All Comments on 'The Monster Pt. 16'

Nothing….

Love the story. But it’s like a frustrating blue baller plot. Someone get laid for fks sake.

Now you're dragging it out. Still a good read but it is getting Boring.

Nothing wrong with a bit of a built-up but 16 chapters later and Jack still hasn't fucked anyone, that's beyond a bit of a stretch. And he would probably fuck everything that moves and doesn't in the one chapter!!

Just write a story not a text transcript.

Reads like the old Burger King add..."Where's the Beef?"

1 star utter waste of time.

I need Jack to wake up and own his power!

Still struggling with the ever- elusive mechanics of English, I see. It's too bad nobody has invented something you can hold in your hand and look up basically anything with. Maybe it's just that you don't know enough to know how much you don't know.

Oh boy, getting closer and closer. He has a date with a sexy teacher, his sister is ready to go down on him, so is his aunt. Can't wait to see if the pay off disappoints or not

Man I don't wanna be rude write at your own pace and the build up while long is interesting but can I ask more then demand that if you choose to keep going this slow you A) make longer chapters like had you combined 14 15 and 16 into one. Or B) post more often. Getting two pages then having to wait 2 weeks is rough. Thanks though

Keep developing the characters . You’re doing a great job. I love it.

You painted yourself into a corner by doing days of the week. I can understand wanting to drag out the suspense and show the male characters hesitation to becoming involved with his sister etc. but 16 chapters of "poor me, all my relatives want me, but I'm a clueless idiot" is getting old. It's part of the reason I stopped reading most of your other stories as well. Nothing meaningful ever really happens and the characters are clueless.

I believe at this point he is jerking us around. Seeing how long hecan keep writing this shit and see how many click it/read it.

This story has totally captivated me and I love it so much, but seriously we gotta have someone get fucked soon!

Too much of a BAD thing,

I love your work but this is beyond ridiculous at this point 16 chapters of build up, 16!!! AND we are no closer than we were at the end of chapter 1!?! I really don't know what your endgame is here but if you don't get there soon you might lose more than stars because of this. I know it's your story and you SHOULD do it the way you want but at the same time based on the comments I'm seeing with each chapter it looks like your starting to lose your fan base as well. It's bad enough you have two stories that are so similar going at one time but drawing them out for this long will probably not end up well for you as a writer on a site like this. I know you can do better and I hope you do before it's too late.

fantastic, but the blunt ending is killing me...You are a great story teller. thanks again

Dragging this little to no sex story out to 16 chapters when it could have been done in three to four chapters is beyond annoying.

I thought you had a golden thing going here and I liked the teasing to a point. But you know what? Too much of it has turned this story into nothing but pure shit. Will you ever let the guy in your story grow up. So go fuck your self and just stop wasting our time.

I agree with the anonymous who comments on if the story has such a slow pace, the chapters should be longer or if shorter, more frequent. It's really annoying having to wait for so long to finally receive a short chapter with nothing relevant happening in it. I wonder what are this author's real intentions with this story. However, whatever they are, I'll keep following until it ends or until I get tired of waiting for something relevant to happen, whatever happens first.

Great work keep it up! I rather have a long story then just one chapter and then the author is done with it, My wish is that the mature ladies end up pregnant!

I still like this storyline. Looking forward to the next chapter. Keep writing the way you are and I will keep reading. Its a fun story to read. 5stars

Damn ,16 chapters and nothing but he cant jack off on his own . Come on man give us something. Lol hell with 16 inches he could blow himself and get caught by a jelous female that wants it herself

I don't recall seeing a story with such a huge disconnect between the comments and the scores.

Anonymous, the huge disconnection between the comments and

I think that the disconnection between the comments and the scores is because there's an active group of haters that keep leaving negative comments chapter after chapter.

Great stuff! Keep it building. My money is on the mom getting laid first. <8=)

Loving this. I bet the Aunt takes hes virginity first.

Was considering starting this, though the giant dick thing isn't generally my cuppa, but saw the score on this chapter and decided to check the comments. Seriously? In all the prior chapters, the main character never once had sex? Holy shit. Guess I'll wait a few more months before starting this one, and see what happens to the score. Damn...

One of the best story that I have read, I hope their will be more in future , I have to post as anonymous because when I first started to read I must have put in wrong email address .and can not get it to accept my email, I have tried to get with literc it is but no luck hope you do more in the series

I'm reading your anime, aren't I.

#TeamClara is getting nervous.

The guys a moron.

32,672 chapters later and still really nothing.

This cockblocking with things preventing the MC from having sex is getting really frustrating.

Had such high hopes for this story. But god damn. Nothing is a high price to pay. Not even a half anything to be interrupted. Another 6 parts before anyone touches him? But he gets cock blocked. God damn