All Comments on 'The Perfect Pieces Ch. 09'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Wow!

There's a wobbler I didn't see coming!

cliqueggecliqueggeover 8 years ago
I saw a twist ...

But not that one.

I have to say I thought she was going to "sacrifice" herself and go back to Pablo in an attempt to save him... good writing - thank you

rightbankrightbankover 8 years ago
perceptions change

but, where is Lizzie?

Esq2kEsq2kover 8 years ago
Great Twist

Didn't see that coming! Great twist -- and opened up a box full of questions about Amber and Mark that I hope get answered.

DanceswithWargsDanceswithWargsover 8 years ago

Rough chapter. Betrayal is one of the worst horrors people visit on each other.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
I join the crowd.

There had to be a complication, but this? Can't wait to see how it all turns out.

ResidentWeavilResidentWeavilover 8 years ago
Knew something was up.

I knew she was not what she seemed. Just too perfect and adaptable. My thoughts were running more to her being a lure set to snare him specifically. Or the surviving daughter of a previous victim out to get revenge.

Not sure where it goes from here. Hard to imagine a happy ending but I would welcome a surprise.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Have to admit

I did not see that coming. Was waiting for something, but not that. I can't wait to find out where it goes from here.

hpldwghpldwgover 8 years ago
What a twist"

DC--Well, You had me set up perfectly--sort of how Amber had Mark set up! I certainly did not see this plot twist coming. More proof that you are a very talented writer! I still enjoy happy endings, so I am still hoping for a "And they lived happily ever after", but I'm not nearly as convinced it will occur as I was before this chapter. Well done--bring on ch. 10!

RPGerRPGerover 8 years ago
A very well executed plot twist

There is nothing in previous chapters to contradict this twist. It still doesn't mean she hasn't fallen for him but is too afraid of his reaction to tell the truth. What I am having trouble with is where Lucy will fit into all of this. Maybe she grabbed Lucy during the negotiations?

Mostly I really trust DC not to give us an unhappy ending.

RedPillRedPillover 8 years ago

I thought the same thing as cliquegge, based on Amber's "no matter what... know that I love you". The actual twist caught me by surprise. I still suspect that, based on that comment of hers, there may still be a happy resolution. The truth about Samantha/Amber may be somewhere in between Pablo's version and the version that she has been telling Mark. Not so innocent, but not beyond redemption.

However it goes, I can't wait to find out.

arrowglassarrowglassover 8 years ago
VERY WELL DONE!!!!!

I wondered what was wrong, but did not see that coming...maybe I am just blind and was hoping for a happy ending...will wait and see what new twist you give us!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Didn't see that twist coming

xtremeddxtremeddover 8 years ago
Didn't I say "Trust but verify" ... ?

hmmm where will this go?

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

x

bruce22bruce22over 8 years ago
A nice twisty tale

Something had to happen to make it interesting... I wonder if Pablo was telling the truth. Where are her guns hidden? Was she in the know and planning from the beginning to have him eliminate Pablo? Is she really in love with him? That could complicate the next chapters. I am the black widow , but I love you..

apollo90apollo90over 8 years ago
Never saw that coming

But there are always 2 sides to every story. This twist doesn't mesh very well with the first 8 chapters, it will be interesting to see how you got this untangled.

RB1947RB1947about 8 years ago
As others said,

I didn't see that coming.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
what the ...

The minute she said "..remember that i love you" I didn't want to finish the chapter...then she said it again.. oh! my heart...

Something tells me my plans to go grocery shopping just got delayed so I can feed my addiction.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Seriously......

Man this is like the 5th story in line that i wanted to end well but just screwed up just before everything was good. i am sticking till the end so pls dont let me down

Horseman68Horseman68about 7 years ago
And So It Goes.

Very disappointing turn of the events. Still hoping for the best.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Holding on

What a twist!!

dgfergiedgfergiealmost 4 years ago
I knew everything was going to easy

Does he try and find her or is she going try and get to him?

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

I had suspcted that there was some sort of fly in the ointment simply because there so many chapters left to the tale. Those chapters had to contain more parts to the story. Now, what's he gonna do? Go home to make more stained glass art? Or find Samantha, and put her in jail along side Pablo? LP

AnonymousAnonymous12 months ago

Why would he flat out believe Pablo? I didn't seen any evidence that she was the real boss

AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago

Incredible writing and inspiring characters. Loving this story!

tsgtcapttsgtcapt5 months ago

Okay, now what? Thank you.

AnonymousAnonymous4 months ago

Wow! What a twist in the tale! Very interesting plot. You are too good, man! Keep it up.

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