All Comments on 'The Music of the Mind Ch. 16'

Nice job ST and LC. I would suggest a closer examination of the words used in the telling of this serial et al: "thought" is being typed as "though" in some instances. I was so excited to see a further chapter on this storyline that I did not make a comprehensive list of the other oversights. Please continue, this story is as engrossing as few other stories, on literotica, can be.

Swedeq

enough with the wait get to the good stuff the preceding was good but i want the really great stuff

Even though this segment was just a formation of the bond these characters will share, it was a great step in the development of the characters. I was pleased to see how well they progressed in their "talent", but come on, lets get to the good stuff. I want to see how the battle with commence, and the ideas you have for what Dolkoff is capable of. I know this story will probably end when Dolkoff is defeated and Mike professes his love for Jill, but I would love to see another villain take his place after Dolkoff is gone. He can't be the only other being with these powers. ANyways thats my two cents, keep up the good work.

Great story man! To hell with the sex, I just wanna read the rest of it!! :)

2 mths hav gone by....still no new chaper?! dont do this to us....

brilliant work, as always!

Reminiscent of Robert Heinlein's "Stranger in a strange land", or perhaps the Dali Lama is writing under a pseudonym.

The story is great and very well crafted, but the thing that really does it for me is the all pervasive currents of 'Loving Kindness'.

I can't wait until the next chapter.

This story is mind blowing in it's originality! It is a stand alone story even without the detailed sex scenes.

Hate it when authors think it's fun to turn their protagonists into bumbling idiots.

hiya

nice plot i loved it.

1. then=in time it happened then and it was then etc

2. Than= comparative like better than me etc

3. shuttered= closed

4. shuddered= body quivering or uncontrollably shaking i small tremors

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You got a good imagination but get yourself a good editor or prep up on grammar.

keep up the good work and dont mind old perfectionists and grouches like me

regards

zorb