All Comments on 'The Small Brass Key'

I really enjoyed the story until the end. Sure he killed the lothario; but at what cost? His life is over and for what? Cuz his wife got some...does that sound a little ridiculous? Sure, beat the piss outta him, divorce her and leave her out in the streets, that I can understand... but first degree murder? Sorry, don't buy it.

To Anonymouse: Murder seldom makes sense to the Monday morning quarterback. It happens anyway. I think that the story depict one, but not necessarily the only, realistic reaction that a cuckolded husband might have.

Thanks for the story. I liked it, and agree killing can go ether way... one or both.

Mike from Texas

The fact that she cheated on such a wonderful relationship left me sad. The fact that she had no defenses against a real predator made me sadder. Both she and her husband were victims here. The fact that the husband gave up his life to protect society was a little too much. He should have found a subler weapon....

already killed the lover why not her.common sense is the downfall of a weak story.

My life as I know, is over....how can I a professor, highly educated in Sociology, continue to teach the subject I love most on how humans have adapted to their environment to carry on and survive through pain and adversity, whence I cannot.

When people claim that murder does not "make sense" they are partially correct. We say "make sense" to mean "equal out emotionally". But actually our senses become saturated when we have a crisis such as Patrick had. The need to relieve the emotional pressure is overwhelming. This story seems dispassionate. That is deceiving. The elements are there for Patrick, and only the diary relieved the pressure where his wife was concerned. Unfortunately for Anthony........☺

sweet, this writer laid everything out clearly. Outcome was predictable, though really only one option of the many available. Of course her last entry in the diary saved her life, so she lives. I think her trip to professional help will start shortly. How ya say, NUT HOUSE!!!

As for him, what does it matter, he died five minutes after he used the little brass key! If his body lives to see a hundred, his mind is on a cruise! Oh, I do wonder what will become of the cruise tickets, if your not using em, send em my way!!! Y f t

I only wished that the meeting and killing of Anthony would be written about. I also wish that he had killed the wife too.

what is it with this fucking idiot Bruce22? How does he conclude that the wife had no defenses against this sexual predator? A Grown mature woman that claims to be deeply in love with her husband somehow cannot slap Anthony across the face when he make his first kiss ?...

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There is only 1 reason why the wife went along with it.. and the dairy explains it all too well.

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She wanted to fuck Anthony. Thats its. Time after time she wrote about each encounter in detail but she never LOOKED at the words. Her writings INCREASED her detachment from her husband when they should of said to her "My god what the hell am I doing?" ...

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The wife is totally at fault here and is NOT in anyway the victim. So blow it out your ass Bruce.

I think the end matched his thoughts. I think her final end was through his reading of her last entry in the diary. Thanks for the story.

For me this cements it. Jake60 is as great a writer and author as Longhorn. This is an amazing story.

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It is OBVIOUS that the husband came back to kill her... saw her diary out... read it.. saw that she wanted to break it off with Anthony... that he was a sexual predator. When Patrick read that he decided NOT to kill her. And he took the cell phone.

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I have seen some tendency from some readers to assert that Glenda was a Victim. That is just total bullshit. The entry for OCT 10th and 16th sealed the deal. Her actions are Not "inappropriate" They are just downright fucking wrong.

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A sociology professor surely is more acutely aware than any other educational discipline about how Wrong it is to have a TA in your office with the door closed and LOCKED. Such actions could lead to her firing.

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Yet her response ..."please unlock and open the door".???

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And her response to Anthony's 1st kiss was so awful so lacking... her message to Anthony was fuck me and fuck me alot.

For the poster who complained about Bruce: I'm surprised you were able to comprehend the story since you obviously didn't understand the point Bruce was making.

Good stories like this have become few and far between.

