by HunterShambles
The story needed more details that would have given it more than a "PG" rating. Kind of a "Back To The Future," with a twist. Good science fiction, but not very stimulating.
I liked it very much. A bit disappointed that the entire seduction took place off story.
He must have had more contact with his mother when she was young. And maybe visit her through years. I miss that part....
And it's all a little bit rushed, the idea is good. I would suggest write it again, and this time a little bit longer, more details...