All Comments on 'The Mother I Never Knew Ch. 02'

I like that sister Nathalie is being worked into mix. To what degree ? Only heaven & Final Stand knows . Frankly Heidi is a bit player who got a very extended turn in the spotlight. She's willing & avid but so what ? I would have preferred that the narrator stay single like Jerry in aforementioned show.

There's a reason that George, Kramer & Elaine didn't rate their own sequels out of ' Seinfeld' . If Heidi is going to stay , F.S. has to bring her out of one-note pony status. Still I enjoyed the other disparate characters like the thug lesbian gang & overly possessive cop ex-boyfriend.

This author is taking chances & weaving in multiple elements into a crazy quilt of a story. Bravo for that, but please be mindful of keeping all the separate plot threads and colors in overall story harmony.

Influencing 'people', that being to kind a word for the cop, and the one former associate. Think that she may be dumb enough to come back for her Final Scene.

What a fun family this is becoming, and Heidi, everyones fun sub willing to please all the Family I am sure

DAMSEL Approved

Very readable and interesting. Interesting premise and development. I knew a Heidi once- a little too far down the path for a happy ending in that case. Just thinking out loud. Now, "Mom".....that could be fun.Looking forward to the next installment.

Yipee! Damn, you got good stories. You should totally self-publish them on amazon and the likes :)

Can't wait for more :)

Why did you write this in present tense? It feels unnatural because no one ever speaks in present tense in real life.

This point of view i.e. this prospective has me intrigued I couldn't stop reading it and can't wait for more .

The prospective of 25 years in prison for killing his father is unlike anything I have ever read , other than trash novels , Thank you for this and I can't wait for more .

Bravo ! Bravo !

There's more coming right? Please!

Very good story, Hope best to the following chapiters.

I love this series. You are doing a great job. I'm waiting for josh to nail sienna. I love every part of your story.

Keep it coming. I can not wait till the next installment. The Mom being submissive is fantastic. I can't wait till he "sticks" it to her.

you have to continue this-great characters, too--totally hot sex, love Heidi-she's got great literary potential, you'll have fun with her character, as well as the other 3 principals in this clever story-good job

keep this going good story in a strange way

Dear Gods in Heaven, this is a fantastic read! Truly well done!

The way the characters interact with one another, the overall pace of the story, how you describe everything without going overboard; it's all so very, VERY, well done. I cannot adequately describe how good this is, and I'm trying my damnedest to do so!

I sincerely hope this has a third or even fourth chapter in it, as there are so many questions that are still left to be answered!

Will Joshua have sex with his mother? Will he treat Heidi with the love she deserves, or go off the deep end like his father and grandfather? Is his sister (or potential aunt as the case may be) more like him, or their mother? Will she be a part of their "family" dynamic? If so, will she do so willingly, or will their mother force her into it? What of Natalie's crazy "lesbian" friend; is she a future part of this, or a background character?

So many questions, so much of this amazing story left untold!

I eagerly await another submission!!

About 4 days ago after a manic bender that ran for over ten days, I crashed hard. My writing went from around 12K a day to less than 2k. Added to that, I write stories in portions, thus I'll write a beginning, move on to another story then return and finish it up. What happened was a perfect storm for getting stories out but at a rate I can't sustain. I will endeavor to finish up these stories but it will take some more time. Some folks have brought up some older stories and they have rejoined the workload. Please have patience...right now The Witches of Ravenrook are on top but I'm making good progress on a few others.

And, of course, some new stories are crying to be put out as well. I'm not kidding when I tell people I'm crazy...I really am.

This is by far the best story I have ever read on lit erotica. The feelings you create are amazing and The way the story is unfolding leaves your readers craving continuation. Please continue and keep up the great work.

However your story is fantastic and needs to be finished. Please do not leave us waiting to long.

I like this story its shaping up to be great series I know how it goes when writing I myself actually get stuck at my laptop unmoving until I finish I once spent almost 24 hours at the keys writing and thinking about what I am writing and worse yet my computer crashed on me so my unsaved story needed rewritten anyways I enjoyed this and am looking forward to reading the next chapters it feels as though it can go anywhere hell for all we know the grandfather could have forced himself on the sister and put her under his control and that is why she has such issues with her mom because she was left in the care of such a person but that is only my prediction for how the story unfolds its so engaging this one

Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing.

i wish one day u will finish this lovely sick perverted story.. cause it is just fucking amazing

...but for the love of all that is holy get a proof reader.

Very yummy! And very good. Thank you!

You could use an editor, lots of typos, but your idea and story is over five stars so that's what you get

WOW!!! This story (so far) is well written, interesting, and worthy of a read through!! I am a damnable critique and I pay close attention to the little details that most readers overlook. When a story bases a character (especially a Main Character) on a Marine and then an 0311, 0331, 0341, the basic Marine Corps Infantry or those Pipe Hitters, those Killers we and the rest of the Military lovingly knows us as Grunts, after becoming a US Marine and an 03xx mos my last 4 years, I hold EVERY AUTHOR I READ that puts Marines and Warriors into the story, I HOLD THE AUTHOR & WORK & CHARACTERS & ACTIONS TO THE HIGHEST OF STANDARDS. If the Marines in the story do not portray the reality of how we handle and control our discipline in the real world, I lose respect for authors that fail to obtain the basic knowledge of how Marines operate in the real world and how we conduct our actions while in contact with our enemies. That info easily obtainable. It is willful ignorance on the shoulders of the writer when their own laziness or complacency is used in making characters that do not hold up our standards and the REPUTATION BUILT UPON ACTIONS OF PREVIOUS MARINES, and the writer fails this, I no longer read that authors work!

If this Writer keeps on with the Keeping On this will continue to be a damn good read!