The use of a diary to tell the story of infidelity was very creative. Jake60 is a wonderful storyteller who is a welcome addition to serious writers in the Loving Wives genre.

it was a very good story, but the unneeded violance of a murder, makes it less than avarage. you can punish but this price is way to high and no sane guy would do that. I guess you should move from stonage to 2008 where human beeings live and not apes anymore

I'd would not have killed Anthony. After restraining him to a chair naked using super glue and lots of duck tape and taping his mouth shut I would have waited until he was fully awake. Then using a zip tie around his cock and balls and my Kliens to tighten the zip tie and cut all blood circulation. In a day or so his equipment would be dead and then I would have contacted an attorney and turned myself in. A really good attorney would get you off with 5 to 10 years probation. Then dump the bitch and go back to work for Anderson Electric. Cary from Montana

There are people in this world who deserve to be tortured and killed, and Romeo certainly qualified for the former, if not the latter. To bad Patrick couldn't have been a tad more discreet and not 'ruined' his life. Alas often those that make sacrifice for the greater good often must make personal sacrifice.

Read the story elsewhere first, liked it here too. Thank you for a story well-told.

Emotional to say the least with a subtle twist when the last diary entry saved her life.<P>

The underwriting and between the lines story was powerful and not easy to accomplish.<P>

Surely 1 of the top 10 Marital Consequence Story's ever presented here.<P>

Thanks Author - You are appreciated and looked forward to.<P>

With Very High Regard

Thanks for fantastic story - I couldn't stop reading.

I wish he'd left the gun on her diary, so that when the cops showed up, she'd already know something was up, and more importantly, HER prints would be on the gun. She definitely deserved punishment. The fact that she was writing about 'things being over' did not, in any way, negate the fact that she did them. The story ends with her needing MORE than 'psychological awareness'.

Thanks again!

A well-written story about a mystifyingly weak willed woman who allowed herself to be seduced by predator student and then stupidly documents her flagrant betrayal of her marital vows in a diary she leave at home for her husband to read. Given the husbands nosiness in reading her confidential diary, only a tragedy could result. Conclusion would have been better if husband had just castrated seducer and beat the hell out of him. Wifes conscience will torture her for the rest of her life, but husband ruined his whole life too. Sad but well written story.

60 year old George

You do revenge very well. I have to wonder why he used his cell phone to call the police since he was going to run. Not calling would have given him an additional couple of days head start.

but plot-wise, it's a complete turd. personally I don't like to spend a good quality time reading a story about characters who are unlikable. it's a waste of my time. <p>

now, if the premise, the story, is really about just very evil people who derive happiness and satisfaction out of hurting people and brag about how clever they are, and if the author is able to plot some clever scheme to execute the story, in convincing ways, then I have no problem... <p>

but not like this...

One of the best stories I have read here.

Wish I had written it myself

I was just skimming all the NEW story dreck for the day thinking, "Jeez, I'd even read a Just Plain Bob story at this point," when up pops a Jake60 story. And a pretty damn good one too, except that reading all the diary entries got a little tedious at times. I was more interested in Patrick. Anyway, good job. Keep 'em coming. They are much appreciated in this wilderness.

I admire the author's writing ability and his story telling. First rate. Using the diary as a way of giving the background of the seduction and affair was inspired.<br><br>It seems ironic to me that the wife's last entry in her diary, which the husband is assumed to have read, presumably saved her life yet if the husband had read it before confronting Anthony he may have changed his mind about killing Anthony. If this were the case, then he killed Anthony for less reason then he thought he had. On the run for murder and for what? I can envision a follow-up story where Patrick is captured and brought back for trial and has to confront his wife about the affair and about his crime. It would be interesting to see how this author would handle those situations. For me I would like to see a confrontation between the wife and husband.

Thank you for sharing your talent. You are developing into a GREAT STORYTELLER. Please continue to contribute your very entertaining stories.

