All Comments on 'The Link'

Holy damn DC, so good.

Awesomely good. Really well done. I read it straight through even though I didn't have the time. I cannot wait for Teegan's part.

23 lit pages is like 200 pages in MS word

gonna take a bit

Some will quibble about the length...most would divide into smaller chunks, but I, too, read it in one sitting. Noticed a few things that escaped the editing which is understandable in such a long piece-- autocomplete often confuses and replaces inappropriately when we misspell and I hate that it often replaces your with you.

Awaiting part 2, great idea with the teaser.

Just......Wow...

Oh cruel DC to give us such a short snippet and make us wait for the next bit! I felt a bit let down by Perfect Pieces and Neglected wasn't really to my taste but you have really nailed it with this one.

Thank you .

Well thought out and meaty characters. Awesome.

And more to come? WOW

that DreamCloud is on the top of my list of favorite authors. This is a GREAT story that is well-told.

I've said this before, DreamCloud and I will say it again. You are one of the best writers on this site. I first joined Literotica for gratuitous sex stories; I did not expect to find creativity in story telling at this level and bugger the sex. Excellent . . . nuff said

This deserves to be published somewhere else, like at Amazon, where people who wouldn't look at a "porn site" can find it.

I love everything you write and this is no exception. I'm looking forward to the sequel.

just as the snow and ice and cold was gone and the temperature rose tempting you outside? Worth spending a half day reading it, you are darn right. Well done and thank you.

I almost lost my job today because I was reading your story and it's beyond comprehension,wow,all I can say after that...

great story I greatly appreciate your work

That was an amazing story. I look forward to the Link 2.

I originally skipped this story because of it length but decided to break it up over a couple of days. I failed and read it all in one sitting and I will be exhausted at work in the morning!! I look forward to more stories about Stinky

drama, sci fi, romance, intrigue, fantasy, and so much more.

well worth the time.

the phone call to mom giving her their address seemed a bit too simplistic. and the April/Abigail name confusion was regrettable.

But in spite of how late it is, I am already looking forward to part 2.

thanks

I will quibble a bit about the need for an editor to polish off the typos that have crept in here and there, BUT I will unabashedly say that typos and all, this is the best story that I have ever read on Literotica and it also stands right alongside some of the best literature I have ever read!

Thank you for a wonderful story—even if you did manage to suck me in until 4:00 AM this morning!

;-)

Enjoyed this more than some of Asimov's stories. The story itself is a gift. Thank you.

Belongs in novels and novellas. Badly in need of an editor, too. Post it in novels so I know to allow the time it takes to read it. It's a very good story.

How long will you make us wait for chapter 2?

I will join in on the comments about typos and punctuation, but the pace, character development, and tightness of the story was fabulous! the best free novel I've ever read. Bravo!

This was incredibly engaging. It held my interest from the start.

Like most of your stories, it was told in a very visual manner that makes it seem almost like you are watching it unfold. Again, it reads much like a movie adaptation done before the movie.

I was put off a bit by some of the implications of the epilogue. I have never met a Jew hating Christian though I know that there are a rare few. The idea that there would be some secret society of them with the power to sneak someone passed coburn's paranoid security seems rather far fetched. Silly to feel this way about a minor point in a story this fanciful. Maybe I will find it more satisfying in chapter two.

Thanks again for a great read! Looking forward to the rest of the story.

First I want to point out that there are a lot of grammatical errors. Aside from that it was a great story. A little more detail helps to give the reader a better visual. Sometimes you did that, other times you didn't. Simple things like wall color or room descriptions and hair styles go a long way. That's my problem with nearly all stories on here. You did so much better than most authors on here. It's also ok to sidetrack from the story line just to mix things up, a story within the story you could say. I always look forward to your stories. Keep it up.

Fantastic concept and delightful story. You are my favorite author. I eagerly look forward to everything you write.

The best i have ever read here, and with a little more landscape, and shifting intrigues, it would be as good as my favourite author Wilbur Smith. I am so glad you gave us the teaser for the next chapter, so we know to expect more :D :D :D

Just wow !

More please

Ditto to all comments previous......

Just a thought.

DC, the story is AWESOME! I could not stop reading until I read all of it.

Great job but everyone else has told you that already!

I think you are a very good story teller and I've thoroughly enjoyed all y works you've posted on Literatica. But please, pay a little more attention when choosing names for your characters and don't make changes part way through. Rose is referred to as Ruth a couple of times and Abigal became Alison for a while! It really detracts from the flow of the story when you have to backtrack and confirm who is talking

I like DC's works and I enjoyed this, although this is actually an area explored by Dean Koontz in a couple of his works.

Not sure if a sequel is a good plan or what it can add, might be best with the end left hanging!

is always the Genesis and the Exodus. TK U MLJ LV NV

As always, editing is my weak point. Finding an editor that works for free is a challenge. Something of this size takes weeks of work and few people have the desire to take on such a task for free. A professional edit would cost over $5,000, so that's out since this is a hobby and not a profession.

