All Comments on 'The Monster'

Always a great read..and I love the endings with the cheating wives getting destroyed....keep it up!!

Well done, author! The story was detailed and long enough. The character’s motivations were described well and the ending justified – thanks for an entertaining tale! Let's see what the arrogant "professional commentator" Alvaron53 can enhance the comment section with.

An excellent story. I do wonder tho and reading more of the cheating wives stories whether such women are actually mentally ill. And in this story, if the star is not criminally insane? Sex for many women is just a tool. One they use to obtain what they need or want, a means to an end. Some say women who marry and have children just marry to have a male to support her young and provide him with sex to keep him happy to provide. Other women use sex to get employment, to keep employment, or to be just paid for sex. Women tend to say men think with their little heads. But do women really think with their hearts or are the just calculating what they need to put out to obtain their own particular goals? Maybe some one can write stories that provide some insight?

Excellent writing, characterization and continuity. The dialogue was particularly well handled and convincing. Now I have to read more of this writers work; I already know I'm going to like it. Thanks for a great bit of entertainment.

The second to the last paragraph had me laughing out loud..."I survived the Monster"...LOVED IT!!! The whole story was satisfying...

Thanks...

I like your 'normal' cheating stories better though. Even if the guys sometimes come off as wimpy/suckers, they are more griping than this story was imo. This story was ok and its nice for the reader (even more for the author probably) to see a change of pace. It wasnt really very emotional or suspenseful though. <p><p>

I also dont think you need to make the wife into a sociopath in order to justify divorce. Hope that wasnt your intent when writing this story - to make a wife bad enough that the husband could/should in your opinion divorce her. If your wife doesnt love you or value your feelings enough to stop herself from deliberately doing something she knows would hurt you, thats enough to divorce. I understand that this is supposed to be read as a completely different type of story than your usual (crime drama as opposed to emotional drama) and I did try. Maybe I wasnt 100% successful because I could help comparing it to your other stories and deciding I liked them better. <p><p>

Just because I like your more conventional cheating stories better, doesnt mean this one was bad though. I was an entertaining read even if it didnt provoke much in the way of strong emotion from me. Thanks again for writing.

The story was built, from the beginning, as a man being heinously wronged; and the consequences were going to fit the crimes. <p>

Subsequently, the author never did invest enough quality time to build Gina, the "monster," into a human --- despite the fact that it was REPORTED to the audience (and that's how it was done: it was reported: we didn't get to really see and/or feel her incredible beauty or how she could fuck practically any one, simply by wearing her robes when they drop in)... <p>

CONSEQUENTLY, there's no sympathy for her, and MUCH LESS bittersweet and conflicting thoughts like you might sense/see in, say, "Madame Bovary"? <p>

[[[Of course, with the same breath, even I must admit it is not fair to compare a 10 page Literotica story to Flaubert's great novel about crime (of the flesh) and punishment.....]]] <p>

Indeed, we never even knew much about Alex: his family, his likes or dislikes, his daily routines. As a result, too, we don't really care much for him, although he's trying to convince us that what he went through deserved our attention, if not sympathy, because he was so heinously wronged by "the monster." <p>

Well, okay...

Thank you for another very entertaining story. You are one

of the authors who always deliver entertaining,well written

tales.

THANKS for another GREAT offering. Always looking forward to the next story.

drmike

Once again - the best.

Great, Super are just a few words to describe this story!!! Keep ones like this comming!

All those Anoms?? are they hidding out from their wives?

now for a comment.

I fucking hate you. You post another wonderful, well planned, easy to read, exciting, suspensful, sexy with a twist, of a man who can plan and think, and he puts the pain in the right place while he moves on. and i am still fighting to finsh my so-called 'Novel'.

i admire your writing skill and the way you think.

a damn fine job,

i am the h20wader

wade

Another fine story from one of the best! Even had shafting a shyster at the end, nice twist. A thinking mans reaction to a problem, not everyone goes nuts on instinct. Someone, an anon coward, said you didn't build Ginas character enough for sympathy, she had no character and deserved scorn and ridicule. You get what you earn, nothing is given in this world.

Ohio, liked the story. Your concept of a self centered person with no morals isn't new (but then again, what is?), but you did a very good job of putting your own twist in the tale.

Can't wait for your next one.

CCM

I thought the story was OK, well developed etc, but I wouldn't call it erotica, more like a story with sex in it. Not for me - but everyone else seems to have enjoyed it so what do I know.

