All Comments on 'The Novice Ch. 02'

It is sooooo good. You are a brillant writer. I really want to know which brother Audrey will be with in the end. They both are very appealing. The priest is bad but so sexy. His brother is a mystery. If you want her with Lukas, I hope you develop his character a little more. I must say I was a little surprised with what happened with Audrey. She now has to deal with her sexuality even more because she has experienced intimacy with a man. I predict she will feel more confusion. I can't wait to see how you write on Audrey's continued stay at the convent after what happened. She is confused right now on whether she will be a nun or will her awakening desires overcome her.

Love this story as much as all the others you’re working on. Keep ‘em coming!

ahhh i LOVE your writing. i like how it's louis who takes her virginity, and not lukas, who everyone suspected it would be. it was a good, sexy turn of events.

Dark, sensual and romantic all at the same time.

Loved it! I hope she doesn't end up falling for the priest, he's creepy

Very sexy...can't wait for the next chapter! Wow you're an amazing writer. <3 xoxo <3

Wow! Your stories really are amazing! I can't wait to read the next chapter, I hope it won't take too long! I also hope that Audry ends up with Lucas even thogh both brothers are really sexy :-)

Great chapter. Suprising turn of events. Can't wait to hear what happens next!

Noooooooooooooooooooooooooo... I wanted Lukas to do her! Damn. The story's hot though... great stuff. Keep it up.

Your writing is top-notch. I left you a private comment earlier, but you inspired me to actually submit some of my own works. I'll be doing it gradually, but thank you for writing such wonderful stuff that it made me want to try my hand at it. Keep writing! :)

I had wanted Lukas to be her first, it's a shame you went with Louis. Still you write very well, I'm looking forward to more.

I like lukas..but I looooove Father Mathews! I don't know why i'm drawn to the "dark ones" but i hope the victor turns out to be Mathews. You are a great writer too - scenery description and dialogue between characters are done realistically and very very Sensual *blush* great job!

Please keep going!Love it don't take too long!*Waiting in suspense here*

Part of me wishes it had been Lukas, but the rest of me appreciates your not taking the easy way out.

Wonderfully enjoyable writing. :)

It wouldn't be truthful if I said I wasn't disappointed that Father Matthews was the one to take Audrey's virginity, but I can say that it is a very interesting path to take. I'n always a hopefull romantic so I wished it had been Lukas, but I am grateful that you took a more... Complicated path that would further enhance the story plot.

I'm anxiously waiting for the next chapter.

Hope to read more very soon.

~Gin

Like the others, I thought some how Lukas would prevail but oh well, otherwise it would not be in this topic category. Can't wait for installment 3!

I'm totally digging this story. It seems so hard to find one out of the thousands on Literotica that are up to par with your writings. Keep it up!

Please continue to write this story. Audrey's innocence is very becoming, and her first time, while not my favorite choice, was powerful.

I am so in love with this story. You are perhaps the only author on literotica that I have found so far that weaves a enjoyable story into the "porn".

Please give us another installment of this fantastic story soon.

Please, Please write more of this story. I adore it - it's hot and interesting... it makes me wet and at the same time, the story line is so fantastic that i can't focus to get off. Please finish it, oh please!

I always enjoy your stories, but this time I think you deserve a special hug for tricking your audience by letting the priest have the first time. LOL

Nice going!

I'm amazed. Your story held me so enthralled I had to continue reading it despite not being alone in the room anymore after a while. ;-) It's very enticing, arousing, moving even. I admire your rich vocabulary and fitting choice of words (something very rarely found in other erotic writings around here and elsewhere on the internet). Keep going please? Oh, and I really enjoyed the emotional intensity of her first time with the priest. I don't think it would have been such a strong and breathtaking scene if you had Lukas have her first.

I loved this story

the character seem real and it is so discriptive

please please please write more

oh man i'm so sorry it wasn't Lukas to save the day but you have to continue the story!

oh god !!!!1 this has go to be THE best story ever !!!!!! me and my bf read it and have never had such amazing sex !!!!!!

please write more i really have to know what happens !!!!

I LOVE THE STORY.... You are doing a wonderful job, keep up the good work... i cant wait to see what happens next

AWSOME STORY. I love all your stories!

Unbelievable...love it. Keep on writing!

My gawd, what a story!!

It felt like I was in the room with them!

Great writing!

