All Comments on 'The Local Vintage'

Short and sweet. You do great things with very little. But as you wrote: it was far, far too brief…

P.S.

A sweet romance, if only a small view into it.

A lovely sweet romance. Amazingly crafted in so few words.

Brilliant, as always.

Of course it was ‘far, far too brief.’ That’s the curse and yet the beauty of the 750 word story.

Well done. 5*

I really hope you don't mind my saying this, but:

I used to think that "onehit" signified your gross undervaluation of your talent, but tonight I am reframing my interpretation, from my own vantagepoint; one hit is all it takes to get drawn in and enrapt in (enwrapped by) your spell, by your deft pen, your unstilted composing of images, characters and emotions in flowing prose. What Beethoven's string quartets are to instrumental music, your stories are to erotica. I find both alternately sweet, rich, earthy and deep, but taken individually or as a whole, absolutely sublime. I love the immersion, to emerge feeling, "Ah, with everything life throws at us, it also offers us this."

Nothing on this site pleases me as much as discovering and then reading your latest piece, and this little gem is no exception. Thank you for sharing.

Short, sweet and wonderful!, 5 stars. You crafted a smooth little nugget of gold, in an otherwise dull mine of jagged rocks. Thank you for sharing.

Rose Monroe 🌹

Makes you crave what will happen at ten ... and tomorrow.

I was sure there'd be fangs.

Absolutely beautiful, mesmerizing scene. So easily visualized; captured in just a few lines.

I'm certain that lives up to the rules of the challenge. Very well done. Please let us know how you do.

I’ll echo Trionyx comments, the brevity is also the curse, not unlike the perfect aperitivo….

Many thanks for the story Wanda, 5⭐️ regards, Ppfzz.

Something seems a little fishy here...

Thanks for doing the challenge 😘 Em

Sweet, sexy, erotic, and a hint of a far bigger, unspoken mystery. In only 750 words.

Brilliant.

I always enjoy your stories

Maybe its the start getting old together and enjoying the being together …. Thats what we are searching for, unconditional love ❤️ ….. beautiful

💝💝💝💝💝💝💝✨🌸

Beautiful and intense.

Not going to lie, when you said this was a 750 I was disappointed, because I love your writing, 750 just didnt feel like enough. That being said, this is incredible. You've absolutely knocked it ouy of the park. As a 750, this is perfect, the suspense, timing, its all spot on, but youve also managed to actually write a complete story. Lots of 750s leave you with unanswered questions, but youve found a way to make that a good thing. I have so many questions about these two lovebirds, but you've written their connection so well, I dont actually want or need to know the answers. Im happy with letting my imagination run wild with the possibilities.

Am I disappointed this isnt a full length story? Of course, you write too well for me jot to be greedy and want more, but damn if this isnt an amazing story in of itself <3 5*

A beautiful short story. So economical with words, yet promising so much.

You are such a gifted writer and I love your work.

Ditto @SeaReader “deft pen” Whoo! 😉 HOT. Gorgeous. Hopeful for love. 10/10

Writing flash fiction-length pieces and telling a whole story while also worldbuilding is tough, but of course you did an excellent job.

I believe things work differently in Italy. A quickie in the kitchen with the possibility of more in the future. A short tale of passion in 750 words. Well done!

So-so story... too bad there were no hot guys involved.

This was nice, insane that you can make any length of stories a good read

"750 words" is not a large enough canvass for the picture you were going for!

Almost works as a précis, though.

Well done Wanda. But after reading your stories for several years this feels incomplete. I know it was a contest entry but it really ends abruptly. Still enjoyed it, but keep wanting more.

This delicious quickie needs a continuation!

Sarahxxxxx

You tease. But in such a way! I need to know more about the church, the island, but NOT knowing, my imagination runs. But of course that's the point.

Bravo that you could do that in 750 words. Quick, but it felt complete. A lot of heat packed into a short space.

Holy fuck are you good. You really rose to the challenge.

Evocative. Leaves all three of us breathless.

Genius loci of a river, I'm guessing? Nice way to add some depth to a straightforward story.

Great entry, can't be easy to fit a good story within 750 words. Would also like to read more about these two.

the master of romance had a quicky

I don't do with short stories (well that short)

But it's you I can fail to wear your characters in no time. I really love how you write. Cheers

Fun and sexy.

What @SeaReader said. 100% I'm rubbish at expressing myself, luckily @SeaReader said it for me.

onehitwanda is the first author I look for when I check my feed. I'm eager to stay up late (or early) to read the new story in one pass.

Like a trailer for a movie you want to see, this delicious little snippet leaves me wanting more. Who are they and why is there this instant attraction between them? Nicely structured.

that was fun and well written be well happy and safe a fan shayne

Love that it is the same characters from Midnights Daughter

Lovely, but also read the full, heart-rending version.

A wonderful prelude to Midnight's Daughter!

Perfect exemplar of the benefits of embracing a strict (albeit arbitrary) constraint. Bravo!