All Comments on 'The Other Child Ch. 01'

Very few stories under this heading go beyond a few trite cliches. One exception was "Cockball," which I assume the author removed, become he no longer is listed and all of his storis are sadly gone. This story, like "Cockball," tells a story and develops believable characters whose interactions create tension and maybe even misunderstandings that lead to what we know is going to happen. I only wish other authors would respect the readers and the craft enough to develop well-told tales verses the vapid stroke stories that clutter this section. Five stars, and I'm looking forward to part two.

well written.

It in some way was understated, which added a sense of realism, but also maintaining it's fiction status.

I really hope we have more to look forward to.

Classic!

Great story and building so very nicely.

Keep it going. Many thanks.

just because you used shit-tastic

I am confused about everything, because I couldn't get past he first page. Needs a less complicated introduction so the reader can "get into it."

Loved the basic thread of the story - frustrated bored wife, over indulged horny teen, but why does the guy have to have a monster cock? Couldn't a thickish 8 incher be just as interesting, considering the husband has one the size of a "termite". Surely the guy had more to offer (and this could have been explored further in the story) than a huge dick.

things are coalescing quick. In a way, I hope the author really takes his time with the characters and doesn't take shortcut to inevitable depravity. So far, so goo-fy as per the author's standard introductory speed. Ratchet up tension as long as possible pretty please.

Nice waiting for the next installments

Maria she keeps the Humor coming. and Cybil brings her GF for Duke to get affectionate with. Great StepSister.

Hey final stand,

This is a great, fun start to what I'm sure will be a great series. Tell anonymous to check out Christian college comedy for a more modest appendage on the hero.

I thought the whole rant on Huge Penises would expose the joke. Duke says that whipping out a big TEN INCH penis is detrimental to sex, not a bonus. I figured that would be enough, but - oh well. To me, foreplay is the key part of sex, not the super-sized sausage I can unleash ;)

I always snicker when I read such blatant nonsense about men who supposedly have donkey sized cocks. My experience with a modest seven inches is that women generally need a lot of foreplay to be comfortable enough to enjoy me hammering away. And I have to be careful to give them their orgasms first because once I start to orgasm and ejaculate my penis swells up large enough to block vaginal contractions and keep women from additional orgasms.

I have to agree with the comments complementing FS for the quality of his writing style. As for the stroke stories, I excerpted several out of novella sized writings I am still working on. Just to provide more succinct and explicit masturbatory aides for those critics whining about how difficult it was for their limited intellects to plod through my other submissions. But the site statistics show me that they are no where near as popular you might have expected considering the trolls who infest Literotica.

The line between hate and lust, can become blurred. Good humor. Nice story 5*

This story is really funny

I like this kid and the story funny

I love reading the comments all the ‘experts’ write on someone’s story. I think it’s a well written, humorous story. The characters are well developed and it’s a compelling read. Thank you for sharing it.