Great. Ignore ( may be difficult) the nay-sayers. Keep on writing great tales.

Excellent

So let's break this down a bit

The mom:

Foreign, clearly low intelligence and poor decision making skills, no passport, wants immigration status and the highest earning husband so she can be taken care of, no mention of her wanting to work, picks a man ultimately based on his money for her benefit and not on his personality or ethics or his potential to be a good husband and father, gets citizenship not cheap, gets his last name and access to his money, doesn't have to work because of him, awful in bed, expects the husband to allow her quite possibly one of the easiest existences on the planet and also help her with housework when he gets home from being a top earner yet can't even blow the guy properly, has every available option provided by society to leave a supposed bad marriage but doesn't, has a kid with a supposed awful husband, has the funds he earns and spare time to get her real estate license, he cheats she stays once again with every opportunity available to women in America and legal system on her side, unclear if the husband used protection when he cheated but she damn sure didn't and clearly doesn't care if she brings home an incurable disease and spreads it,

This woman is an absolute piece of shit not a victim it's insane how she's portrayed as being abused she should be kissing the ground he walks on for her for giving her that incredibly rare and privileged life, I'm seriously looking forward to her being absolutely wrecked and used she deserves that. Guys don't simp, stay away from women like that and definitely don't marry one, use protection and the condom afterwards, give your name, seed and effort to a good woman not a hooker with entitlement like the mom.