<p>The first part of the name for this website is a reference to literature, and that's a far better thing than (cheap) eroticism to me.</p>

<p>I would love it if I thought better of this story because Ohio is one of my favorite writers. However well this story was done so far as the technical aspects are concerned (punctuation, grammar, etc.), the story line seemed a little forced to me … somewhat pretentious and “distant,” as it were. Another commenter referred to it as Ohio “reported” a good story and I think that was an apt statement. For instance, while the writer told us about how angry the husband was becoming, he didn’t illustrate that anger with action the husband could have done (a need to pound a body bag at the gym; running 5 miles to work off stress, etc.).</p>

<p>Instead, it was all pretty insipid. Though Ohio “reported” the husband was losing his temper, he didn’t show it until the very end. Finally, the final confrontation with the cheating spouse was too pompous and staged for my taste, and the dialogue followed the same pattern. If Ohio will revert to his “hands on” approach to emotional context (as he did in his first story), instead of this “arm’s length” stuff, he would be a much, much better writer.</p>

<p>One thing that bothers me about the story is that the protagonist let his friend lose his auto repair shop and the husband didn’t seem worried about that at all. If Ohio addressed that and I missed it, I apologize. Also, some of the dialogue about the tapes of the car burning and the cops not being able to prove it wasn’t very well done. Since the tapes showed two men doing the deed, the police would certainly be able to show arson, though one of the characters remarked it would be difficult. A minor glitch though.</p>

<p>Ohio, let the emotions flow, man. You’re a better writer than 99% of the folks who post on this site. Prove it!</p>

<p>Ron123XYZ@foreveranonymous.naturally

I liked the story, but I wonder if I could be as detached as the main figure in the story. Thanks it was fun reading it.

I agree that the Gina character Could of been a bit more developed as a regular person... sexy dynamic flirty but seeingly faithful. But this little weakness was not enough for Me to detract from the story.

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the ending that focused on how a story like this would become the new media sensation of the month/ season was also well done

Loved your story. While there are many of the types that you talked about in the opening of the story: I am speaking of those that will still get a thrill from the evidence of Gina fucking. They are growing in numbers as our society becomes more and more indoctrinated in to the money culture.

Money can come and go. Money can become worthless, as evidenced with the Mexican Peso a few years ago. What is left for a person is his own congruence. To be other is to not be what you think yourself to be. Ie: A good person.

Now peice of ass is worth a man's pride in himself. There are so many today that sell their soul for the "rock of krack" that many do. When life is all over and done, and although I don't believe in a man that was supposed to be the son of God. I do believe that we face some sort of judgment in the end. That judgement is what a person should be concerned with. It should be the way we live our lives. Sorry to ramble but you showed that you are aware of the evils that men do and are, from your past stories, a man of conscience.

I understand the need to keep things within a story context - and story length - but the 2nd half felt a little flat because you answered all the outstanding issue by the middle and the rest was tying up the loose ends. That's a hard nut to crack. You might have had the main character do less so more is a surprise. Beats me.

The characters were somewhat devoid of emotion but this was over ridden by a well plotted tale which tied up most loose threads by the end. Another excellent story from a fine author.

I concur with all the other positive comments. Well written: plot pacing is excellent; the basics are coherent: good grammar, punctuation, and spelling; the characterization is often subtle and other times rightfully blunt; the motivation is clear and precise and makes sense; and you put together a readable, suspenseful story that held me to the end! I felt sympthaty for the protagonist and could not believe that she - the antagonist - could be so selfish and stupid to blow (so to speak) such a good situation. Plausible, everything was believable. I am jealous. Oh, and thank you for not prolonging the story over days and days and days.

The tale of sweet innocent $girl$ who fell in love with a wealthy but cold, uncaring man. His cruel refusal to turn over every last penny of his personal fortune and control of his company forces $her$ to seek comfort in the loins of others. The heartless bastard then uses his power and influence to destroy $her$. Sad story.

This is one of the best stories on this site. Enjoyed reading it.

Great Story!

just as before excellent

lovely

A great read as usual - what more can I say.

Regards, Jack

Wow! Ohio's writing gets better and better. Great story - crisp, concise, and interesting. Could use an epilogue chapter, as Gina may have a few tricks left...

Yes Congratulations Ohio for a job well done that story was A1 and you did a smashing job on the editing not one word was mispelled you should get a Pulitzer for this work keep up with the great writing.

