by lovecraft68
I love the nastiness between an older couple wanting young flesh to share and the young girl appearing so innocent but in reality being a slut who craves orgasm with her neighbors.
Well written to develop the story from a simple pick up of a young girl to almost being forced to take the strait laced neighbors daughter
Incredibly well written. Too many stories have a weak build up, if any at all. This author takes the time to set the table, teases us every step of the way, then builds and builds to a scalding finish!
You've been added to this author's list of favorites. :)
Hot, Hot, HOT!!!
This story is excellent. I wish I could give more than 5 stars. I loved the way you had the couple find the red head, only to lose out with her and be shocked themselves. Thank you for sharing your talent with us, the Lit readers.
But...but...the redhead. Maybe Jenna could go rope her in...? Great story.
You make the young one the aggressor. I enjoyed this one a lot.
Every possible act and position. What can cum next? I loved it even though there were a few of the impossible body contortions necessary.
Jenna went to the club with a friend... just as Becca had... Were these two friends, and does that mean Becca may still be part of the scene in up-coming vacations? Really well written, thought out and enticing story. Excellent except for the first paragraph. Must not be that bad; I can't remember what my comment was to be. Thank you.
You had my old cock up and dripping! Would love to have a neighbor like that. Thanks. Definitely 5 stars. I'm going to continue teasing my male nipples and masturbating until my cum spurts out.
Great story, very well written. You have a fantastic way of writing the sex so it's hot and still real.
I usually lose interest on stories over 1 or 2 pages, but this one kept me going all the way to the end. Very well written, like I was their. whoami....
This was just too hot for any kind of proper description. OMG! You teased with Becca, and then when that fell through, you teased with Jenna as though they weren't fonna go through with it. Made for a great build up. Then when they got to the bedroom...! One of the best I've read on here. I hope there's a sequel, and I have to agree: I too would like to see Becca figure back into things again, like maybe she had second thoughts and got curious or something. Great job!
It took me three times to get through it all, I came hard every time...
This is one of the best, if not the best, I have ever read on literotica. I think there should be followup stories of the next vacation by her parents
I've never commented on a story in all the years I've been reading Literotica,but this one deserves the highest praise! Usually 2 or more pages get woefully dull and wordy, but not this one. Hooked on every word I actually read it again. Absolutely the best piece of work I've read here. The tease, the lead-in, the actual sex, wow! Keep going, please!
Great story and so well written. The build up was terrific and the story sailed along from there. Your characters weren't sleazy at all and yes, some young people do like to get it on with people older than themselves. Experience and expertise are a big turn on. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
Since Jenna definitely had girl on girl experience maybe in a part two when her parents take their next vacation they invite over her girlfriend for a foursome. Not sure I'd like to read about any young dudes joining the fun.
This has to be one of my favorite reads on this site. I don't usually comment on stories, but this one is worth commenting on! I and everyone else would love it if you continued this story!
I heard the story winners are fixed and you proved it. Your writing is juvenile. Fucking the shit out of her is such a great expression. You use it alot. I guess that's why your stories are so full of shit. You can't write worth shit either.
There were a few spelling and grammar issues. But, it had a nice build up and the sex was hot!
Well written with a teasing build up to the sex. A few errors but who cares except the anonymous assholes. I find the comments about the "older couple" to hysterical, at my age forty year olds are kids. Thanks for writing.
I thought it was really well thought out, especially with the build up, and the ending. I feel like the middle could have been a tad bit longer, maybe a scene leading up to the bedroom scene. Having said that it was a really great story and I definitely see how it got in the winners. Bravo :)
that was such a hot story. I hope that you make this into a series and right more naughty sexy adventures with this couple and their neighbor's extremely naughty daughter ;)
Loved this story; as a matter of fact this is my first comment ever (on Literotica 5+ years).
I'd like to see Jenna seduce Becca (the redhead) and get her back to her house; which would provide the opportunity to catch the neighbors in a little backyard play and of course lead into a threesome with Kim, then later possibly a 4-some, yummy!!
What a story, just loved it. Thanks for sharing it (A personal fantasy of mine also).
Loved this story...kind of partial to younger women myself! Just wish I had a neighbor like Jenna...! What a sweet ride... Looking for a follow-up story... You might like some of my older stories...!
This is something my wife and I want but don't have the courage. Would love to read about Becca, Jenna and Kim with Doug only being allowed to watch!
love the entire story line. would be great if they would get into role playing. perhaps have her parents get involved too. that would be so naughty!
I dream about being a participant in a scenario like this. It is at the top of my bucket list. Well written and erotic story. Please keep writing more stories like this - KEEP "EM CUMMING!!!. You have a definite talent.
Don't let criticism and comments from anonymous losers get you down.
Hi absolutely enjoy reading your stories ,so believable and very erotic. Dont stop writing ,loved it .
Very erotic, from the dancing at the bar all the way through. I would love to see a sequel, where Jenna tells Becca about everything she missed out on in the future maybe? Keep up the great work
I have read this story three times now, gives me the best hard on to jerk...keep it up...aah I just came all over my hands
I realise you like to build up towards the sexual encounters, and I enjoy reading about that just as much as the frantic, lust-driven action in the bedroom. My only observation - and it's a personal preference, not a criticism - is that the writing might be tightened a bit, especially in those early scenes. I have the same feeling about the structure of some of your other stories, all of which I've enjoyed.
You should follow up the next story where the young girl brings in Becca too to bed room and a wild erotic dance first at the floor and then a orgy at the home
wooooow hot yarrrrrrrrrrr
This is a huge fantasy of mine. Please add to it! I like that the young girl is so confident and sure. Super hot!
I have cum so many times while reading this-amazing fantasy of mine too! Good work!
Wow. Brings vivid images in my minds eye.
