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Cyberweasel89Cyberweasel89over 1 year ago

Not really a story. More a summary of one. It also doesn't make any sense that you call her "not a sadist" and call it "pranks" when this is clearly abuse. It also raises the question of why he doesn't leave his abusive girlfriend when you don't show he enjoys anything she does to him at all.

You dont' give any hint that he enjoys this, you don't give any hint that he has a reason to stay with her, and you contradict yourself by saying she's "not a sadist" and it's just "pranks" then write her as a very abusive girlfriend for a many that has no reason to stay with her yet does anyway for no adequately explored reason.

All in all, I expect better from you, so this was disappointing...

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