All Comments on 'The Three Traditions of Pink'

Well this really was a long story

Normally i dont have much patience reading alot

But this was perfect

It made me kinda feel like i was really close to the people in the storie

So Thx

Without knowing it this was exactly what i was looking for

well as I said this was a long story, but I almost did not read it thinking it would not hold my interest, but I was wrong this is a outstanding story and the writer is very talented if I could I would give it more than 5 stars thank you

Started reading first thing this morning and had to leave it at chapter 4, and haven't stopped thinking about getting back to read the other 10 chapters, suffice it to say I never stopped until I finished it and I usually want more but with this story I don't think more would do it justice - it would spoil it. So to you VF_0079 thank you for a very very good story and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Excellent writing, really got my attention to finish the story.

Good job

This was so damn good i love it!!!

I have read so many stories that I don't count any more, and written over a hundred but every so often, a story comes along that makes me smile, makes me cry, or just gives me a warm fuzzy feeling. You have managed to do all of the above and then some. Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading. Thank you. fantac63

Started reading and couldn't take my eyes of the screen. Giggled like a fool at times, was upset with the "bad guys", rooted for Abigail and Emma, (i admit, most of the time i was *cough* hard...but enough about that), and even tho i am a guy and even tho am i straight, i couldn't help but tear up seeing the happy ending.

I bow my hat to you sir / madame for gifting me such a beautiful story. Thank you.

What a beautiful and lovely story this was. And i love the long stories.

As i started to read this i never once took my eyes off of it. This is the best story i have read since i found this site. I laughed and had sad moments as i read this. You make it seem as if the characters are really alive. I really want to thank you for posting this story!

What a story! Many congratulations. Very interesting :-)

What a wonderful story! You've more than made the last two days fun reading your story! It captivated me me throughout! I love love stories and yours is one of the best I've read here!

Thank you so much!

L

Thank you for all those kind words you guys! Much appreciated!

Wonderful and loving story. A love story that has it all, good and bad guys. A must read.

A definite improvement on Love me please.

That said, I think you let the antagonists off too easily, aside from Anastacia, whos motivations are a little shaped, we don't get the motives of Donovan (it's such a cliché in lesbian stories that males are simple evil beings) and more importantly of Alexa (what kind schemes are we talking about?).

You need to define the non protagonists character and your story will get a lot more enjoyable (which is already a lot (-: )

Cheers!

A most enjoyable read. If it was expanded into a book, I'd buy it. I love it that much. The characters were relatable and you couldn't help but cheer for Abigail & Emma. VF_0079, this is so well written and the storyline so superb, that I want to read your other works.

I was inspired by these two adorable person. How I wish I'll find the Abigail or the Emma of my life. Thanks to the author.

Kinda got stuck on the whole kicked out and locks changed in 30 min and losing all her stuff. She was a resident of the household for a year. That gives her rights anywhere in the US. If Abigale had called the police the officer would have informed her girlfriend she couldn't kick her out like that, or throw out her property. Best the girlfriend coulda done is legally evicted Abby, giving her 30 days to move

Not a bad story but spoiled for me by some silly and very basic spelling errors. Two examples: Abi was in an induced "coma", not a "comma"; and the bad guys had an external "accomplice", not an "accomplish". You've told a decent tale here, VF, but it would be so much better if edited to eliminate these errors.

You are wrong about tenants rights. There are a very few cities in US where tenants have rights but there is no recourse if a lease holder or renter choses to lock out a room mate regardless of length of tenancy. Housing Law is one of my specialties & if you believe tenants have legal rights I'd love to have some of the weed you're smoking.

For anyone that might be thinking the bad guys could get out of this with a light sentence, I would like to reassure you that they are totally screwed. The old video of Emma that was mentioned... She would have been 17 at the time, that means the three of them are in the hook for possession and distribution of child porn at the very least. That's pretty much game over for Ana and Donovan even if they manage to dodge the jail time.

Congratulations on your story. Especially at the last chapters I couldn't stop reading. Very interesting and quite original - from my point of view. Thank you. Keep writing! You should maybe consider publish it as a book.

BRILLIANT. Can't thank you enough for the length of this story. In the near future if there happens to be a sequel or anything.... Would be fantastic.

I am actually imagining how the 2 main character interact in my mind and since there are some plot here that can be use as a sequel hoping you'll do one.

