All Comments on 'The Night of the Party Ch. 01'

always use a good editor before posting even the best writers here use them. show the readers you care about the story and them by making sure you use editors and finish what you start. keep the garbage out of the story no bdsm, group, nonconsent and keep the parents out of the sex, they can find out but not join in.

you need to write another chapter of this

Don't let the anonymous reader tell you what to write. He isn't the writer. You throw in the parents having bsdm sex with those kids if you want to. In fact throw in gay sex too just to prove you don't take sh*t from these swine. Good day.

Proof read, proof read. Spelled her name different times throughout. Also don't end like that. I was wanting more.

You're in high school. I get that. The story starts on a saturday night. Ok, got it. The next morning you're heading to school? Never heard of a high school having classes on a sunday. Little details like that can throw off an otherwise good story.

story is very good for first time ,keep writing and you will get better get someone to prof read it will help . good luck dutch513

You had to get her drunk to fuck her? Maybe she didn't really want it that way! Maybe all you had to do was be honest and tell how you felt, then she wouldn't be mad at you.

Now you must write more chapters,explaining how you calmed her down, then convinced her to feel the same towards you as you feel about her. And please make it good!

Good story. Please continue and fuck the haters.

Did you really have to tell us the twins aren't identical? What do you think "identical" means? Think: If they were identical, they'd be two girls or two boys. (And two girls or two boys _can_ still be fraternal instead of identical.).

Please do not stop now...............

you have the makings of a great story please continue

I hope that he can convince Nancy that being with him is the best thing that could ever happen to her.

Thanks for the read

I loved this chapter and now I'm going to go read chapter 2. The author paid extra attention to the details which are important. I’m looking forward to the next chapter.

To set the record straight the anonymous poster below is wrong. Nightlight00 was correct to point out that Robbie and Nancy were not identical twins.

Identical, or monozygotic, twins develop from a single egg/sperm combination that splits a few days after conception. Their DNA originates from a single source, thus their genetic makeup is the same and the characteristics that are determined by genetics will be similar. Identical twins are always of the same gender, except in extremely rare cases of chromosomal defect.

Fraternal, or dizygotic, multiples form when two separate eggs are fertilized by separate sperm in a single ovulation cycle. They are no more alike than any sibling set, sharing about 50% of their genetic markers in a unique combination of genes from both parents.

Just want to set the record straight. Good job Nightlight00

RecHiker

for the make her drunk plan ,

What did he expect? He took advantage of her on purpose. He's a whore and scum of the earth...