Well written moving tale. If she really meant what she wrote in her last entry, Glenda will have to live a life sentence with her conscience for what SHE caused. Yes SHE caused it by allowing it to happen. Nice in fantasy on this site, the woman who yields for reasons no one knows, but as all horny married men know, a wife definitely KNOWS HOW TO SAY NO IF SHE WANTS TO. And no, Glenda didn't force her husband to kill the asshole, but she didn't have to keep detailed records where a jealous husband might find them either did she? Too bad hubbie couldn't have had a clear enough head to think to cause both of his intended victims to have "accidents." Since he worked in the Electrical field it might have been easy for him to leave live circuits around someplace. But then we wouldn't have had our memorable ending full of sad remorse and unfulfilled hopes and dreams, the survivors crying, at home and on the run, for what was and what might have been. On the bright side both spouses will probably be TV stars on AMW. Glenda might even get alot more action from future TA's once her dirty laundry gets on TV and eveyone finds out how easy it is to get her to spread. Won't her Mom and Dad be proud; their little girl on primetime TV.

Well written moving tale. If she really meant what she wrote in her last entry, Glenda will have to live a life sentence with her conscience for what SHE caused. Yes SHE caused it by allowing it to happen. Nice in fantasy on this site, the woman who yields for reasons no one knows, but as all horny married men know, a wife definitely KNOWS HOW TO SAY NO IF SHE WANTS TO. And no, Glenda didn't force her husband to kill the asshole, but she didn't have to keep detailed records where a jealous husband might find them either did she? Too bad hubbie couldn't have had a clear enough head to think to cause both of his intended victims to have "accidents." Since he worked in the Electrical field it might have been easy for him to leave live circuits around someplace. But then we wouldn't have had our memorable ending full of sad remorse and unfulfilled hopes and dreams, the survivors crying, at home and on the run, for what was and what might have been. On the bright side both spouses will probably be TV stars on AMW. Glenda might even get alot more action from future TA's once her dirty laundry gets on TV and eveyone finds out how easy it is to get her to spread. Won't her Mom and Dad be proud; their little girl on primetime TV.

Another hit. Just loved reading it. Well done and please post more often.

Despite my reservation regarding the psychological assumptions behind the motivation of the husband, dramatically speaking, the story is tight and the ending added a nice surprising element to the whole. I wish we could see one story of this quality every month…<P>

Going back to my reservation. It has become a common norm to direct the anger to the non married partner of the cheating duo. I have qualms with this assumption. In reality, to the most part it’s the other way around. I have said many times before – it’s the married spouse who had vowed to be loyal not the accidental partner to the cheating. <P>

My other comment has to do with the inappropriate use of the term ‘predator’ here. It’s borrowed from situations where the imbalance between the seducer and the seduced is such that it is considered to cross the legal lines of sexual consent. This was obviously not the case here. The wife was tempted but she was aware of both the risks and the steps she could take to avert the progression of the seduction. In addition, we did not have here a case of imbalance of power, typical to many unwarranted sexual harassment situations.<P>

It would be another big step towards the literary liberation of female characters and full equality with their male partners if authors were to allow them the dignity of bearing the full responsibility for their actions (and their consequences) with no excuses of ‘predators’, misdirected actions towards their partners only and such relics of misplaced chivaliorios attitudes to the undeserving… <P>

Again, despite the above reservations as a story it was very enjoyable. Thanks.

Super story, well written, I am still trying to find away he messed up... But I can't....

Simply brilliant.

So real it could be out of tomorrow's headline. Obviously, Patrick wanted to read her next entry in her diary (I do not believe that he wanted to kill her but what she wrote about Anthony probably got him killed).

It was like reading one of those murder novels by that very famous author that you can't put down! I couldn't wait to get to the next chapter! I will admit being a bit disappointed in the ending, but it's so much better than most of the crap on here I'll take the ending as is. Please.............more, and soon!

Very good work! I always look forward to seeing your stories come up on the "new" list and as usual this one did not disappoint. The murder scenario was little over the top for me though. I always prefer "revenge and humiliation scenarios" for the "cheaters", leaving them to "live" with what they did. To me "Snuffing" either the wife or her lover out turns the story into another genre. Here, the husband basically gives up his own life, (he is on the run from the law) because his wife screwed up. It makes the husband seem like he has got some serious issues that helped drive the wife into another man's bed in the first place. The punk kid is dead but the wife can go to a counselor and in a couple of months, she gets to start a whole new life. She gets away free, save for a guilty conscience. It is obvious she handles guilt issues pretty well from what she wrote in the diary. The husband could have just walked away and kept some dignity. Booting his wife's ass out should not have had to be so difficult. Most husband's in this one's situation would not have handled it the way that he did. The murder made the husband a much less sympathetic character. Still a good story though. Keep writing.

