All Comments on 'The Robinson Models Pt. 01'

Certainly a very interesting story and I look forward to seeing what you do next.

Not bad, but with some problems. First of all there is no clear main character to identify with. That is always a huge problem. Then there are various details, like weird focus in the scenes, not very suggestive portrayals, and there was no reason to set the girls up as shy and then not make them virgins. But keep writing and keep improving.

I enjoyed this! There’s a lot of potential in this story. A little more action with quick descriptions and a little less exposition and it might be even better.

Thanks for sharing this story. Keep practicing.