All Comments on 'The Terminator's Daughter'

Too much waffle!

Your story was well-written and, aside from some minor spelling and grammar issues, flowed nicely and was an enjoyable read. As the previous commenter alluded to, it was a bit heavy on background and a bit light on sex. Not a deal breaker in and of itself…and with the wife showing signs of suspicion, you've left yourself a nice direction for future chapters. Back off somewhat on the fluff, ramp up the sex and you'll find greater acceptance among the followers of your work. Literotica readers are a tough audience to play to! ****

Thanks for reading and responding. The sex is more incidental to my stories as opposed to the main event, contrary to many of the stories on this site. For this one, I actually tried to go heavier on the sex than usual. It's more about a dysfunctional household as noted by Jim's incestuous relationship with Alexa and his deteriorating marriage. So many stories here are ALL about the sex, more scenes that actual stories with the classic "sonata" form of beginning, middle and end.

Unlike some of my other stories, this one almost cries out for a sequel. Stay tuned.

You take your time with the story but rush the sex. When you get to the sex parts slow it down be more descriptive etc. ***

Reading Your responses on comments I could only think that Your background really described it: all the normal, conscious, intelligent thinking We all would/should feel if this was to be real, I salute You Brother;-)

under1ofthee absolute best taboo stories around thee entire site

BECAUSE ALL BUILDING UP it's fantastic it's awesome

it's sensational it's phenomenal butttttttttttttttttttt after the sex~sessions begin

each time powwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww it's already damn over .....

i've really do want more happening countless ideas turning this

complete franchise perfection franchise TAKE TIME AROUND SEX

DESCRIBE ALL THE DETAILS EVERY ASPECT EVERY FRACTION

EXTREMELY GOOD :-) :-)

At last, someone who understands what I attempted to show here - that realistically, most people who indulge in incest would be ambivalent at best, guilt ridden at worst. Ultimately, Jim's and Alexa's attraction overwhelmed these feelings. Still, they are far from totally comfortable with it and never could be. In fact, most people raised within Western, Judeo-Christian moral framework could never be.

this woman said that - she's got this theory .........................................

i've got my own - - - the husband\the father trying do everything that

he can completely take his mind off his oldest daughter .. he begins

major project inside house\inside mansion it's building

this spectacular indoor swimming~pool includes few excellent waterfalls ..

while it's the process getting built oldest daughter refuses continue

getting ignored so she begins tease the men helping out her father ..

some these men literally try progress what she did start she won't

allow more because she only wants her father doesn't matter how hard

they try after they've been teased .. the day finally arrives

major project all done oldest daughter she's found different aspects

cruelly tease her father .. how long can he hold off until he

gives up yet again fucking his oldest daughter yet again .. .. ..

depending youngest daughter age she could take part lots aspects

even if it's only simple fantasy the father constantly thinking

even if it's only simple fantasy the sister constantly thinking

even if it's only simple fantasy the mother constantly thinking .. .. ..

let's also remember that the wife\the mother she's gonna

hanging out some point probably lots the spectacular

indoor swimming~pool includes few excellent waterfalls

she's gotta take part everything happening even if it's only

the husband simple fantasies even if it's only

oldest daughter simple fantasies even if it's only

youngest daughter simple fantasies even if it's only simple fantasies

the men helping out the husband\the father .. .. .. .. .. if your gonna really

use everything i'm saying if your gonna really use good deal what

i'm saying if your gonna use least some the stuff i'm saying -

if everything's done correctly you could extremely easily

span this like chapter3 like chapter4 possibly even more that

Next chapter please...........

:-) well, I usually like longer stories because i prefer when the relationship progress step by step. I myself don't mind if the sex part is not a full description of fluids and not much detalied lol, but i think it's too bad they made it out too fast for a taboo relation:) ( longer you wait, better you enjoy) but still, it was really nice to read so thanks for writing it.

xoxo

As you noted, "Unlike some of my other stories, this one almost cries out for a sequel. Stay tuned." So, what happened to the sequel?

If Jim and Alexa stop working out, that might fuel further suspicion by Kendra. Interesting conflict to resolve. Jim needs to come up with a solution as the kid the artfully adult. Maybe find a boyfriend for Alexa as a surrogate for Jim? Good luck!

Good story so far, would like to see you continue.