Ohio, I've enjoyed your work all along, as we have communicated. This is right up there w/ you best to date, although you'll have to go some to beat "Three Tuesdays" and "My 2nd Nightmare". Great writing, glad to see you back in action. Thanks!

First, like most of the previous posters I simply wish to congratulate you on a great read. I could not stop the reading, it was so gripping. For me as a traditional reader of you grasp me like that you can’t do much wrong or do much better it’s simple as that.

Now to my comments on some of the previous comments.

To HARRY and AJ, It was my impression that the implied author created by OHIO for this story put a great deal of effort both in the preface and throughout the story, to first explain in general terms and then demonstrate with examples that the husband’s character understood that he was unlucky to be married to a smart sociopath (in so many words) and therefore could not be developed more into a normal person, as you put it. AJ, The story targeted an unusual person who WAS a monster. The whole premise - as demonstrated by the name of the story is that the husband learns that he, unlike MOST OTHER people was indeed married to a monster. It was not claimed or implied only a monster like his wife could justifiably be divorced. BTW, extraneously to this story, I can think of some of this author’s best stories where there is an ending with no reconciliation AND no monster as a wife either; just plain cheater…).

Part of the reason I was so impressed by the story IS because OHIO did such a good job in building the wife’s unusual character. Without doing this part well – I suspect that it would have shaken the credibility of the rest of the plot pretty badly. I have not become privy as to how exactly did OHIO build the character of the wife. At times I call for authors to do what is known in the visual arts: a character study. So it certainly FEELS like he did that. Whether he ACTUALLY did it or simply put together his cumulative knowledge life experience and creative intuition -I don’t know. It just happens that this wife fits so well into the profile of intelligent Sociopaths who can and do lead on their victims -often for years to their selfish and a –moral purposes. The term: ‘monster’ is not a politically incorrect and heartless term used to describe a person who has the Diagnosis of a Sociopath. Quite the contrary; it’s the sensation that you ARE facing a monster which cue you in to the possibility that the person standing in front of you might be a Sociopath. Believe you me the experience is quite unsettling, especially when you get to know them better, as the initial impression is usually so misleading. Again, you did a great job on the details from the characterological set up (using people; lack of any empathy to other’s feelings; even to the more subtle qualities which could differentiate the Sociopath from the Narcissistic personality such as the paranoid thinking (not a characteristic of the latter) as demonstrated by the wife’s complaints against the husband holding back his great wealth from her.

To minor Critique, IMO, the minuses you attributed to the sense we get of Gina is actually the mark of OHIO’s success. On the level of being on the receiving end of Gina’s pathological behavior (the angle from which the story is told) you are not supposed to feel any empathy. In the unusual case that one gets to work with her likes (most likely under a mandatory program or in a secure facility), one may get into childhood and onset material and could feel empathy with THAT part of her life. Therefore comparison to “Madame Bovary" is not appropriate, not because of the ‘limited breath’, but because you compared apples (Emma’s character) with oranges (Gina’s character).

Though I tend to enjoy erotic stories about lusty wives who may not get punished for their transgressions, I can regognize and congratulate an author on a fine story whether it's about retribution or whatever. Ohio, I really enjoyed this story. Thank you for a very good read.

I don't know how many folks here appreciate getting publishable quality work for free. There is no doubt that this piece could be sold in several venues. Take some of the sex out and you've got a mainline story, as is and some of ezines would be glad to pay.

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I'm not sure why some of the better writers continue to publish here for free, but as a starving student I'm glad they do. I also realize that there's a larger number of writers who are "almost" ready for prime time, they write for practice and feedback. The rest of us writers are trying to learn how to get better. Don't spare the rod, but use it on the story, not on the writer.

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I know that I've seen an increase of what I'd call "killer" comments that tear a piece apart because the commenter didn't like the content. Please don't hesitate to point out flaws and problems, but remember that while you might not like more stories in a particular genre, you do want more free stories. Tearing down the writer... as opposed to the story will cause the supply of stories, especially well written ones, to dry up.

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Sorry, getting off my soap box, I just want to say thanks for the story and to tip my hat to your talent.

Your opening was the ageless dilema for mankind in why do evil people seem to prosper, but in the timeless Biblical Proverbs the answer always reveals something we never wait around to see.

Evil people always consume themselves or they make a mistake and a larger predator shows up and consumes the little shark they are.

I have seen it time and again. Payback always comes as it always does in life. The fire lit always incinerates the arson soul void of human humanity.