...not great. I think the whole murder, almost murder was an interesting twist, and you handled it well, but in many ways it left me feeling cheated. You developed two interesting characters and gave them a sense of reality. As much as many readers seem to love to have someone die over an infidelity it seldom happens in real life, and it really did not play out with the character I felt when I read your story. It felt more like you started in one direction and then got this idea of how to end it later.

All in all good, but much less than the potential you started with.

Good story

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Okay, great story. Two really well developed characters. Patrick goes a little overboard with killing Anthony but sometimes a man's gotta do what a man's gotta do. I might have reacted the same way.<P>

So the moral of this story is 'don't read your wife's diary?' I have to agree that she did save her life with the last entry. But the phone call to the police from his own cell phone? Incomprehensible. Leaving the cell phone and murder weapon together? Utterly incomprehensible. It's like saying 'here I am - come get me.' But I think he can get 'impaired mental state' to plead it down from first degree murder.<P>

BUT - he did also find out from the diary she had never done this before, that she loved him dearly, that she arranged their meeting at the party, and that - clearly - she was under Anthony's spell. What she did was totally wrong and she deserves to suffer but having Patrick destroy his own life to do it is troublesome.<P>

Other commentators have complained that Glenda got off scot free. Not true. Her job is toast. If having an affair with a TA is a dismissable offense how about getting the TA killed? So no job. Mentally she is probably shot. She was already experiencing guilt. Now with Anthony dead and her husband gone that has to be off the scale. She doesn't get to have children with Patrick. She now has to start all over again at 35 and quite frankly I doubt that she will be dateable for some time. And lastly she doesn't get to live the rest of her life with Patrick which, of course, is only just.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

I agree with fregen remarks.

She´s triple fucked:No lover, no hubby and no job.

Outstanding story.

Nice story Jake. I would have liked to have seen a little more of the aftermath of Glenda's state of mental health but that's just the vengeful part of me talking. You actually set it up pretty good so we all know what she's going through. Great Story, when I first started it I thought that this one is kinda long but before I knew it I was reading the end. Way to go. I hope to see more from you if we don't lose you to the professionals.

Shaem he didnt get rid of the cheating slut also. Hope he holds out long enough for the heat to cool and just blends into the terrain. Sluts and cheaters may win for a while but sooner or later the world turns.

Interesting story, lousy ending. Again follows the Literotica formula for hurt husbands and vengeful readers. Husband doesn't talk enough with wife. Wife lies to husband "who she adores" and has no self control around an attractive guy. Give us a break.

The violent end was crap.

When i came across another cheating erotic story, i just thought the husband is going to divorce or just accept the wife and allow a threesome as it comes in other clumsy stories here. Its a big surprise for you to make it clear that cheating housewives get a punishment and lovers should get murdered. Voted 5* for the story, its a good cheating story and good payback for both the lovers.

This was a real page turner Jake. I couldn't wait to read what happened next and yelled at someone who interrupted me while I was reading your story. ... Patrick is a very good protagonist, a hero imo. He took appropriate action, I don't care what the consequences, you do not ever go after another man's wife unless you are ready and willing to pay the ultimate consequence. Anthony specifically wanted to play with older married women. At least one of his friends, family members, acquaintances, ... heck random guys you meet in a bar could have told him that behaviour has significant and yes sometimes even violent consequences. I'm not a violent man myself, but Patrick is a hero.

Killing the lover was a complete surprise to me and I loved it. I thought the story would lead to the husband forgiving her and they would have hot sex but this was better.

Would love to have him return several years later to face her? Would be interesting to see how her life progresses with the realization that she almost died and wondering if he will return to finish the job.

