by Lycandope
Bravo ! The transformation description was excellently done and the rest of the story was great as well. I would hope that you continue these adventures as they explore their new world.
Entirely possible! This and "The Change" are ones that're left purposefully open so I could continue them if I wanted.
Thank you very much for the compliments!
Probably my favorite thing about this story is the time period you chose to write it in. I loved the mannerisms and feel like you really captured the story. I do hope you choose to do something else with the story, but it is also appreciate as a stand alone piece. Job well done and good luck in the contest.
-onyx
This story is the best erotic short novel I have ever read. It was very well written, the characters were well developed, and it didn't totally revole around the sex. Excellent editting, there were no errors. Keep on writing! You have a gift, and I would love to read more! :-)
I like your story and the time period as well. I like how you wrote it and how it played out in the end with Mary's uncle getting killed. I'm somewhat of a writer myself but I'm sure I couldn't do something like what you have written. Good job and keep up the stories. I hope to read another section of this when it is ready.
your story is fantastic with very little to no errors and it is the first story i felt storngly enough about to comment and make my opinion know. I love how it wasnt just pointless sex and you build to the moment make me want them to have sex more over time. the imagery was very vivid and i found myself mimicking some of the things that they were doing with their expessions purely insticntually. you managed to fit a few funnies in there along with some emotional situation that made me cringe and grit my teeth in anger. Overall this story has made its way into my favorites list both online and in my mind 5 of 5 stars.
This was an excellent werewolf story as they are my favorite followed by vampire and then succubus. I gave you 5-STARS for this wonderful werewolf story. I would like to see you continue this wonderful story with Mary and Richard's adventures in India and their search for the Ranjit.
Retired Army NCO