All Comments on 'The Punchline Ch. 01'

Good start

I think if you could drop the stupid so called 'funny' lines it would be better. they weren't funny at all.

MORE!

... but a good start! Keep it going and cut some of the rather lame punches...

im impressed, laughed quite a lot...KEEP IT UP!

I'm hooked. I need to know what happens next. Please.

Wow! There's been overwhelming support for this series. Just so everyone knows, chapter 2 has been submitted, just waiting on approval. It's about as long as this one, however, I'm working on Chapter 3 and it's going to be double to triple this length.

Also a fair warning, chapter 2 is not as funny, because it's in the perspective of Callie and actually takes on a bit of a more depressing view on things.

And, for anyone wondering, chapter 3 is where some of the more sexual themes become present. So I hope you guys are ready for the series!

I like the line this story is taking. It sounds and feels realistic. He didn't just jump her bones right away.

It could stand to be longer. I know it was introductory, but longer segments tend to work better for your readers to get hooked on your tale and remember it when the next installment comes out.

jc

I hope you update this soon and have maybe longer chapters

Looking forward to next Chapters. Thanks for sharing.

and tells us virtually nothing about the characters, while giving us no reason to want to know more about them is waaaay too short.

so far it is just a bunch of one liners, but no punchline.

homeless people want food and drink. you never offered her food. you need

to add more details to your tale and feelings also.

I am in for the next chapter... Love these "useless" standup comedians. But he really should have fed her...

To Anyone starting this currently, the series isn't finished, don't bother.

SERIES IS INCOMPLETE SO DON'T WASTE YOUR TIME READING THIS

So called comedian had pathetic jokes when talking to Callie!! How the fuck does he not offer her food, she would have been starving!!

BUT, IT IS AN INCOMPLETE SERIES SO DON'T BOTHER