As the police officer said ... "I expect that Mrs. Dunn will eventually realize just how close she came to losing her life and will wonder why she didn't. I wonder how she's going to handle that."

Hope you ( or another writer ) will complete the story!! Good read!!

The ending paragraph needs to be changed. Take out these two sentences; "I expect that Mrs. Dunn will eventually realize just how close she came to losing her life and will wonder why she didn't. I wonder how she's going to handle that." If you leave it open-ended, it's more powerful.

Furthermore, you need to get back inside the husband's head for a short while to do an afterthought piece to tie all things together from his perspective.

DELICIOUS!!

One of the very best stories I've ever read in LIT.

One of your very best. Exellent story structure, continuity, and keeping reader interest thruout. Should be text book "How to write a story".

Nuff said...............LJM

Canada would likely not allow his extradition anyway. I do love a happy ending, but I just wish he would have killed her too. He must have read her final diary entry and decided against it.

It just felt incomplete. I have to wonder though, why didn't he just destroy Anthony's academic career by suing him and the university?

Great story. Quite frankly, Patric should have killed his wife at the same time he killed Anthony, so the two lovers could look into each others eyes as they died. And to my mind the killings were justified and Patric should go unpunished

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I have to assume that her final diary entry, which he read, was what saved her life even while it destroyed her marriage utterly. It displayed all the appropriate perceptions, bewilderments, and rationally determined intentions for an utterly faihful future. I have trouble believivg, though, that Patrick couldn't formulate his revenge in a similar manner -- what he did was off-the-wall hysterical and self-destructive (I mean, even using a traceable gun?), no way deliberated. And that's inconsistent with his controlled response throughout the story. True, it gave your bloodthirsty readers a grand guignol revenge, but you're a better writer than that.

This story as your others are among the best I have ever read on this site. I only wish you will have the oportunity to submit additonal stories in the near future. Thanks.

The ending with murder seems pretty drastic. I agree with Proxy Account (9/17/10) The wife should have been exposed to the University and relatives and ruined as well as the predator student. connoisseur29

jake60 .. YOU HAVE TO FINISH THIS STORY. While I despise the WHORE wife, the readers of your story need to see what happens to both him and her .. the emotional suffering she goes thru, the reasons why he did not finish her off, a conclusion where he is vindicated and she suffers for her actions the rest of her life! Please continue .. but please don't turn him into a forgiving wimp that takes her back!

You left it hanging. You need to finish this.

The story is what it is. She was seduced and willingly allowed it with just some reservations. that's common enough in life.

She lived because after finishing reading the diary he knew that she did not deliberately go out to cheat, but she did allow the fling to occur once began.

She was not a bad or evil person as you hardasses contend. She was human and tried to hide her fling because she did not want to lose her husband or her future with him. The husband realized all that through reading her diary throughout.

He darkened and changed after following her progress through her diary. He also recognized that she was self-conscious and not as strong willed a person as he had always thought. But she had been faithful up to until this particular skirt-chaser aroused her interest.

The now mentally changed husband focused his dark attention on the man who had ruined his marriage and caused him to no longer respect or trust his wife.

Remember, "The true opposite of love is indifference." Hating and killing the seducer shows that the other side of the coin of love is hate or remorse for that loss. He took his revenge on the man that cost him his wife.

Remember the old adage: When you expedite total revenge on someone, "Dig Two Graves!" This is what revenge normally gets you readers.

His life is destroyed because he couldn't just move on or forgive her her weakness. I think reconciliation was possible for these two if he hadn't reverted to an immature and revenge-minded male of long ago.

This is just a fiction story so does all this dissection really matter? It has played out like this throughout history because males have always wanted to keep their chosen woman to themselves. A tribal guarantee that the offspring are theirs and not someone elses.

Isn't it still that way in Islamic countries today?Supposedly we are more civilized and all know that adultery is not a crime like it is over there. It is a human condition and most civilized countries have a lot of it occurring, both men and women.

