All Comments on 'The Pool Pt. 01'

Please get a proof reader. There were several incidents where you repeated things and a proof reader will help with this.

I once fucked my boyfriends dad. He was hot as hell and we fucked for about two years..long after I dumped his son.

HOWEVER, there were lots of grammatical and spelling errors as well as typos.

Please continue writing, but avail yourself of the FREE editing services offered by Literotica.

Very erotic story - nicely described action and characters. All characters including Scott are we’ll brought out