All Comments on 'The Seduction of Caoimhe Ch. 08'

But a bit confusing. I know this is a continuation of the story, but I didn't know who's perspective it was coming from and had to go back - that obviously took me out of the story. A reference to who each character is would have been helpful, for example: 'I wanted my sister and her husband to...'

Please proofread your story before you post because the mistakes again took me out of the story.

I write this in hope it helps your future output and feel free to comment on my work.

Keep writing.

I love how you captured the passion that drove their shared love of golden showers, it made me thirsty reading it.

Lovely Story!

Agree with "MargaretSexyMum" mmm

Nicely written!

Aunt Helena

I guess golden showers just ain't my thing. Yech !