All Comments on 'The Perfect Partnership Ch. 01'

It is a nice story, and a good beginning. I like the setting of it. So far a good start for a first story.

But you have to work on your punctuation when writing a dialog scene.

Double quotes at the beginning and end of a sentence spoken by one of the persons in your text would help.

That's because it used up all the commas for the run-on sentences, using the commas instead of periods.

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I don't expect professional level writing, but I do expect some evidence that the writer passed Third Grade English with a passing grade.

You left me wanting proper English, punctuation, grammar, etc.

Did you forget this is about incest and sex? Do you only get turned on by spelling and grammar? So much for comments about your critics.

Nice story otherwise.

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Any man, myself included, could have this dream to dream of with his own daughter. Sweet, sweet dream!