Some of you cannot accept that humans are not monogamous creatures and most all of us stray throughout life!

I think it is the skill of Jake60's writing that makes these stories so good. I personally think that he is the best I have read overall. He tends towards revenge stories but yet he allows us to dissect what he has done. We don't need a sequel, but it would be nice wouldn't it?

By the way. Almost all of the commenters made excellent comments on this story! They were just as interesting as the story... thanks for the entertainment. Writer and Commenters!

All of the accolades have been said by previous discerning commenter s. Now this is one helluva Author,bordering on genius. Thank you.

the slut got off scot free. was it only the guy's fault? she wasn't drugged or forced when she gave access to her cunt, quite easily too. taking him for the seminar shows premeditation. burn the bitch by zapping her with 440 Volts up her cunt!

Once again, no resolution.

I don't understand the use of death as a means of revenge, it's basically a get out of jail free card. Both Anthony and the slut wife got off to easy in this, though maybe the slut will suffer a little mentally and emotionally knowing she turned a good man down the path of revenge.

I do not understand the Author, why he do not carry on the story. Have the (Canadian, USA state, federal) police arrested Patrick? Has he lived underground? etc.

Finally, the story of a man who, when faced with thoughts of his wife's infidelity, doesn't immediately go worship the porcelain god. Is hate so alien an emotion now that the taste of it makes "civilized" men want to puke?

I loved the story. I agree with those who said it needs completion but, maybe, not by the author. Does he have a female writer here in Literotica with whom he's friendly who might be able to pick up the story and finish it. The male part of the story is ended -- but it could be picked up if they get together again. More interesting to me would be a woman's point of view of what happens next. How does she go on and in what direction?

Also, I am amazed at the lack of recognition by many of those leaving comments that women can be seduced and can have weak moments just like us men. Killing a woman for having sex fits nicely into the Afghani/Arab culture. Honor killing isn't part of our culture and I don't think it should be.

By a consummate Master of Words. This just could not be any better. Thank you Jake.

no cuck here. soon the wife will learn what spreading her slut legs did - but she is a whore so she will do it again and over and over.

Why on earth did Patrick implicate himself by using his licensed gun and leave tokens at the crime scene? He could use any number of other method of disabling a person. Blunt force object and element of surprise would work, he doesn't need to use a gun. Heck, he shouldn't have killed the bastard, beat him up good, disfigure him if must; but don't kill him. That's the difference between assault and murder. He could've divorce his wife and start anew with his life, being a fugitive wouldn't make a good start at life.

Also to the adultery apologist, Glenda could've put a stomp at things before it develop but she doesn't do it, instead she welcomes it. She's not an innocent in the process, it takes two to tango. Saying that infidelity is just a human condition and women can be seduced and have weak moment (as it been eloquently argued by other commentators) is just a smokescreen to dodge out of responsibility. I guess it's one of the sign of the changes in times, when a breach of contract is treated as common occurrence and the wronged party is derided as having an ego trip and his pride is silly. Thank goodness I don't live in that part of the world.

Also, I think this type of ending is called the "fuck you" ending by some. Meaning a story that is well-written and have a good development just ends with an incomprehensible way, twist for twist's sake.

Good Story....bill

It's a great cuck/betrayal story, shame about the ending. I think we were all looking forward to a final confrontation between hubby and wife.

Great story-- but I don't think a cheating slut is worth spending the rest of your life in prison for. Sluts will be sluts, just because you kill one lover that doesn't mean she won't find another. No bitch is worth dying for --damn sure not worth getting executed for..

Great ending. Actually Patrick did the cheating wife a favor and let her live. Live to realize what he realized. She really loved him. Although she betrayed him, this was an aberration of her life. She never did it before. Unknown to him, however, was that she pledged never to do it again. For Patrick though it was too late. He killed the asshole that seduced his wife and was now never going to return. Never to be found. For Glenda that meant:

No children

No marriage

No growing old together

No love

Do I feel sorry for her?

HELL NO. Fuck her.

DON"T CHEAT

CONSEQUENCES ABOUND.

