All Comments on 'The Perfect Pieces Ch. 08'

And you almost deleted it? Perhaps the rest of us who write ought to be trolling through your trash for ideas, concepts, new ways to describe actions and emotions. You are doing such a good job showing why all the conventional ways this story could turn out are unsatisfactory.

At one point your protagonist/narrator says that he smells "ode de Amber".

I believe that what he meant was "Eau de Amber".

"Eau de" is French for "Water of", and some perfumes are named "Eau de [whatever]" to imply that the perfume is the very essence of [whatever]. Stereotypically, the [whatever] is the first name of an iconic celebrity, implying that the perfume will make the wearer smell like that celebrity.

Here is an animated Disney short titled "Eau de Minnie", in which Minnie Mouse has created a perfume: http://disney.wikia.com/wiki/Eau_de_Minnie

Here is an actual perfume named "Eau de Chloe": https://www.google.com/search?as_q=&as_epq=eau+de&as_oq=&as_eq=&as_nlo=&as_nhi=&lr=&cr=&as_qdr=all&as_sitesearch=&as_occt=any&safe=images&as_filetype=&as_rights=&gws_rd=ssl#as_qdr=all&q=eau+de+chloe

I am enjoying the story immensely, and am looking forward to reading the rest of its chapters.

-Rei

I have a tendency to write with abandon. You are correct ReiDeBastos, it should have been Eau de. Though I could stretch the meaning of 'ode' to wrap the poetic scent of Amber (a weak argument at best). My errors, though lessening, are prevalent. Tim and I are learning as we hack our way through stories. The English language is a beast I have yet to tame - what made me think I should dabble in French?

I look forward to each new episode.

Well written and good grammatically. (Unlike the output of so many writers on this site).

I was hesitant to start this story because I thought it was going to be about some guy hooking up with a girl from a glass store. Boy was I ever wrong. I love it so far.

Hi great story as ever,

I assume you are trialling a different style with the chapters (moved from Very long to almost too short) and maybe they'll work when its not being read as you post, but for non literary purposes I'd prefer two chapters semi linked together / or just posted together. Every time we get going with the story, we have to break and wait for the next instalment... just a thought

DC--Your story continues to be enticing and fascinating. The love between Mark and Amber is palpable, and so is the tension (and Amber's fear!) as the confrontation with Pablo approaches. Thank you for another great segment; I will be looking eagerly for ch. 9 tomorrow!

It is not a strait forward romance, it is more of a novella with mystery. I really broke up when the extra key stroke turned "heroin" into "heroine"! Continue amusing yourself please!

Love the story, but found a small nitpick. His ear could be "lost in ode de Amber", but his nose would be lost in eau de Amber.

I can barely write in English and here I attempted to dabble in French.

I blame the American school system for every error I make. Specifically, Ms. Crumbacher, my eighth grade English teacher. How is someone going through puberty supposed to pay attention with a teacher who looked like a goddess?

died her roots - dyed her roots

A bit of a difference :-)

and I'm trying to decide if this will be another all-nighter.

I agree

..... this story as the it unfolds -- as all the other D.C. works I have read. Hoping that this author continues to give us such gems.

again! I just need to read one more chapter!

Cant wait, this should be good!

Hopefully right about now Pablo should put his head as far between his knees as he can get them and kiss his butt adios. LP

The parallel between the edited down chapters comprising a complete story and the central theme of pieces of glass being cut, ground and soldered to shape is one that springs immediately to mind. Can’t believe nobody else seems to have spotted that?

Thanks DreamCloud for leaving your works on here despite the plagiarism you’ve suffered. Cheers Ppfzz.

The suspense builds on...thanks.