With a turn of good luck on Alex, you turned the main character into a believable one. I have to say This is the best story thus so far on here that I have ever read and not loaded with sloppy banter wife hatred. I usually stop reading but this story had me wanting more. I hope you write more stories as you are awesome at it. Thanks for the great evening reading. Cheers!

did on purpose. I just dont think it makes for as good of a story as some of his others. His other stories made me think and feel more than this story did. Here, a good guy is taken in by a 'monster' but he triumphs in the end. Thats all there is and even that is not as well constructed as it could have been. There was no suspense or fear or worry. The husband finds out relatively early on what is happening and resolves the problem with few, if any, setbacks or hurdles to overcome. If the bad guy hadnt been revealed until later or things didnt fall into place so easily, it would have been better imo. <p><p>

I do like that the good guy won and didnt have to suffer - often I complain about authors overdoing it by heaping shit on the good guy and/or not punishing the bad guy. Like I said before, I dont think it was a bad story at all, just not a great story imo. I wont even say Im 100% sure that I 'got' everything the author intended. Its at least as likely that my less than stellar review of the story comes from my own failings as a reader, as from the author's writing. Whatever the reason though, I didnt like the story as much as some of his others (or as much as some other author's mystery/suspense type stories - i.e. KK). Maybe it was supposed to be read as a character study on sociopaths but there wasnt much in the way of insights into what made her ticked. Maybe the whole point of the story was that she was just a creature of highly evolved and cunning instinct. I dont know what the author intended so I just read it as a crime/mystery with some less than perfect pacing.

I doubt Gina was like that to star--money grubber.. It just into her.. It would seem that she could have anything she wanted, though.. Why more?? Maybe she just didn't like asking for anything?? Now if Gina had paid attention to the LW stories she would have known to never have lovers over to the house..

There is no emphasis, nor would I say is any effort to work on developing or getting early insight into the character of Gina. But I believe it’s intentional. I would call this story a psychological thriller (I was reminded of the darkness and conspiracy of “Chinatown” by Polanski), and for me quite a good one at that. But While ‘the enemy from within’, as I implied in the title of my first comment, had to be shaped credibly so as to be perceived as the real blood chilling threat at one moment and the seemingly intimate companion at another, the emphasis throughout the story is not on the wife. I can easily see this story turning into a movie, especially at the moment when the husband realizes that he may be in a deadly trap wherever he goes, as it looks like BOTH the head of his security and his life long friend AND his wife are in fact trying to kill him. From that moment on, the story is on the HUSBAND trying first to ensure his survival, then making sure who exactly are the villains and what is the extent of the conspiracy against him and finally zeroing in on the mechanics of it; the how and the why, which like a good classic psychological thriller is the pathological mind of one character. Usually though, the focus is not on analyzing the progress of the pathology of the character. True, you have to like Psychological thrillers in order to enjoy this kind of scripts. Sounds to me like Drama which emphasizes characters’ evolution and interaction is more to your taste (I like those too) . All I am saying is that in this case Ohio ventured into a neighboring genre, not forgotten some of the crafting tools of a regular dramatic story

I did not feel a lot of compassion for him as he knew she was a gold digger, but I still liked the story and the characters. Thanks for your words and time.

Thanks for taking the time to entertain us. Good story.

I enjoyed it very much, thank you for writing.

Good story... usually prefer more sex but story was entertaining

Fine writing and excellent storytelling. A few oopsies in the prose but overall an entertaining read. Thank you.

Wonderful work Author. The best of the rest for the month in many regards and probably one of your best rationally with fairness.<P>

The strength of your talent, detail and imagination is exceptional. Your scenes, word pictures and exchanges were plausible and as is your style very well crafted with great flow.<P>

You continue to step up your portfolio with this strong addition.<P>

Thanks Author - You are appreciated.<P>

With Very High Regard

Great story! One of your better efforts. What amazes me is the lack of really nasty, negative comments that your stories often provoke. Even the few readers who gave you a score of 50 or 75 were not vicious.

Boyd

Ohio, and I found it to be a story truely worth the time it took to read it. It will also be worth a reread in future days. Thank You. Ronnie W.

Hell of a ride, mate. Thanks for taking the time to entertain us with your story.

I really enjoyed the story. It had a good flow and it would probably make a pretty good tv movie. This story makes me want to read your other stories.

the reference to cable news is right on. great story.

....plot line was great. Nothing rushed or taped together to make it work. Very good continuity and it all worked to a well developed conclusion!! Kudos, kudos, kudos!!!!

