All Comments on 'The Seduction of Caoimhe Ch. 05'

But there was no sexual tension. I write this in hope it will help your future output. IMO the best stories have an interesting setup, a teasing transition, and an explosive payoff. This applies to each chapter as well as the story as a whole.

You had the opportunity to develop the transition phase but just had Caoimhe go straight down on her mother. No seduction, just a bit of complaining and boom.

As for the back story, that didn't explain anything - it was just a sex scene.

I hope you take this the right way as you do have a style I like.

Hurry!

Can’t wait for the next chapter when everyone joins in making love

The only thing I agree with is it's a great setup. Beaverhunt makes it clear the seduction is for more than just mother and daughter. She seducing her daughter into a world of her, her sister and her husband. I'm curious to see how the author is going to get her from mother-daughter to a hell of a lot more. As for the snippets of backstory, it works. I'm reading as just that, snippets. I'm curious how they go from where they started 19 years ago to what they have today.