All Comments on 'The Mountain Ch. 01'

too short!. Well written, engaging, shows great promise!

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great start. the only problem was it was to short.. udate soon please.

Too short! But only because the beginning is so well done that it Sucks you in ... and you want the story to continue. Great beginning for a good read - but - then again it will be a booger to have to Wait for another tasty morsal. Although I hate " cliff hangers," I will be checking out for more every day.

It all managed to sound very intriguing. Can't wait for the next installment!

Please write some mlre? This is interesting.

I appreciate the feedback. The next chapter will be longer. I wanted to see if people were interested in the world. I am hoping to improve the story as I go, so all comments are much, much appreciated.

Good start and it seems like an interesting plot.

Good you left it hanging on a "what's next" moment.

Bad: Length sucks. If you post a story it should be at least two pages preferably three. A short beginning like this doesn't go over well with the readers. Nor does it draw them back.

Too little to rate, I'll wait for more.

moreeee pleaaaaaase

Please don't leave us hanging. Keep going, this story could go in any direction. I am in for the long haul. Some good potential here!

I look forward to reading more. Five Stars!

Don't worry about length. Readers will always demand more and tell you that YOU SHOULD make it 2 or 3 pages.

Fortunately each author is unique and has their own style. Do not let anyone tell you what you HAVE to do with your story.

It is your imagination that you are sharing with us.

We are VERY grateful!

I think you have a way with words. You Can really paint a story with them. I love a long story with long chapters... Bring it on!

When it's a story I really like, as this one is, I definitely yearn for more chapters, but still, it's always best to end it where you, the author, feels is its best natural conclusion. Looking forward to it.

In a short chapter a fantasy universe, some characters and a potential long term conflict are briefly introduced. Not too many details but enough of a storyline - and written well enough - to make me looking forward to sequels ...

Hopefully, I will not be disappointed by another story that is left orphaned after a promising start.

All the best,

Simon

Read this today. Don't know why I didn't see it before!

Very enjoyable. Seems like you've read Addison Cain?

Very nice beginning. Five stars from me. It captures my interest. Now I'll read Chapter 2!