Next installment please!! lol

Love the series and all your other stories-- please keep writing!

please don't stop!

Please write more. I love this story line and want to see Lukas rescue Audrey before Louis gets his hands on her again. Please save her!!

Please don't stop!!! It's such a yummy story!! Really rooting for Lucas now!!

submissions. I miss your writing. I hope you post soon. Until you do, I shall be waiting and anticipating.

I'm sop excited by this story that I can't wait until there is more to read. Please post again soon.

Please continue with this story....I have come back to your submissions hoping to find the next installment...

please continue this story i'm hooked i can't wait to read more

Can't wait for more....

Please, please add in a follow-up for this story. I notice you've gone on to other things but i would love to find out what happens next in this series.. -thanks

amazingly haunting..even as i closed my eyes i could see and "feel" the passion and conflict among this young maiden nun. Please continue on with this story as well as your others...i know real life is demanding but you lite a flame in someone that doesn't normally read this kind of stuff...it has enough kink in it to excite the darker side of ones personality...but still appeal to the romance and the feelings within one's self. What a gift you have to bring the words off the page...into the mind..searing...and so very hot. again...a fan in Texas and waiting

...this is so hot! This is one of the best on this site, just delicious. You're a great writer, I also love the charecter development, it makes it so much more exciting, but it's not too boring or forced, the whole thing flows perfectly.

Please, please finish this story, I'm dying to know how it ends!

More, please!!!!

I wanted more. I can`t wait to read more to find out what happened next. please write more . please.

I'm so excited with this story, How can you leave such a talented work of art unfinished? please!!!

Love the story! And I would love to read more.

I really liked this story. Please keep writing. Especially finish this story. I really want to know how it ends.

Please continue! I think you could get a lot more out of this story. (And so could I? ha)

This is the best story I've ever read! PLEASE finish it!

I can't wait to read more of this!!

Holy CRAP you need top finish this story, RIGHT NOW!! AMAZING!!!

PLEASE PLEASE don't keep me in suspense.

I'm thoroughly enjoying this story, but aside from that, I think you should know that this is professional quality, publishable work.

I'm a longtime reader/writer of historical romance novels, and I strongly urge you to submit this to Avon. They publish Elizabeth Lowell and Judith McNaught, and your writing is on a par with those authors' work.

Really, you're very good, and I'd love for you to be making a living with your talent. :)

I'm also looking forward to Chapter Three with much anticipation.

This is great work, please finish this and oh please let it be Lucas who wins out in the end.

OMG! you cant leave it at that, please dont!!! there must be more. Its so good, had me hanging on every word. Your talented, dont stop!!!

Wow, I don't comment on stories, but this one was awesome. I want to read the rest! Where is it hidden? I wouldn't dare to write it myself because there is no way I could match the writing of yours!

I'm begging you! Please finish this story. You had me hanging on every word, and I'm dying to know more. You are so talented! Please, please, please write more!

Please continue with the chapters! Character development is great and the plot is consuming.

What a wonderful story - best I've read so far. Please keep going, I'd love to read more.

please finish. it is a fantastic story

One of the best I've read! Very hot, and yet there's a story too! Bravo!

more,more,more.what a ride.

Wasn't expecting this, I was so hoping it would be Lukas, but he doesn't seem to have good intentions either. I'm glad she gave him a good walloping though!

what an unexpected turn! It was amazing! I was hoping for Lucas too. :( LOVE this story. please continue!!!

It gets better and got me very aroused, wonderfully sexual. You are making my wishful thoughts arise in my groin.

Um, the whole "maidenhead" thing isn't real, you know. It's a bit of extra tissue around the entrance that stretches when you first have sex or masturbate, not some magical barrier inside a woman. Some women don't even have one at all. A simple Google search could have told you that if that's really something you don't already know.

I wish there were minitaurs in this story. So far this is one of the best on here.

Part two brings just as much pleasure as part one dare I say more! Finding out more about the characters in this chapter was very interesting and I am so glad my feelings for Lucas weren't as shameful as I thought after reading chapter one lol! At first I thought him the devil :D and finding myself drawn to him was a little scary :D . Chapter two has settled my mind in my choice of who to fantasize about (although lets face it... I fantasized about both lol)

Good.

who wrote this evil story ? jews? hindus, muslims?? !

they have their own institutions like convents .

how the hell would they like Christians to write a sordid mess of a story about them ? m

yeah : I thought so !