Just so fun to read and imagine.
My compliments to the author. Wow.
So hot! I came so much during this! This is a major fantasy of mine and I wish my bf would let us do this! It's gonna take a lot of begging probably! Haha
This is such a great read an something I want to do so badly. To experience all kinds of threesomes an it would be even better if I knew them. I think it makes it kinkier.
Excellent story and very well written. I will add you to my favorite authors list and continue to read. THANK YOU for sharing your creativity!! Barry.
Your stories are so well written with well defined characters. I love the way you take the time to tell a complete story and build up to the action rather than just jumping straight to the main event.
Adds a whole new dimension to "the girl next door".
Although, the forty-something couple were indeed "creepy" for trawling at an under-21 club. Most under-21 clubs, that I know of, wouldn't allow older people in.
Loved this story, can't understand why the anon comments that are just abusive and out of order are left on here. If this is considered not a hot story, then the hater must not have a pulse.
Keep up this theme, you have delightful ideas, and I'd like to read more of this sort of experience or fantasy.
This was written a while ago, and I would like to see if you have an update to the story!
All of
F your stories are very, very hot, I hope you keep writing!
I WAS TO SORE TO FINISH THE STORY. BY THE END OF THE THIRD PAGE I CAME TOO MANY TIMES. REALLY WISH TO MEET YOU, MY WIFE AND I ARE ON THE SAME PAGE. GREAT STORY
I really enjoyed reading it. I think that it might have been 1 page to long. but other than that thumbs up!!! when I read this it made me think of my own fantasy would you please write another one for me?
Read like a true experience. Had a similar experience many years ago with 2 women friends and I was in my early twenties and we came many times in a 12 hour session. Best experience ever. I was scared until we started to play. I thought it was a potential to get hurt or robbed. Fortunately my cock has always been in charge of my emotional responses.
We found it absolutely awesome!, my wife and I haven't come so hard in a while after reading this together!.
Omg,would love to be part of this romance ,,licks to all three ,,yummy
well done lc68, but still grammar glitches.....must be the automated editors they use at this site
'Automated editors used on this site'
Wha? When did Lit start using an automated editor? Seems to me, IF they used an editor on the stories, some of them wouldn't be complete abominations... grammatically, that is.
There would also be consistency. If there is ONE truism at Lit, the stories on not consistent, on any level. LOL
GeoD
Sexy and hot...
What a fantasy to have if it could be 'lived out'... smiles
Thanks for the passionate, hot story.
lived it in my mind thinking of my former young neighbor used to tease me!
What a great story. Love the fact your other half is on the same wave length as you. It is all so effing hot and realistic. I hope there is more to cum. Thanks for the great story.
to do ANY Proof Reading???
Example of a rubbish sentence - "Even better, the first heat wave of the season had caused inspired the club had to open up its beachfront a week early."
Gobble-de-gook! Rubbish!!
Before you complain about the proofreading, editing, or other faucets of a authors story. Consider that we as the readers are very fortunate to have the opportunity to read these stories that each author spends their time and energy to write and share with us! Don't forget the fact that these are free stories! These authors don't have a staff of proofreaders, editors, etc. If you think you can do better, then post your story!!
When an author solicits feedback, "both good and bad," he or she is asking for help to improve the product. This is good for everyone, providers and consumers alike.
I enjoy the erotica on this site and can hardly imagine the amount of work that goes into a ten thousand word story. But I can help proofread a story to make it better when asked.
Fucking hot and well described. It's not easy to lead the reader from one position to another without losing where you are. This is a story to keep in favorites.
follow small breasts with BUT???
Example: "Her perky tits were small, but well shaped, it should be: Her perky tits were small, AND well shaped.
I LOVE small tits. B cups are great, as are A cups and C cups. The smaller ones are MUCH MORE sensitive. I dated a beautiful Eurasian woman for about four years {until her husband was transferred out of state}. She was the most fantastic woman I ever knew. She would have multiple orgasms just from my attention to her small A size chest- which her husband never did. At 44, she had the finest ass in captivity, AND she had never done oral sex- neither giving nor receiving. The first time I went down on her, I didn't think she would ever quit cumming. As she pushed my face away from her crotch, she passed out for a few minutes. After that, the first thing she did, when we got together, was sit on my face, or she would suck me to climax before climbing on my face- I think she orgasmed herself when I filled her mouth with cum.
Beautiful story
. I wish Becca was also in the action. Please do a follow up
Loved the story especially the tension and interplay of the bar pickup scenes. Characters had some depth which is hard in short story format.
For those who chose not to do what Southern children are taught and keep their mouth shut unless something good comes out, if you don’t like the proofing done on on this site VOLUNTEER to proofread!!! Send a PM offering your services. All my career I was required to prepare written documents for a variety of purposes. The hardest thing for the author is to read the actual words on the paper and not the ones as they were developed and thought to be transcribed. I did it frequently. Someone without knowledge of the narrative can see the glitches easier. So offer to help.
Irks me to see those comments in public when there are better mechanisms available to offer constructive criticism to the story author. All those abusive words to say you have trouble reading. Maybe you should look elsewhere for reading material.
this was a great story you should do a follow up, you missing an opportunity to a follow up great story if you don't
Great story, even though I knew that they would meet their sweet neighbor girl at the club. Very hot!
Thanks for sharing.
Being a female who enjoyed growing up in the under 21 clubs, a group of us liked to be hit on y older women who were searching for sex objects. It went both ways!
OMG bloody awesome, so well written and what a delightful story. Soooooooo damm hot.
Thank you for writing this.
Jennifer
I'm very satisfied at the moment, even if she was the redhead I would still be very satisfied.
Thanks
Great story, well written as well…
Took me back to a very similar episode that my wife and I enjoyed once on a cruise….