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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
3rd person kills the drama

3rd person kills the suspense, drama and emotion. It's like hearing voice over on a golf game, but at the 30,000 foot level. Try it again with more interaction and emption. Check out "The God of mischief and lies". Loki finds something he can't control....

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