Why do some authors in the LW category get praise and others don't? Because of authors like Ohio who carefully nurture a story, taking the time to develop the plot as well as fleshing out his characters. The reader can then sink into the story, enjoying the ride, the development of the plot, the conflict and the resolution. These are the things called the elements of the story, so we give high praise to those authors that understand that it isn't about "the stroke" but about the story, especially in the LW category.

Not at all what I've come to expect at Literotica but a very good read! I think your protagonist needed a setback or two (had too much control/positive outcomes) but otherwise a well constructed piece.

I didn't comment the first time I read this. Women like Gina belong in jail. That is where evil lurks. I was working on an offset press in a woman's correctional facility here in California. There were about 25 inmates in the large room full of printing equipment. It was around valentines day and the instructor said to make the cards as loving as possible for their significant other. This little old lady said "some of us have killed our significant other". Most of the ladies burst out in giggles. I felt the hair on the back of my neck standing up and realized I was in the presence of evil. Scared the hell out of me. Ohio you got this story right. Monsters do exist. thanks for a great read. Luis

A bit longer than I prefer, but a very good read, well plotted, and enjoyable right to the end.

........So sad,...but true in some cases....well written and thoroughly enjoyed....thank you ohio...GO BUCKS....

Excellent read. You had me captivated from the beginning. I even ignored some important work for a nice long break of literature...or shall I say, Literotica ;)

Kudos! Looking forward to future posts.

TTT

It was a good and entertaining read,i enjoyed the plot off the story.It had drama amd mystery to it,even though it was told without much emotion...I like Ohio's storys,hes one of my favorite Authors...And i loved the ending... Good job writing,Ohio i hope you keep posting ...B.N.

I loved this story. MORE!! MORE!!!!

awesome story. Well worth the read.

The best part ishisbirthday present at the end of the story from Nancy. Very entertaining.

With some changes I could give iit 5 stars. However, a number of things are very stupid and illogical.

First no one is going to talk while being recorded and certainly not the head of a security firm. They know better. All he would get is "No comment."

Second, as the head of a large corporation he would not be stupid enough to beat up some. The law takes a very firm view of assult. He would go to jail and be sued for millions of dollars.

Finally no 37 year old hide is beautiful. Men that can't do better might want her but she couldn't compete with even average looking college girls.

"No 37 year old can be beautiful?" Cripes, it's amazing how self-centered the young can be, some of them at least. Yes, college-age girls can be cute. Kittens are cute, too, but that doesn't mean I'd want to fuck one.

You are more than right about 37 yo women. Have you seen a pic of Vicky Vette when she was 39/40? Entertaining story. Well thought out and imaginative. Without doubt a 5.

Placing your comments attached to a specific story does little to stop the abuse against writers. DWornock is a perfect example of a small mind trying to make a splash in a big pond. He's been a member since June 11, 2011 but has managed to provide negative comments 811 times. If you want to make a strong statement then CONTACT Literotica. The contact for comments is on the first page of the website. The more readers who contact Literotica citing this abuse will hopefully have Literotica take action against them, hopefully by blocking them. Providing constructive comments is positive, providing abuse is not.

DWornack is a teenager. What do you expect from a child? He knows all like the average teen... Wisdom comes from experience and he has none. He is never totally negative, he just doesn't realize yet that not just highschool girls are beautiful.

Critics come in all flavors, and apparently, ages.

I wish I could say I was more mature and experienced in the ways of the world when I was nineteen as opposed to when I was thirty. Alas, my interests as a teen, were more...heavenly, rather than earthy. And later, although my views were tempered by some experience, I was still more concerned with the seemingly fleeting desires I pursued. Yet, my own --albeit, questionable-- memory of my early years seems to point to a flagrant arrogance and abject disregard for anyone considered older by a difference of more than ten years.

Now that I'm nearing sixty, I find myself less bothered by the opinion of our youth than I was bothered by the opinion of oldsters when I was a youth. There is deep irony there somewhere, but the main point is that many of us aren't separated just by social class, but by time, too. I know, one day, a day that will come all too soon, the youth of today will be in our current position of years and in all probability expounding the same argument of the inexperience of the youth that criticizes them.

I can't help but find the situation intensely amusing and somewhat pitiful.

Sir, your bio alleges you are over 18. If this is indeed true, you better start wising up fast. The degree of youthful ignorance and arrogance your posting reveals is truly staggering. I'm not going to waste my time trying to educate you (none are so blind as those who will not see) but I will pray that you survive long enough understand just how stupid you have made yourself appear. My sincere apologies to ohio for taking away from the discussion of his excellent story. Thank you for sharing it with us.