Now you have to follow it up with her story and if she goes after him to beg forgiveness. 5 ranking though!

If finished properly would have been 5 stars.

needs an ending.

I rated as a 5 because I really liked even without a proper ending. I really hope jake60 can take the time to wrap it up.

This is the kind of story that makes little sense to me, his wife betrays him but the lover pays the price. So Glenda fucks around and her punishment is to gain possession of everything they have accumulated in their marriage less $20,000. Wow where can I sign up for this package deal, as for any guilt that she may feel for her actions, a divorce would have gained the exact same result. Exposure to the university board and loss of tenure would have been a better solution. No violence that only ruins his life while ruining her's. Think about it, all that time wasted to get a doctorate only to have it removed because you fucked your T.A. Weak reasoning on the part of the author. I gave this a ****.

Good story up to the point of the violence for me. It seems to me the wife had her ego boosted and felt desirable to a younger man. Nothing strange about that situation. I would have like read that the wife is confronted with the evidence pit through a potential divorce, and then for her to reconcile her situation with her husband as she genuinely loves him and recognize her weakness on her characture.

So can we have an alternative ending please ?

As o have so many stories of burning the wife !

...poor ending.

This is the second story I've read tonight by you; you write great stories and really lousy endings.

Most definitely needs a finish. She cheated and walked free. Patrick is on the run due to her actions. No justice here. Yeah, Anthony paid (he should of) but she should of also. Can think of many reasonable payback scenarios.

The endings leave something to be desired but the reader should understand you motives. While not finished in our minds .you did one super job as a story teller writer. It's a shame you have stopped writing ,your are that good , I can only wish you the best and hope you are well and can write again.

I agree with the previous comments that this is a terrific story with all the emotional charge that makes me want more. I do hope that you will find the inspiration to do the rest of the story.

Thank for a great read.

Where is a story with a mature, rational husband who can understand the facts of life and not get his testosterone in an uproar and commit over-the-top revenge for the satisfaction of the burn-the-bitch cretens? It would be so much more interesting to have him confront her and follow their efforts to work it out.

While the writing was pretty good, the story failed to resolve all the conflicts. Basically, it needs another chapter in order to provide a real ending. Maybe another author would be interested?

1/2 story that ended just when it should have started getting good. Why???

Hope she fuckin' dies a slow painful death from AIDS

good thing, for her, that she wrote her Jan. 7th diary entry before she took her bath. (But too late for Tony.)

Hubby left HIS key with the late Bull, before returning to his own house. He could NOT have read Sweetie's earlier entry...the diary was always kept locked! Any mercy was NOT due to her coming back to her senses and shutting down the Bull. I would guess as Hubby was returning, after terminating the Bull, he remembered what she had written in the earlier diaries...and the fact that her expressions of love and respect for him were there, even in her recent months' entries!

Excellent read!

But leaving the wife unscathed leaves a bad taste in my mouth.

would love to see this continued......would like to see how much the wife would do for hubby......give up everything to live on the lamb or turn away from him for what he has done?

He did read her final comments! Remember, she left her pen between the pages, the diary on the table, went and took a long bath. She indicated that she thought she had been watched.

Whatever he planned, he saw the open diary, read it, sensed her remorse and real love and then knew - he had to leave, maybe planned it all along.

He obviously didn't care about being caught, he left the easy clues right where they could be found and even called the murder in to the PD.

Mow, to Jake...Thanks, a little lengthly but well done - Thank You!!!

please finish this

Please finish this story

No - I don't think the story needs to be continued. Imagination carries the day on this one. Also, I'm not sure how you say the wife hasn't been punished. Lets see a) her lover is killed. Whether or not she was going to end the affair it now means she has directly caused the death of another human. Should be slightly troubling. b) she has lost her husband who she loves (80% of adulterous wives seem to love husband) c) she is going to lose job as soon as college realizes she was having affair with TA. The TA is a student, and teacher - student relations are usually firing offenses disregarding the fact that the affair got the TA whacked. A dark story well told. 5*