by destinie21
All I can say is "wow" and "spellbinding". It's so wonderful to read something here that goes past the physical. I wasn't sure when I first started reading if I wanted to continue. However you have a wonderful way with words and can create a total atmosphere. I'm anxiously waiting for chapter 2 (and 3 and 4).
Stop reading the bible and stop stroking your 3 inch weenie. This story was a complete waste of time.
Good story or bad story? I don`t know!?!?!?
Can someone describe the story to me in 5 words?
Elke
While the shifting around in the time-line was occassionally confusing, I thought this was a sweet and well done story and am looking forward to part 2.
Ignore the anonymous troll below. Keep in mind that he's angry at your "3 inch weenie" because it makes you twice the man he is.
Your background detail was great. Nice job of writing. Looking forward to the next chapter. Kudos!
Mood,pace and characterization were really great.
Enjoyed the story but agree completely with the comment about timeline. Was confusing in places.
This story brings out the way evil and good continue to compete. Kai struggles to come face to face with what is the right way to view matters of church and state. Well Written!
Words cannot express how good the story was.
In my opinion, the timeline was very easy to follow.
Keep up the good work D21
you have done a great job! I love all of your stories and I look forward to each and every one of your submissions.
BTW, I can't wait for more hot church-lesbian lovin'!!
Love,
SugarLove
You have done your usual wonderful job!! I can hardly wait for the next part!
and even more so with the newfound maturity in your writing. part two! quickly now, woman!
I read that story too, and basicaly, I would say the same things than what I said on Sanctuary.<br>
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I love it.<br>
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Nessa.
I loved it. I love the emotional build up and actually having a plot like your other stories. I look forward to the next part.--I
Still waiting for the second part. I do like the story very much and would like to see where it goes, only thing is the grammar but that is definitely something I can deal with.
Great stuff,left me wanting more,needs to be concluded,to suit me, with a happyish ending or true life,unresolved both parties left with memories
Interesting story, was expecting the typical slam/bam/thank you ma'am quickie sex story but this one is filled with a lot of backstory. I like the depth and look forward to more chapters.
Damn this is a good story but the grammatical errors and the switching of the names made the story a challenge to read and follow. It may be a good idea next time to not give characters similiar names starting with the same letter, as in "K" for Kayla and Kia. I like the storyline, please continue. Thank you
This was a syruggle to read what with the jumps in the timeline & how poorly edited it was, but the narrative had depth & profound emotion to it. I'm so anticipating the next chapter. My heart wants to give you 5 stars but reality crept on & demsnded 4. Still, this is an axceptional story.
Ugh! Another man/bad story. Let me guess Lesbian Sex cures all. Yup didn't have to read the whole story. Creativity: Don't look for it on this section.