This wasn't posted as chapters on this site. If I had done so, it would have taken two months to post them all. Each chapter is queued separately on a 2-3 day clock. Each chapter would have been reviewed separately then the next queued. Other author's works get their time as well. I have no idea how other writers post chapters before the story is complete. For all I know, entire chapters will be thrown out or rewritten as the story develops. I never plan any of my stories, so posting as I write is out.

I'll admit, I was extremely giddy when I saw this story in the new stories section in the app. I've fav'd a few DreamCloud stories and seeing this one had me excited. It took me a couple days to read in between real life, but it was definitely as fantastic as I've come to enjoy from DreamCloud. I can't wait for book 2 after the brief preview at the tail end of book 1.

No need to apologize. I will gladly read an unedited work of yours, warts and all, any day. I cannot imagine finding an editor who can equal your skill and talent. Perhaps if they did not try to add to the story, or suggest creative changes, sticking solely to the role of proof reader?

Thanks for sharing your imagination with us.

This one was a surprise today. Once I started I could not put it down. As somebody else commented, five stars are not enough. Cannot wait for more of "Stinky's" story.

next chapter please

Great work. The world is a better place having this story in it.

I hope to see more on this story (and probably will) this being said IMHO I believe that you have surpassed yourself. Well done !!!

An excellent story, and up there with top writers here. The only thing I ask is in chapter two don't skip straight to her being 18. Give us the fill between. It is to great of a story not to!

WOW! This is an amazing story that surpasses your others. I am fan of your awesome work! Keep it up! And I cant wait for chapter 2!

Great story in the best tradition of science fiction. (And the romance was definitely there!). It will be hard to top it with a sequel.

DC, excellent story! You are among a few authors on this site for whom I drop everything to read your latest story! I fully understand your comments on editing, I had no idea editing cost so much. This is a free site, with so many talented authors! It seems wrong for so many to point our minor errors, especially those of a "auto-spell-correct" programs. The excellence of the story erases any thoughts of those minor errors.

Again, excellent story! I look forward to chapter 2! The preview is intriguing!

But I'll forgive you since the story's awesome.

4 from me. Would be 5 in SF.

As I started reading this I kept recalling the movie Firestarter. Half way through I thought of reading the original Lethal Weapon and just how much better the book was than the movie because of the author's thoughts that cannot make it onto the screen. As the pages came to an end I was thinking how much I would like to see this as a mini series. The end of this page has made me a very happy reader.

My very favorite sci-fi author is the late Zenna Henderson (a pen name of a former Tucson teacher). This story is so much like much of her all too small body of work. Anyone who enjoyed this, as I certainly did, should find her writing and read it as well. Great work. Looking forward to Part 2. A true gem of a story. Possibly miscategorized as "Romance" but who cares. Minor editing/proofreading would help.

and Stinky/Teegan has the answers. TK U MLJ LV NV

DC. Have you thought of putting this on Smashwords or some other site. I would gladly pay for a copy. You should earn something for your efforts. Even though I can read it for free here I would like to support you somehow

This is great, amazing, awesome. I had to finish it in one go. Just one little thing, it should be in Sc-Fi category, just so that it reaches more fans.

if you let her become evil - or if you kill any one of the 3.

As good as any I have read, and I love sci-fi.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

It should be in the scifi catagory, but this is some of the best writing I've seen in a while. They should set up a PayPal tip jar for authors such as yourself. This is commercial quality writing.

She has known the true love of her parents, so she can never be evil.

Plus she is an empath, empathy precludes evil.

Why? Why end it like that 😕 Now I have to wait 😫 But to be honest I cannot wait to hear Teegans side ☺️

The story had a good flow......,,once I started reading I couldn't allow myself to stop.5 stars aren't enough...please write a sequel to this story.

Thank you so much.

You are the one author on here that I check on to see if something new is published. I've enjoyed every one of your publicationson here but this one finally got me to write a comment.

This was excellent!

Amazing. I cried. I cheered. I felt their exultation from here.

every time I read your new story, i think its the best on lit, but u always keep topping yourself

Thank you for another great story. I enjoyed it immensely. There were times when I felt my heart racing as I read, waiting to see what the outcome would be. I will patiently wait for the sequel and hope you continue to write other stories as well.

Yoshi

I have always loved your romance tales. They are among the best in this site. This story mixes my two favorite genres. Will Be waiting for the next part.

Again a wonderful story from your hand, thank you so much!

The plot reminded me of an older story in Literotica named "Death by Fucking" - an illchosen name to a good story about gifted children with special responsibilities.

That series died a sudden death when the gifted children had to solve a world climate crisis that the author wasn't gifted enough to find a way through.

Please don't fall into that trap!

For now, a 5 seems only adequate. Where's the tip jar?

Damn. Part 2?

Thank you for a great novel!

It was simply boring!

I gave it a 5

Once again, you've impressed me. I don't know how you continue to come up with these stories, and make the as engaging as you do, but I can't stop reading your writing. Unbelievable character development, and the twists and turns of your stories continue to astound me. Thank you for this story. I look forward to continuing chapters.

for this masterpiece. i really enjoyed reading it.

as usual. Really clever premise, great writing. As always, thanks.....