DWornock.. If you are at the very least lucky enough to grow up and reach the age of 30 you will start to understand what everyone else is saying about you. Yes, young girls in college are beautiful and many of them have a fantastic body. But they have no experience. I'm not just talking about sexual experience but experience in life. Hell, they could have had a hundred lovers since high school but with whom? Another inexperienced college or high school KID. You see, even men learn as they age as well. Why don't you go back a few years and pick out several "college cuties" and look them up now. A woman doesn't actually become a woman until she passes the age of 30.

Oh, why don't you learn the proper word to use in a sentence that actually means what you are trying to imply. You talk about a 37 year old hide... does that mean she has been hidden for 37 years? I believe the correct word you are looking for is "HYDE". Isn't your generation supposed to be internet savvy? Then you should learn to use those resources to your advantge. Or you could have just paid attention when you were in either high school or college and learned the difference first hand.

What you need sonny boy is some life experience and I have a suggestion for one of the best introductory courses I can think of, and this is from personal experience. If you can pass the test/entry exam, go see your friendly local USMC recruiter and see if you can even pass muster at my favorite place in South Carolina. A little vacation spot named MCRD Paris Island. They even pay you to be there.

Jack

Great story. I wouldn't call it a revenge story, but a justice one. Nice work! ^__^

Thank you for that info. We must get rid of DWidiot. I will do as you said. Sorry author for the rant but I did score before. Thanks. Jim

Thanks for sharing.

This was a great story. Could be a soft core mini series on 'Max. Gina was way more than a cheating whore slut wife. She was a diabolical scheming monster that far surpassed her just being a cheater. Cold calculating bitch using her pussy to get what she wanted. If she didn't get greedy it could have gone farther for her. But greed sometimes surpersedes common sense and she paid the price. Fuck her.

HA HA

...until you misspelled "Parris Island."

I don't know what you do for a living but writing should at least be a hobby and you will be rich by many standards from the royalities

Keep it up.

One of the best I have read on this site. Very well developed plot. Thanks.

Cute, well written, lots of sex and action, would have given it a higher grade if there was something over 5.

You are obviously a writer - The story was gripping and intelligent - I am glad I happened upon ' The Monster '. I am also looking forward to reading more of your work.

PS

What a treat

Thank you for writing. I would have liked to read about a big bull dyke taking over "the Monster" immediately upon her arrival in prison. A really good story.

Isn't that Ohio's ususual mo?

A great story with lots of new revelations paced well throughout the story. Interesting characters. The protagonist was rich and powerful, but not the cartoon character that stories like this often have. I enjoy your stories, but somehow missed this one.

Thanks for the effort.

This is one of the reasons ohio is on my favorite authors list.

5 HUGE Stars.

Thoroughly enjoyable

This story is so unlike you, ohio. That said, it was a great read and rightfully deserved my 5/5 voting.

It was a great job of describing an inhuman monster.

Glad to see a non perfect person exact some no nonsense revenge for a change too.

Thanks for your work. New authors should study it No mistakes and a well developed story line. I wish you were still writing.

Reasonable man

Cleverly told, especially re the attorney, the PR gal's meeting details saved until Gina was confronted, etc. I FINALLY remembered the ending with just a few paragraphs remaining. The writing style was SUPERB! Although I cannot agree with the recent comment that the story was written perfectly, I saw no more than a handful of errors. Quite an accomplishment for a story of this length. I am glad to see that ohio has come out of semi-retirement to write one story each in '13 and '14. I hope more will follow.

Still fantastic!

You have the skills of a fantastic writer, kept me on the edge of my seat throughout the entire story. A+ !

Well written and a fantastic storyline.

Thanks for the read

I didn't think people found guilty of crime(s) were allowed to make a profet from it

I've read a few of your stories. There seems to be a common thread.

Did you have a woman in your life that cheated on you?

Congrats. Good BTB story. Four out of five. Well written as always. My only constructive criticism is the winter glove for the punch in the board room seemed to appear out of no where.

I may be wrong but look up amy fischer and her book deals while in prison

This is my first comment on literotica from most of the stories i have read this was the one i liked most

That you wouldn't have them decide to let bygones be bygones and put them back together.

Good read thank you.

Six stars out of five.

Excellent story. I only wish I could give it more than 5*s.

Pretty is, as pretty does! Well done, 'ohio.'

strikes again!