by brainfade
I enjoyed the way you told it as though it was almost in a diary, or almost letter left behind explaining things. Well done.
I loved your story! My boy friend and I just started anal play and I want more! Your story was great fun!
Your style of writing is fine, but I'm really not a fan of anal. It's a turnoff to me. Good luck, though. (I didn't rate the story, just left the comment because you asked us to tell you why we might not like it.)
It had a good flow to it and the writing style was well done. I really hope to see more of your work.
Great story and very well written. A lot of the stories on this site drive me nuts because of all the grammatical and spelling errors; that's a real boner killer for me. So it was a relief to read yours and not have to deal with that annoyance. Thank you for the great read.