Your plot, story development, character development were all excellent. I couldn't stop reading. The dialogue and internal dialogues were terrific. Even the moral question of creating this type of being were well thought out and balanced. The sex and love were a great spice to the story and I liked how you wove in the family aspect of finding time for intimacy. Keep writing, either a sequel to this and/or other stories. You have a gift. Please share as much and as often as you can.

- Excellent Story!

You need to be published! I could not stop reading!

For some time you have been the best writer on this site. I can't believe you're actually getting better. Thank you for the privilege of reading your work.

Is all I can truly say....you have done an excellent job on this story, and I hope you continue it. It is original and very unique. I have honestly enjoy myself from the beginning to the end. Thank You

with your other usual tearjerkers, but a welcome one nontheless.

I loved the almost sci-fy ish story. I can't say I've ever heard or read of the telemotions, if you will.

"If young Stinky don't trust you, I'm gonna shoot you"

but was there a whole section where you couldn't make up your mind what you were calling Abigail...?

And I can't help but wonder... If Teegan shared with almost everyone that she loved Sam so much, did she share WHY...? I mean, people still seem stunned by the fact she does...

And can't help but think... It's not like people will remain unchanged for the full fifty thousand years and then suddenly Bam! complete change to how Teegan is... So I wonder if Sam is just a step closer already resulting in some of that extra love...

The entire premise is thought-provoking. The writing is top notch. The character development is believable. A first class story. Needs... more. Yeah, just more....

PLEASE!

The only word I can think of. I thought I was reading a published novel. You have a blessed talent, and the love scenes were nicely done, without resorting to what is usually found on this site. Exceedingly well done. Thank you for sharing your talent.

Very well done. I got lost in the story and can't wait until we get to meet a teenager. I guess that means the family survived potty training both kids. I'm curious as to a short treatment of how the kids handle adolescence together. Great read😀

This story is very, very good. You could have ended it simply by deleting the epilogue.

But this gives us something to look forward to. Now you have me dangling preps.

You still have problems with apostrophes in possessives and plurals, and you dangle prepositions. There are a few other little errors. Oh, and you are confused about to and too, too.

A wonderful piece. The inclusion of God is so appropriate and welcome. I would have enjoyed a longer discourse on the connection of love and the experience of God.

This belongs in novels and novellas. It's not a bad story. Just doesn't belong here

Given a story this good for free makes me really wonder about some of the pithy comments. This story is Really two good too miss, kudos DreamCloud.

I've enjoyed all your works. This story was exceptional. Looking forward to your next submission. Thanks

Top flight story. Well thought out and written. Waiting for the followup.

Gifted author! Suggest choosing a film director carefully, and not just anybody - a few typos to be corrected beforehand.

Btw, one can see the person behind a writer's "pen", and I certainly like the person who wrote this story - sort of one-way bonding ;-)

After reading "Rehab" I was prepared for disappointment. Was I wrong! This is publishable work. I am grateful I was given the gift you gave me here. I'm looking forward to reading your other stories. I don't care what category they are tagged with.

It's simply unbelievably magical.

I absolutely love your stories! You are a literary marvel but the way you end them so abruptly makes me want to brain you!

Thank you!

Excuse me for being greedy, but I want to read about Teegan and her quest for a Prom date! lol

One of the best story's I've ever ready I hope there is a follow up

You have a beautiful mind and an imagination that's based on how you believe people should treat each other. I love your world and the fact that you freely allow us to visit. When I first started reading your stories I quickly realized that they were not just entertaining but an actual experience. I'm actually transported by your words to a wonderful place. How do you thank someone for that. A number on a scale is so inadequate. You have a wonderful gift. I'm ready to open the next one. Thank you, Take Care

Well done!

One small error. Sam, calling his mother and being found, was seriously out of character considering his past and present mind. You could have come up with a more devious way for the family to be found.

Other than that, the story was compelling. You have a talent for story telling.

The story and telling of the story was excellent. I will look forward to reading more about Teegan and her family if you will write it. You skill could make you money I am sure you know. I am just happy to have stumbled into your world!!! Thank you very much!

I hope that a producer reads this and that the author makes millions off of the copy rights.... proofreading would be the only possible way to improve this fabulous story ...thanks Dreamcloud..

Wow. I've been hooked on your stories since I read The Promise. The Link is just amazing.

Both his and yours are excellent tales. 5* as usual. Anxiously awaiting The Link 2: Teegan.

I just stayed up half the night reading this! I loved every minute of it. Reminded me slightly of the Twilight baby, with the contact and projecting feelings, but I love Twilight =D LOVE LOVE LOVE! I hope you've sent it to publishers (-like ALL of them, they can be foolishly picky and miss good stories)

Thank you very much I love your stories and hate the wait, but the update you made yesterday on your bio gave me a little peace of mind and a reference. Now I know that I don’t have to come tomorrow looking for the second installment of “The Link”, but it tells me that it is coming along.

So, thank you.

Awesome story, was reading half the night

I couldn't stop reading.

Thank you!!!