All Comments on 'The Swimmers'

I enjoyed the build up. The sex was pretty bland. Finger sucking was good, but what about a 69? If this was their first time together they should have been nervous. They should have been clumsy. The story would have been great if it continued into the party.

I gave it a 3 star. It could have been better.

You made them sound like high school drop outs.

chapter 2 published and it looked interesting. not a good start - it became pretty simplistic and the dialogue was weak. i'm going to read chapter 2 and hope its better. great first few paragraphs to start this chapter give me hope!