by manyeyedhydra
I found 'Pearls...' to be a very enjoyable read. Well conceived story, good characterizations, even a rather comely monster to fall victim to. Five Cheers!
Our old buddy Phil had much nicer adventure. BRING HIM BACK.
PLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASEPLEASE
Not bad.
Your Succubus Stories are much more enticing read for the vast majority I'm sure. Although I disagree with the BLOCK CAPS 'please bring back Phil' comment, I'd suggest letting that storey arc die and start some fresh Succubus material.
It was OK.
No where near as hot as Succubus Keep. Please make that a series like Phil! The struggle between the knight, plotting demon, and seductive succubus with all her magics are perfect,
The setup for this story was tremendous. I don't think you get as much credit as you should for the humour you incorporate into your stories.<BR><BR>
I know from experience how challenging it is to make a story erotic when the 'monster girl', if you will, is rather more monster than girl. I think you've done a really good job here.<BR><BR>
I'd also add it's perhaps the first story I've read when I haven't rolled my eyes at the infamous sun cream scene and skimmed the rest with low expectations. As always, excellent to read a new story from you. Hope there's lots more on the way.<BR><BR>
Best of luck with the contest
If you recall any of my other reviews then you know how I feel about the fates of the majority of your male characters. But I guess it is needed to qualify as erotic horror. I just prefer more happy monster girl tales and given so few write them its hard not to feel disappointed when one of the best of those few authors devotes himself mostly to death by sex tales.
In particular this story's justification seemed a bit weak if you don't mind me saying. Human men produce millions upon millions of sperm and make more all the time to replace the short lived ones that already exist. It'd seem simply more reasonable for these creatures, intelligent as they seem to be, to simply take a man for a while and provide for him enough to keep him alive (they'd get the billions they need before too long), then release him. I can see them entering a partnership with the natives, protecting them, helping them fish and such and in return getting volunteers each year to help them spawn. But then I guess it really wouldn't be erotic horror anymore.
But, it was still odly a very interesting story!
Whets the appetite, but it's no Succubus Summoning 201. Keep the stream of goods coming, and your loyal fans will wait in anticipation forever for more Phil. Also, the red-skinned one in Knight vs. Succubus? Couldn't you have just SAID her name was Rosa?
You got some imagination! A weird creature that can impersonate multiple women. Wow.
Sigh, and again the blokes are killed off for no real reason apart from to fit in with the 'horror' category.
I was just reading the comments on the article and saw that you felt the men were eaten for no reason, perhaps the author feels, like me, many reasons that men should get their just deserts so to speak.