I very much enjoy your writing, however the editing leaves something to be desired. Apart from more obvious errors (using the wrong character name in a couple places, such as referring to Emma as Abigail when she is in the waiting room at one point), numerous grammatical errors distract from the story (still worthy of 5 stars)

Examples include, but are not limited to:

Using "coached" (to train/teach) when you mean "coaxed" (to elicit a response)

Using "contempt" (disgust/hatred) when you mean "content" (happy)

Using "nuisance" (bother) when you mean "nuance" (levels of meaning)

Etcetera

I sincerely hope you continue writing, however I would urge you to see if you could find a more reliable editor to iron out these wrinkles.

Enjoyed reading each page of this story (it took a few days) hope we have more to come it would be interesting to advance a couple of years to see how the young ladies are

BYKERLAD

I kinda liked the happy sigh of contempt; mixed signals are best signals.

I had to read this in two sittings, it's a little longer than I'm used to. It's an amazing story with a great ending.

Awesome story.

I honestly can't rave enough about the pure delight it was to read this. Each character not only had a "life" but grew, as any normal human does in rough or new situations. Spot on development.

My only concerns are with the editing. With any free website and story done without compensation, I expect errors (we're all human). However, Lit has a ton of people willing to edit (and do damn near professional jobs). There were a few word-choice errors (peak vs peek, etc), a few mistaken names (Abigail for Emma despite Abi being in the hospital), and some inconsistencies (primarily the dress - one moment Emma claims she hasn't worn one since 5 with Jasmine on it, the next page it's 9 and completely different). These all add up. Every little error snowballs, and with enough, it leaves the reader feeling awkward - we just read a charming little story, but it was peppered with quite numerous errors. It really detracted from the overall experience.

So I hope that you continue to write, but take the time to extensively self edit, or best case, get a good editor.

I hope to read more from you!

This is one of the best stories that i have read in a very long time! Loved your previous stories too! Please come up with more soon! Waiting to read many more from you!

Lots of luck and wishes!

Excellent story-telling.

Would have loved a longer more drawn out ending with the added stress of a show down with Ana and of course, with Abi's ex. Didn't get where the ex's gripe was coming from. Did find the University's reaction a bit too happy-ending but then I'm a sucker for happy endings..

Hope there's a part 2 as you certainly have the material there to make it work.

Keep up the excellent work and don't worry about the editing 😜

This was a fantastic story I have just read to-day will you write a follow up so we know what happened to the two students and Abi's EX did they get jail sentences great read all 14 pages, thank you VF.

Love this so much but there is one question about it. Donovan was part of all the .. revenge but why did want to be apart of it? By rights Emma had done nothing to him except sleep with him the once. He should be thanking her with his drunk small half limp dick she had to put up with so I don't understand why he would be apart of it? The other two I understand. Anyhoooooooooo great story. Great characters. Great writing. 5* isn't enough.

I wish we had a more cathartic wrap up in terms of the antagonists. A lot of loose ends there which I think could have made a longer and even better story. With that said, I think Abi and Emm were such great characters that I would have read about them reading the newspaper. Great story. 5 Stars plus.

rushed at the end. words matter - way too many homophone typos in this. Needed an editor.

I really enjoyed it. I’m glad the unpleasantness was short lived. Their love is awesome. Thanks.

Really great story! I agree there are quite a few typos (or use of the wrong word? Discreet/discrete, peek/peak etc.) but the dialogue is lively and natural (apart from a few too many "baby girl"s towards the end!) the plot is good and the sex superbly detailed and sensitive. A cool 5*

If you're going to write a story about academia, you really need to avoid making mistakes your characters would never make. Not knowing the difference between peek and peak, pal and pall, and up to five ellipses in just one sentence is not tolerable in their world. Try Grammarly, if you don't want to find an editor. There's a free version.

Fixing the errors would be well worthwhile, because this is a very good story!

A good story of lust and love but I didn't enjoy this as much as Love Me, Please. There were some very good scenes with the two central characters, but the whole revenge/extortion plot was muddled. How did Alexa get involved with the other two, and if her aim was extortion why did she try to kill or injure Abigail? Also their problems with the university authorities went away far too easily.

That was a 10. But I could only give you a 5. Sorry.

I don't (and won't) comment on typos (spelling or grammar). This is not a typo-free kind of publication environment. If you want professionally edited works, go to Amazon—and pay for them. Here I'm looking exclusively for character and story development. Those are what make a 5, not perfect editing.

The modern world of crap spelling checkers and clueless grammar checkers precludes that sort of product without extreme costs ($ or effort), which honestly does not benefit stories here. I'll choose ten good stories with typos over the one error-free story that the same effort would produce.

Commenters:

Be very careful about what you're asking your writers for here. Perfect craft means fewer stories—and no stories at all from many writers.

Which do you really want to choose?

A good story!