All Comments on 'The Legend of Lapis'

I loved the way it was told as a legend, and I also like the idea of having the story tell itself, of implying there is something more behind a story than just the words that are being told. One of those stories that make me wish, I'd have come up with that idea, hehe...

I saw part of this story in AH when you asked questions about the opening. I thought it was great then and still do reading it here. I like the narration, 'the story' telling the story itself lends a fairytale like quality. Very nice work, Liar.

This story was so elegantly written. I'm very impressed.

Remarkable. Not erotic, though, but I am so pleased to have read it that I don't care. Smashing.

Excellently done. I like the transitions.

Great little story, excellent writing.

This was so wonderfully written I couldn't keep my eyes from it for a moment. I loved every word and your syntax is lovely! I enjoyed this to the fullest and am moving on to your other stories, hoping to find them just as mesmerizing.

~Victoria

This is a beautiful set up to a novel. Please expand.

Also, this is the finest writing I have encountered among many stories on these and similar pages.