All Comments on 'The Monster Pt. 21'

Finally the next installation

Again, too short. try making a chapter that encompasses at LEAST a 24 hr. period! Based on current trend that would give you almost 2 pages of material. Some will even say that that is short as well, but it would be a step in the right direction! You have great material, and we want to see much more of it. Think about it you tease!

Now this is more like it. Keep it up (no pun intended).

Love it but could you add new chapters quickly.

Amazed that a ridiculous fantasy about some kid with a 16” cock can actually last this many parts. Make it stop. It was dumb at pt.1.

Finally

Felt rushed.

Now that we are to the sex parts keep going. Wouldn't hurt to make it two pages.

Enjoying your stories very much. I agree that the chapters could be longer and hopefully come sooner :). I enjoy the women getting excited about facials and love when they get into dirty talk.

Great. Still loving your story. Looking forward, hopefully not too long, to your next chapter. 5stars

I like the story. Have been here since chapter 1. Can't wait till chapter 22 hope Jack gets his teacher again and hope soon he gets his aunt and sister

Loved this entire series. You keep teasing us and we just want more.

Please keep these coming, I cant get enough.

Also, why the fuck is someone commenting below about too many chapters. Why have you read 21 stories if you are not into it?

The person who claims they've hated the story since part 1 is still following it at part 21... how are people so fucking stupid?

i HAVE BEEN "hooked" SINCE cHAPTER 1. thank you for continuing the story. JACK Still Has a whole Harem to experience and share his talents...Great Work 5Star.

thank you so much, i absolutely loved it. cant wait for more. this was awesome. you are awesome. SO AMAZING.

BTW. Im very glad you do 1 page at a time, of course i want more pages but these chapters are so detailed you have to do a page at a time. so it works to keep us hooked

Man I hated the build up to chapter 21 but I kept going because I felt too invested in the characters to quit reading I'm glad I stuck around i like where it's going 5 stars

To boring. Could have more details how the mother felt . Also how her felling and her body reacted needing more and more . And how more she crave it . Felling more desire of him.

The grammar's always been a bit spotty, but it's absolutely getting worse in spots. This sex scene is definitely better than the last one, but it still could use a good editing pass.

I think the line about a slippery slope, applies here... can't wait for the next chapter!!

So happy that you'll continue to release tgis series with a bigger gap. Love the hot sex, my only problem is the typos, but if that's all then you're doing good

This is a free sight for story's and trying to get money for your story's is wrong. They have contests all the time for that. But to hold back on the rest of this story is wrong. I have enjoyed reading them and hope you finish the rest of the story. I don't pay for story's

From the 16 or 17 part where jack cums all cover his mom in basement, from there all the parts were ercotic lots of sex enjoyed it a lot but sum PPL in their comments have mentioned to check you typo error as when you r reading it just kills the excitement. It's like you asked for a steak but you get a burger too bad. May grammerly an grammer checker can help you correct you errors. All the best hope you continue the story n the series as well.

The reason these writing are so short is to milk their patrons for as much money as possible the writing style is amateurish and childish

Finally

I like this story. But you need to spell check.

Hey Charlie, do you ever think what you write? Your build up of the story goes on and on till Kingdom comes, then suddenly BAM! 2 fucks in the space of a few hours. And both women engulf his 16 inches as if their cunts have no ending. There is not the slightest discomfort or pain. Or does Jack's cock magically reduces itself to maybe 5 or 6 inches once he gets in a woman? Please be more realistic in the fucking scenes.